cybercrime response

Here are a few examples of suggestions to make as a peer reader (make sure you identify which paragraph you're discussing): 

· The thesis needs to better identify the main point of the essay.  

· The topic sentence needs to identify the main point of this paragraph. 

· Each paragraph needs one overarching idea (or needs more specific evidence/needs more of the writer's commentary). 

· Avoid repeating words, repeating ideas, or repeating sentence structures. 

· Avoid using vague language or using slang. 

· Clearly identify your sources (if used)