genetics

1 You do well in explaining foundational information, such as what genes even are, towards the beginning which I think the reader will appreciate. While you do make good points, I think it would be helpful to more directly connect these points with your specific gene. For example, you discuss many treatment methods such as bone marrow transplants and how they've been helpful medically. Maybe you could more directly tie in treatments with your gene? Or maybe how your gene is involved? This more direct connection will also help your text flow much better and the reader can just move from one point to the next (and you discuss very interesting points!). For your hypothesis, it might be better to use all the studies you’ve looked at and create a hypothesis that you think relates to all of them collectively or addresses any questions or “assumptions” that you've gathered from your sources. For the in-text citations, make sure you use the format of (first author, comma year in parentheses), or add "et al." after the first author's name if more than 2 authors are present. You have minor grammatical errors, but they can easily be fixed with one more read-through of your introduction. I especially think you did a good job in the beginning to give good background information on the function of a gene, so well done!

2 I think your discussion post is great! I do think you could use some images of just how your gene looks like. You did a great job with the hypothesis and also explaining it deeply. I do think maybe use more of your recourses a bit more. But other than that I think it’s looks great!

3Your introduction is great and I like how you talked about genes in general and then went to your gene. You went in depth about bone marrow transplants which is great but maybe you can explain more about what your gene does in the bone marrow. For the in-text citations, I see you used parenthesis for the year but not the author so you can use the format (first author, year). Your hypothesis is very well explained and I think adding an image/figure will help your readers understand your gene more and it brings the paper together. Overall, you did a great job.

4 The first two sentences are great, and it captured my attention because of my curiosity. I really like the broad aspect of your gene. However, I was looking forward to more detail about your gene. More intriguing facts to capture my attention. But overall, your intro and references are good. Good luck with everything.