Annotated Bibliography
Final Research Essay Rubric.pdf
COMM19999 – Summer 2021
FINAL RESEARCH ESSAY (25%)
Due: Week 12
This project is the final stage of a research and writing process that incorporates your work on the
Annotated Bibliography and the Oral Presentation/Response. You MUST USE THE SAME
TOPIC THAT YOU HAVE CHOSEN FOR YOUR ANNOTATED BIBLIOGRAPHY,
PROPOSAL, AND PRESENTATION.
• You will be required to analyze and discuss in this research paper – IT SHOULD NOT JUST BE A PRESENTATION OF FACTS/EVIDENCE!
• It is your choice on whether you would like to explore an informative/expository or persuasive/argumentative thesis.
Construct a paper that contains the following elements:
o APA style title page o Introduction (purpose, scope, background) → Include focus question and thesis
(within paragraph).
o Main discussion section: 5-10 paragraphs of development, examples, evidence, expert testimony (graphs, charts, tables if applicable could be placed in
Appendices)
o Closing section - conclusion(s), restatement of findings o APA style reference page that includes a minimum of 5 research sources – 2 of
these must be academic (each source must be cited at least once in the paper)
o Appendices
Your paper should be formatted according to APA guidelines, meaning:
• Times New Roman, font size 12
• Double Spaced
• 1” Margins
NOTE: No more than 30% of the assignment can be another’s referenced words or ideas – if a
paper simply reassembles sources from elsewhere without the addition of your own thoughts,
then this constitutes a breach of academic honesty/integrity and could potentially result in a
mark of 0.
Final Research Essay Rubric 2.pdf
Final Paper Research Rubric
Worth 25%
Introduction /5
5 4 3 2 1 0
The introduction provides context for the paper. It includes
adequate background information, explains the purpose of the
paper (research question), discusses the scope and limitations
of the research, and previews the major sections of the paper. The thesis statement is clearly written and includes specific
mention of research and arguments which form the body of
the paper.
More detail is required when introducing
background information. Some further explanation
of the purpose of the paper and description of its
major sections may be needed. The student must
make the purpose/scope clearer. The thesis may be
present, but it may lack the detail or sophistication
necessary for a research paper. The research
question/purpose of the paper needs to be clarified.
Some background information is present but is insufficient.
The thesis statement is absent, unfocused, or unclear.
The student needs to work on developing a clearer thesis and
stronger arguments; as well as seek better means to outline
and preview a research paper.
Body
/15
Exceptional
15 14
Great
13 12 11
Good
10 9 8
Satisfactory
7 6 5
Needs Improvement
4 3 2
Poor
1 0
The body contains 4-6
coherent supporting
paragraphs. Paragraphs are
written in the 3rd person.
Research and attribution to
sources is managed with a
high degree of skill.
The paper flows well and all
ideas link back to the thesis or
research question.
The text’s ideas or arguments
are fully developed and are
supported by various forms of
evidence. Paper develops
discussion and analysis with a
high degree of sophistication.
APA citation and referencing
is near flawless. Visual data is
The body contains 4-6
supporting paragraphs.
An attempt has been made
to write in the 3rd person,
however, there are errors.
The essay flows capably
and most ideas link back
to the thesis or research
question. Ideas or
arguments are developed
but could use further
explanation/development
of discussion/analysis.
APA citation and
referencing is used with a
degree of skill. Visual
data is present but is not
incorporated into the
paper effectively.
The body contains only 2-3
supporting paragraphs.
Organization and paper
structure are evident, but is
convoluted. Some ideas are
linked cohesively, but not all
relate to the thesis or research
question. Ideas or arguments
are developed, but require
further explanation.
Discussion/analysis is
present, but inconsistent.
Further evidence may be
needed for support. APA may
not be used properly, but
consistent effort is made
throughout the paper to
reference and cite.
The body contains some
problems in organization
and paragraph structure.
The composition and
outline for a paper need
revision.
At times the paper may
seem to lose focus. Only
some headings are present.
Ideas or arguments are
only partially developed –
paper is mostly summary
with little discussion or
analysis. Further evidence
is needed for support.
Frequent and careless
errors are made with APA
citation, but effort has been
made to cite and reference.
Paragraph structure and
organization are weak.
Ideas or arguments are
present but not
developed. Ideas are not
adequately supported
by evidence. Paper
lacks analysis or
discussion, and more
than 30% of the paper
is others’ ideas or
words. Sources are not
properly cited, and
referencing is largely
incorrect. Paper may be
written in
argumentative essay
style as opposed to the
expository style
Paragraph structure and
organization are lacking.
Only some ideas or
arguments are present.
Paper lack logic and flow.
No quotations or
paraphrases have been used.
In text citation or reference
page are absent. Little to no
content of the paper is the
student’s own work/words
or ideas
Please note that failure to
provide in text citations or a
reference page constitutes
plagiarism and is subject to
Sheridan academic honesty
sanctions.
present and utilized in the
discussion.
Visual data is present, but is
not discussed, addressed,
and/or relevant to the
discussion.
Conclusion
/5
5 4 3 2 1 0
The conclusion contains effective topic, supporting, and
closing sentences. The thesis is restated. Suggestions or
recommendations for future research/investigation are stated
and explained.
The conclusion lacks some form of paragraph
structure (topic, supporting, or closing sentences).
The thesis is restated, but is unclear. Suggestions
or recommendations are not fully developed.
Conclusion is weak or not present. Paragraph structure may
be lack, thesis may not be present. Suggestions for future
research/investigation are not present.
APA Title Page /5
Reference Page – five (5) sources minimum in proper APA style /5
1 mark deducted per error
Grammar, Punctuation, Spelling, Sentence Structure /15
1 mark deducted per major error
In-Text Citation/Documentation (APA style) /10
1 mark deducted per incorrect error
TOTAL: /60
Steps for Improvement (If Necessary):
☐Review the thesis writing process ☐Consult an APA/MLA handbook regarding referencing
☐Work of flow between paragraphs ☐Work on communicating ideas concisely and continuously connecting those ideas to the thesis
☐Work on grammatical/spelling issues ☐Work on using/incorporating evidence more effectively
☐Discussion and analysis need development ☐Paper relies too heavily on evidence/ideas of others
☐Work on structure and organization of the paper ☐Other: _____________________________________
Professor Recommendations (If Necessary):
☐Consult the Library ☐Consult the writing center
☐Tutoring recommended ☐See me for further discussion
Final Research Essay Sample.pdf
THE FAILURE OF DRUG PROHIBITION 1
The Failure of Drug Prohibition or:
How I Learned to Start Worrying and Hate the War on Drugs
Matthew Page
Sheridan College
THE FAILURE OF DRUG PROHIBITION 2
Abstract
“The War on Drugs”, and idea so polarizing, it is no surprise that it carries the bloodied
title of “War.” Many different people have many different opinions about it, opinions across the
spectrum of thought, from believing that it was the best thing to have ever come from a
governing body, to the single greatest tragedy of modern human history. While the truth of the
matter lies at neither one extreme nor the other, it is quite apparent that this politically motivated
war is far worse for everyone than its perpetuators would have anticipated.
Keywords: war on drugs, drug addiction
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The Failure of Drug Prohibition or: How I Learned to Start Worrying and Hate the War
on Drugs
Introduction
Though what is the war on drugs exactly? Simply put, the war on drugs is a collection of
government policies and initiatives from various nations around the world, prohibiting the
production, possession, and/or consumption of a wide variety of drugs that are deemed illicit.
According to Fulkerson & Mohammad (2011), Kursgesagt (2016), Wild (2013), and Wodak
(2014) this policy first came into full force when implemented by U.S. President Richard Nixon
in the early 1970’s. According to Wodak (2014) this policy has been punitive and it put a very
heavy emphasis on criminal action (para. 5). While it aught to have been a primarily domestic
policy for the U.S., the war on drugs was, through pressure from the U.S., adopted by many other
nations around the world; Australia (Wodak, 2014) and Pakistan (Fulkerson & Mohammad,
2011) to name a few.
How does the war on drugs work? “The core strategy of the war on drugs is ‘No Drugs =
No Problems.’” (Kursgesagt, 2016) This means that the primary course of action is to attempt to
reduce the supply of illicit drugs available to the consumer, thereby preventing the consumer
from being able to obtain the drugs they want. Also, policy dictates the arrest, prosecution, and
incarceration of both drug suppliers and drug users, thereby attempting to discourage both the
production and the consumption of illicit drugs.
Is the war on drugs really such a bad thing though? In this paper, it will be demonstrated
that yes, the war on drugs is, in fact, bad government policy. The war on drugs is ineffective at
fixing the problems it was intended to fix, it in fact, exacerbated these very same concerns, and
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worse still, it created a plethora of new problems that need to be dealt with as soon as possible
and would have originally had nothing to do with the problem of illicit drugs.
Section One: Problems not fixed
At its core, the war on drugs make absolutely no sense economically. The war uses all its
resources on reducing the supply of drugs available but doing so without also lowering the
demand for drugs will raise the price for drugs sharply. Now when this happens with other
products, the rise in price would reduce the demand as fewer people are willing to pay more
money for the same thing, but this is not the case for drugs. As Kurzgesagt (2016) and Powell
(2013) state, drugs are not “price sensitive,” most consumers of drugs would continue to
consume them regardless of how much it would cost them. (See appendix A-1)
Since drugs are more expensive with the war on them in full force, and consumers are
still purchasing drugs at nearly the same rate, drug production is significantly more lucrative then
it ever had been before the war. With the war in place, even when existing suppliers are arrested,
the potential for profit is so high that new producer will invariably come in to fulfill the lingering
demand and ultimately the supply to the consumer isn’t reduced at all. (Kurzgesagt, 2016)
(Powell, 2013) (Wild, 2013)
Section Two: Problems made worse
Obviously, one goal of the war on drugs is to reduce the harm drugs have on people. In
this regard, the war has failed spectacularly. As a direct consequence of the war, drugs are in fact
more potent, increasing the risk of overdosing, and more likely to contain harmful additives.
Like during the era of alcohol prohibition, drugs are more profitable in higher concentrations as
they would take up less space, making them easier to transport, and hide away from the
authorities. (Kurzgesagt, 2016) (Powell, 2013) Also since drug production is unregulated, and
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drug use illegal, consumers have no legal recourse when their providers cut the drugs with
potentially harmful fillers. Additionally, with the illegality of their habit, drug users are mostly
unable to “shop around” for dealers, thereby giving dealers no reason to adopt more consumer-
friendly practices. (such as providing safer drugs)
In another video by Kurzgesagt, (2015) the nature of addiction is discussed. To
summarise, humans need to bond with others and when circumstances prevent them from
creating healthy bonds, they will find something to bond with to satisfy this need, and drugs are
very popular for this. So, when we take existing addicts and incarcerate them, it becomes even
harder for these addicts to form healthier bonds, therefore pushing them even further into their
addiction. (Fulkerson & Mohammad, 2011) (Kurzgesagt, 2016)
Section Three: New problems created
The most disturbing aspect of the war on drugs is the fact that it creates new, serious
problems of its own. The more well known of these is the global increase in violent crime around
the world. Interestingly, violent crime is commonly thought to have always gone together with
the drug trade, but this is not the case. Before the drug war, producers would be able to use the
legal system to settle disputes among each other, but now that their business is illegal their only
viable tool for resolution is violence. Homicide rates in the US and many participating countries
around the world have climbed since their implementation of the war on drugs, and Mexico is
going through what basically constitutes a civil-war, with death tolls dwarfing those of other
warzones during the same period. (Fulkerson & Mohammad, 2011) (Kurzgesagt, 2016.
Timestamp: 3:47-4:00) (Wild, 2013) (Wodak, 2014)
Additionally, the war on drugs and other related government policies in the U.S., have
created the new problem of mass incarceration. With the U.S.’s hardline approach, many non-
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violent drug users are thrown in jail, and they linger in jail for far longer than would seem
reasonable due to government-dictated mandatory minimum sentencing. The extra long
sentences do little to deter drug-use or production, and their lives are effectively ruined; spending
years separated from society, and having many limitations placed on them even after they have
completed their sentences. (Green, 2014) (Kurzgesagt, 2016)
Conclusion
The War on Drugs was ill-conceived, misguided, and harmful to many people and
nations. It continues to be harmful; the problems it fails to fix, and the problems it creates, get
progressively worse as time goes on. This failure of government policy, which was designed to
fix a problem that hadn’t been very big at the time it had started, needs to be killed.
Notwithstanding enacting policies that work to “fix” the problem of drug addiction, such as harm
reduction, simply ending the war on drugs will, in the author’s opinion, have a monumentally
positive effect on the safety and stability of the world. After all, the war on drugs: fixes nothing,
makes everything worse, and creates even more problems, reversing this policy stands to be the
only logical course of action left.
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References
Green, J. (2014) Mass Incarceration in the US. www.youtube.com. Retrieved from
https://youtu.be/NaPBcUUqbew
Fulkerson, G., Mohammad, F. (2011) The Failure of the War on Drugs: A Comparative
Perspective. Pakistan Journal of Criminology. Retrieved from
http://go.galegroup.com.library.sheridanc.on.ca/ps/i.do?p=EAIM&u=ko_acd_shc&id=G
ALE|A310207514&v=2.1&it=r&sid=summon&authCount=1
Kurzgesagt. (2015) Addiction. www.youtube.com. Retrieved from https://youtu.be/ao8L-0nSYzg
Kurzgesagt. (2016). Why The War on Drugs Is a Huge Failure. www.youtube.com.
Retrieved from https://youtu.be/wJUXLqNHCaI
Powell, B. (2013) The Economics Behind the U.S. Government's Unwinnable War on Drugs
Library of Economics and Liberty. Retrieved from
http://www.econlib.org/library/Columns/y2013/Powelldrugs.html
Wild, J. (2013) Epic failure: the uncomfortable truth about the United States' role in the failure of
the global war on drugs and how it is going to fix it. Retrieved from
http://go.galegroup.com.library.sheridanc.on.ca/ps/i.do?p=AONE&u=ko_acd_shc&id=G
ALE|A366863625&v=2.1&it=r&sid=summon&authCount=1
Wodak, A. (2014) The Abject Failure of Drug Prohibition. Australian & New Zealand Journal of
Criminology. Retrieved from
http://journals.sagepub.com.library.sheridanc.on.ca/doi/full/10.1177/0004865814524424
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Appendix A-1
(Chart 1: Supply and Demand chart for drug market. Powell, B. 2013)
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Annotated Bibliography on Brain simulation as part of an Artificial Intelligence project
Shapshak, P. (2018). Artificial Intelligence and brain. Bioinformation, 14(01), 038–041. https://doi.org/10.6026/97320630014038
This article by Shapshak (2018) presents information about a research on Artificial Intelligence and Brain Simulation. Based on the author view, Artificial Intelligence is going rapid development, introducing new solutions every day. The article points out the various elements of Artificial Intelligence, which includes multitudes of human made languages, systems, and methodologies that are implemented with computer technology. In addition, the article presents how biological integration with Artificial Intelligence is presenting various solutions human beings. Specific, integration with functions of brain neurons, is presenting new evolution to human era. Reviewing the credibility of the article, it is well grounded by other scholarly articles. In addition, the presented evidence closely relates to what other scholars present about the research.
The primary reason for selecting the article, it will help to form a good background research for the topic. The article presents how AI is fueled by the simulation and study on the functions of neurons. In addition, the article presents various significances of brain simulation as an AI. Also, the article relates to my research topic on brain simulation as part of Artificial Intelligence. I intend to use the article particularly to answer the research question of my research, “Is the brain simulation a useful model for Artificial Intelligence?”. For instance, the article identifies that brain simulation could help treating brain diseases. There are no biases identifiable in the article, which makes it more credible for use in my research. However, the conclusions presented does not summarize what the article was about.
Beckers, S. (2017, November). AAAI: an argument against artificial intelligence. In 3rd Conference on" Philosophy and Theory of Artificial Intelligence (pp. 235-247). Springer, Cham. https://sanderbeckers.github.io/website/sander/articles/AAAI-preprint.pdf
This peer reviewed article by Beckers (2017) presents various counter arguments about Artificial Intelligence. The article is about the ethical concerns, which relates to the successful implementation of the Artificial Intelligence. Based on the author’s view, there are various issues, which are requiring attention such as how AI is causing extreme human suffering. The article identifies that human are suffering since the wake of Artificial Intelligence. For instance, the use of AI is threatening the future of human beings, where it can become super intelligent compared to human beings. The article presents that Brain Simulation, as part of AI projects would result to creation of artificial intelligence with conscious, which can be a disaster to the human’s futures.
The reason for choosing this article, it presents counterarguments to my research topic. This article identifies how dangerous AI is to human being, particularly, on including brain simulation. For instance, the developed computers with conscious will now learn new things just like human beings and become more super intelligent far from human brain. Reviewing the credibility of the article, the author has supported his arguments with other peer-reviewed articles, which makes it more credible. In addition, the findings relates to other researches as well. I intend to use the article in my research topic to presents some counterarguments on the usefulness of brain simulation as part of Artificial intelligence. Also, the article will form a good background for the research. There are no identifiable biases in the article, which makes it more credible for use in my research.
Amunts, K., Knoll, A. C., Lippert, T., Pennartz, C. M., Ryvlin, P., Destexhe, A., ... & Bjaalie, J. G. (2019). The Human Brain Project—Synergy between neuroscience, computing, informatics, and brain-inspired technologies. PLoS biology, 17(7), e3000344.
This peer-reviewed article by Amunts et al. (2019) is about human brain projects. In specific, the article presents how Human Brain Project (HBP), has been useful to human being. Specific, the article identifies that the project has helped to transfer the acquired knowledge in health sector. HBP integrates the empirical neuroscience in the human’s brain, to Information Technology (IT), helping to develop new health interventions. One of these health interventions is developing technology, which can help in imaging the malformations of the patient’s brain, helping in surgery or seizure prediction. Reviewing the credibility of the article, it is well grounded by peer-reviewed articles. In addition, the article has images supporting the arguments presented by the author. In addition, the findings of the research relates to other scholarly findings, which makes it more credible.
The primary reason for selecting the article, it would be useful to form a strong background research for my topic. In addition, the article presents various significances of human simulation as part of Artificial Intelligence. I will use the article to support how brain simulation has been useful to human being. In addition, the article has important information, which will be useful to support discussions questions. For instance, there are various models of brain simulation in the article. There are no identifiable biases in the article, which makes it more credible to use. For instance, the findings of the study are valid. In addition, the conclusions presents the summary of the research. In overall, the article is credible, two years old and has significant information, which will be useful in the research.
Wu, Y. (2019, November). Research on the Development of Integration of Neuroscience and Artificial Intelligence. In IOP Conference Series: Earth and Environmental Science (Vol. 384, No. 1, p. 012007). IOP Publishing.
This peer article by Yue Wu (2019) presents a research on artificial intelligence, and how it integration with neuroscience. The article presents the history of Artificial Intelligence and how it have developed over the years. The presents that the recent development of Artificial intelligence involves development of the Cognitive Science and Neuroscience, which aims in developing the machines to be able to realize various human cognitive abilities, improving their intelligence levels and cognitive behaviours. The article identifies that there is potential use of brain-like intelligence, where it applications could have far-reaching impacts to human beings. Reviewing the credibility of the article, it has strong background from other scholarly articles. Also, the findings are closely linked to other researches, which makes it more credible.
The primary reason for selecting this article, it is closely related to my research questions. In addition, it presents the historic development of the Artificial Intelligence, including it’s recent development on brain simulation. This will help to write a good introduction about Artificial Intelligence, including how it have been used for the past few years and its future projections. In addition, it will provide a good source for answering and supporting discussions in my research. There are no identifiable biases in the article. All the research findings are valid as they relate to other scholarly works. In addition, the author presents original work, which is not available in other scholars work. In other words, the article is not plagiarized from other scholarly work, which makes it a credible source to use in the research.
Perez, J. A., Deligianni, F., Ravi, D., & Yang, G. Z. (2018). Artificial intelligence and robotics. arXiv preprint arXiv:1803.10813, 1.
This article presents a research on artificial intelligence and robotics. This article was written by four authors, Dr. Javier, Dr Fani, Dr. Daniele, and Prof. Dr. Guang-Zhong. This article provides the origin of AI, and how it has evolved for the last 60 years. Some of the evolution of AI identified in the article include the rise of deep learning, computer vision, and machine learning. As identified in the article, AI has undergone various seasons, which has brought fears on its impact to the society. The article identifies that there are legal and ethical challenges related to Artificial Intelligence, which particularly affects its progress. Some of these challenges include wrongful use of AI, civil rights, legal responsibility, jobs, and privacy. However, the authors presents that AI has it importances, which could have adverse significance to peoples’ lives and economy.
The major reason for selecting this article, it has some counterarguments relating to the research topic. The authors’ presents that Artificial Intelligence has resulted to various problems such as job loss, and could have potential negative impacts in future. This applies that the current development of integrating AI with brain simulation could make the machines more intelligent. I will use the article to provide a good background for the research, including the negative impacts of AI on the society. Reviewing some of the credibility of the article, it well supported with peer reviewed articles, which makes it more credible source for the research. There are no identifiable biases in the article. In addition, the article is very current, which makes it more important for the research.