People face trade-offs

Started: Aug 30, 2021 Submitted: Aug 30, 2021

People Face Trade-offs Raciel Vera

Essay

One of the hardest things to do in life is to make decisions, and we face them every day. As soon as we get up from bed every morning, we decide

whether to check our phone first or go to the table and eat our breakfast. But one thing before that, I should complete the first four courses. Three

are required courses and an elective course.

As an economics student, my three last essential courses involved are Mathematical Economics, Public Economics, and International Economics,

though my listed electives are Development Economics, Monetary Economics, and Industrial Organization. I am a candidate and expected to

graduate after the last semester, and I hope to be employed and manage a bank after I graduate. (Max Power, 2017) Through no choice, I need to

take up the three required courses and add only one elective course to graduate on time. I have selected to take up Monetary Economics for I see it

as a beneficial course that will support me do my job soon. The two sacrificed courses were also beneficial but on other features.

The first principle is the trade-off or the opportunity cost.

In this case, I have chosen between receiving the three basic courses and one elective to graduate or get the three electives that I find very

beneficial but not be able to graduate yet as mandated. But as a scholar, I have followed the rulings of the school, so I might graduate and work in a

bank soon. It includes the trade-off that I have to give up something (3 electives) to get something I want (to graduate and work soon). What I gave

up on is named the opportunity cost.

Second principle: Trade could make everybody better off

By the kind of trade-off I have made, I will graduate on time and get a diploma soon, so I will get the job I need soon. I become better off with my

decision. I gain from it.

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Focus

Revision Goal 1: Establish and maintain a controlling idea or bottom line throughout the document in order to achieve the purpose established in your writing

prompt.

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"Telecommuting allows employees to more efficiently manage their busy schedules."

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benefit is that traffic congestion in a community is reduced."

Revision Goal 2: Understand and connect with the intended audience.

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responsibilities of all employees--those who smoke, those who are trying to quit, and those who do not smoke."

Content

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diversity will help presenters in demonstrating 'cloud computing' to certified network specialists differently than they would to fifth graders."

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"Private debt."

"Economy."

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Organization

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1. Re-read your document. Highlight sentences that could serve as the controlling idea or bottom line. You may also write a new sentence if you wish.

Example: Elsie's document is disorganized, but once she reads it again, she finds the sentence she wants to use as a controlling idea: "Adopting the free and

open source operating system (FOSS) will hinder the ability of our teen youth group to function."

2. Now that you have the controlling idea or bottom line of your document, brainstorm support for it. This support will become the bottom line or controlling

idea of the paragraphs in your document.

Example: Elsie can think of three ways that adopting the FOSS can hinder the ability a teen youth group to function. The first is that time spent learning FOSS

could be better used doing other things. The mainstream operating system is already familiar to everyone, so there is no training needed for it. In addition, the

mainstream operating system (MOS) has a 24-hour support staff, as opposed to the volunteers that offer "support" for the FOSS. Finally, using the MOS in an

office environment will give teens a valuable job skill, as opposed to the FOSS, which is used by only a small fraction of companies.

3. For each paragraph, brainstorm at least three supporting details.

Example: Elsie decides to start with the comparative value of the MOS and the FOSS to teens about to enter the job market. She brainstorms the following

supporting details:

"Employers all over the world use MOS as a matter of course."

"Few employers use FOSS."

"Employers value job candidates who can use the MOS expertly."

"Only a few value those that can program the FOSS."

"Most of our clients (and employees) are not capable of programming the FOSS but are capable of using the MOS."

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the free and open source software (FOSS) will hinder one of our group's goals, which is to help troubled teens find employment. Most companies are looking

for experienced users of the MOS, not the FOSS. In addition, those companies looking for experience with FOSS want job candidates who can program the

FOSS, not just use it. Unfortunately, we do not have the expertise or time to teach our clients or our staff or volunteers to program the FOSS. To adopt it would

greatly distract us from our goal of finding our clients jobs."

Language

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separately, the second one was a fragment.

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that passage: "A restaurant owner must have sufficient cash reserves to survive economic downturns and other emergencies. Without that reserve, the first

unexpected event may force the owner to close the restaurant."

Mechanics

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Network to improve your understanding of mechanics and conventions.

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When you rewrite your document, pay attention to your sentences to avoid errors in mechanics and conventions.

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