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Car Talk

Safwan Alhawsawi

Dr. Dilara AVCI

ENGL 108

2/12/2023

Why Are Chinese Students Studying Internationally with More Cruising Cars?

Most Chinese students attending Michigan State University have more cruising cars on

the streets. The contradiction of what is referred to as "car talk" manifests the luxury cars.

Chinese undergraduates possess a deindustrializing car assembly in town. The article aimed to

explore how China's more extensive auto mobility and utilization settings have influenced

Chinese students' rising presence on American campuses and their propensity to buy expensive

cars. The value system in China and the United States on the culture of cars and class

performance in purchasing and automobile processes. The dual connotations associated with

automobiles as a symbol of wealth and a practical product are reflected in the "car talk" that

emerges when two worlds, China and the United States, collide at Michigan university(Louie &

Qin, 2019). Chinese young students glance at a U.S. educational program to acquire a college

degree, create global online platforms, and gain professional exposure. In contrast, educators

from Michigan seek to achieve, establish, and move further than middle-class prestige in

economic growth. Although Chinese students buying foreign cars is not exclusive to Michigan,

historical and regional conflicts influence the unique circumstances under which Chinese

students acquire and operate these automobiles.

Additionally, the most exciting point is the industrialization in Michigan that has been

brought about by the students from China and the United States, both in the middle and upper

class, in search of education. The country's economic reconfiguration brought on by

deindustrialization and exporting, as well as the anti-Asian attitudes that have followed the fear

of rivalry from foreign automobile manufacturers, are all related to Michigan inhabitants'

perceptions of China and the Chinese culture. The neoliberal economic policies have destabilized

the Michigan industry, contributing to the rise of Chinese consumption (Louie & Qin, 2019). The

underfunding of government universities in the United States and the intense competition for

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college admission. The enormous number of Chinese overseas students is an outcome of the

educational system in China paired with the aspiration of upper-class Chinese households to

allow their children to acquire higher education in the West.

The problematic state of the car talk is what happened in 2012, where Many Chinese

student vehicles were stationed outside the place in schools. The phrase "go home to China" was

reportedly painted Chinese on a building site. The Critiques of Chinese students dictated that

overindulgence of the latter, are intertwined with pro-government emotions with a subtext of

ethnic distinction. The Chinese students to show off their status, utilitarianism is the main reason

for the ouches of expensive cars like the BMW. According to the car talk that surrounds Chinese

students, by purchasing expensive vehicles, they are putting on a front to show off their lifestyle.

This inspires Students who plan to attend college one day to want to do so at their expense rather

than through financial assistance from their families. I agree that purchasing of luxury cars by

International Chinese students has been increasing and has excited the media headlines For

example, statistically; the International student's purchase rate stands at 10% to 20% from the

Sales collection of Okemos. I agree with the data that many Chinese students own flashy high-

end vehicles. The stereotypical perspective on Chinese is that they are wealthy and drives a fancy

car hence all students purchase Mercedes and BMW.

I agree that most Chinese take their children to international schools to study abroad. In

addition, the higher demand for international students is their native nature of being the cash

cows and increased income inflow. The higher demand for chines e graduates has rapidly

increased in international schools and colleges. For example, the number has increased

statistically from 43 to 3687 from 2004 to 2016 (Louie & Qin, 2019). The growing desire to

study internationally resulted from various issues, such as finding suitable domestic programs.

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The ability of the Chinese economy to expand quickly enough to generate good powerful

positions to hire the highly qualified and aspirational primitives that the strict educational system

and the one-child rule had generated. Families must plan to maximize their future economy by

attempting to create international varieties of social capital overseas as China has become more

privatized. The historical and cultural impact of vehicles in Michigan is attached to notions of

cultural and racial uniformity, local democracy, and virility. Mainly American-made cars are

seen as efficient and affordable. Even though Chinese international students have not

experienced the blatant violence and bigotry that led to Vincent Chin's murder, a phobia of alien

rivalry is still prevalent in Michigan's political and cultural debates.

In conclusion, one can only comprehend the significance of owning a particular kind of

car considering the financial commitment as Chinese parents have committed to the prospects of

their offspring. Chinese parents frequently prioritize protection while transporting their only

youngsters across the seas. Chinese Parents believe that possessing a safe vehicle gives their

youngsters an assurance of safety that will ensure their academic achievement. Therefore,

whereas American students may like to own a good car after finishing their education and

finding a job and good work; for Chinese families and their children, it is an opportunity to

invest in the potential achievement of their children.

References

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Louie, A., & Qin, D. B. (2019). ‘Car Talk’: automobility and Chinese international

students in Michigan. Identities, 26(2), 146-164.

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