Response essay to the book Picking Cotton by Jennifer Thompson- Cannino & Ronald Cotton

Response by Christian Disiere

Submission date: 10-Feb-2021 10:39PM (UTC-0600) Submission ID: 1506875957 File name: pickingcotton.docx (26.6K) Word count: 1083 Character count: 5196

nice start! click the blue FEEDBACK SUMMARY button on the right to see the rubric and additional notes

indent should be 1/2"

Title Format

Comma missing

Series structure

remove extra space after paragraph good!

Cite

good!

good!

you also talk about guilt/shame

You only are required to discuss 3 things, so you might be able to combine a couple things here - for example, the guilt/shame may be able to be combined with forgiveness if we think along the lines of Jennifer either forgiving herself or being able to move past the guilt/shame to seek forgiveness from Ronald. As you've noticed, they are all somewhat linked!

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4% SIMILARITY INDEX

1% INTERNET SOURCES

0% PUBLICATIONS

4% STUDENT PAPERS

1 3% 2 2%

Exclude quotes Off

Exclude bibliography Off

Exclude matches Off

Response ORIGINALITY REPORT

PRIMARY SOURCES

Submitted to Cochise College Student Paper

Submitted to San Jacinto College District Student Paper

FINAL GRADE

43/50 Response GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

Grading Rubric

Introduction (10): 10 Works Cited (10): 10 Quotations (10): 5 Length (10): 10 MLA (10): 8

Intro/Summary/Thesis

-Introduce all three authors with their full names. After that, refer to them by last name only

-Very nice high-level summary!!

-consider introducing the themes you are going to be responding to either in between the summary and the thesis or in the thesis. If it's too bulky, what you have here is good, as it gives the reader an idea of what's to come

Works Cited

-Publisher missing

-remove "Print"

-don't list every author. See the rules for multiple authors:

https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla_formatting_and_style_guide/mla_works_cited_page_books.html

Body Paragraphs/Quotes

-Required: 1 direct quotation in each body paragraph. Good work with the paraphrase, but see if you can combine it with short 4-8 word quotations

QM

QM

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Length

-good!

MLA -see notes in the essay

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Text Comment. nice start!

Text Comment. click the blue FEEDBACK SUMMARY button on the right to see the rubric and additional notes

Text Comment. indent should be 1/2"

Title Format short works = quotes long works = italics

Comma missing comma missing

Verb This verb may be incorrect. Proofread the sentence to make sure you have used the correct form of the verb.

Series structure The structure of your series (aka list) is off.

Missing "," Review the rules for using punctuation marks.

Sp. This word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proofread your work.

Text Comment. remove extra space after paragraph

Text Comment. good!

QM Cite Improper citation: Improperly cited material. Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/citing-sources/citation-styles Additional Comment

with the change in the Works Cited entry, this will change too

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Text Comment. good!

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

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Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Text Comment. you also talk about guilt/shame

Text Comment. You only are required to discuss 3 things, so you might be able to combine a couple things here - for example, the guilt/shame may be able to be combined with forgiveness if we think along the lines of Jennifer either forgiving herself or being able to move past the guilt/shame to seek forgiveness from Ronald. As you've noticed, they are all somewhat linked!

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Prep. You may be using the wrong preposition.

P/V You have used the passive voice in this sentence. You may want to revise it using the active voice.

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