English essay 2

2. Having good writing skills is essential in carrying out business globally hence is a factor of great value irrespective of the geographical limits in existence in the world.

3. In the present age of technology, television and radio have become an obsolete way of advertising (Denise G.)

4. Another advantage is that it is open for general response and discussions.

5. Writing has always been a dominant mode of communication.

The obsolescence of television and radio, as well as certain characteristics of writing having to do with record keeping and analysis of data are excellent aspects of an argument about the role of professional writing skills in the industry. But they don’t fall under the portmanteau you suggest in the introduction. To keep these components of the discussion in play, look for a unifying remark to integrate them into the opening framework. Or find a way to integrate these elements of the discussion into core focus area.

Part 2 – Development

You’ve effectively developed a strong thesis, but it’s spread out over several sentences and takes a little too much time to state. By condensing the three sentences you use here, into one, you can organize the expectations of your readers to anticipate the flow of your argument. For example- Excellent writing skills determine the credibility and quality of marketing campaigns, improve communication within the workplace and expand the career prospects of professionals across the global marketplace. Packaging the whole arc of your assessment into one well-turned delivery like this will make your ideas more assimilable to the audience. It also makes it easier to steer the development of the body.

A strength you want to be sure to maintain in the revision is the way you implicitly address and deal with counter arguments.

Focus on adding transitions and connecting logic between sections. Refine the thesis statement and order the body of the paper so it follows through on the logic suggested in the introduction and thesis. If the point is that professional writing skills give you an advantage in the professional business world, emphasize that aspect of your theme by constructing phrases and using modifying remarks to carry the thread of that narrative from start to finish.

Part 3 – Formatting and Style

The voice is confident and credible, rallying relevant and sufficient evidence in support of its claims, but looses power from lack of structure. Grammatical errors were not an issue. The key area to focus attention on in the revision is on the organization and development of the body.

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