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AA’s Problem Essay Outline: DEPARTURE OF STANDARDS DURING EMERGENCIES Good.

I. Intro

A. Attention Getter: How does a meritorious active duty service member with an impeccable record, choose to commit a misdemeanor by disobeying a state governor’s executive order? Comment by Christopher: Good AG!

B. Motivation: Service members must comply with military standards, regulations, and local city and state laws in order to be successful leaders and set the example of professional excellence in order to earn promotion. Comment by Christopher: No good. Who should be “Senior Enlisted Leaders must ensure compliance...” Otherwise good.

C. Overview: This essay will discuss the background of military standards and the negative impact that can arise from service members obeying those standards but inadvertently disobeying local laws. Comment by Christopher: No good. Not Background, Problem. Review PE 2-02-2. Comment by Christopher: No good. Not Impact, Discussion of the Problem and a Recommended Solution. Review PE 2-02-2

II. Body

A. Main point 1: Background Not Background, Problem.

1. Commanders have the authority to deviate from standards during emergencies in various examples, such as procurement or wearing of uniforms, physical fitness tests, and grooming standards.

2. During the COVID-19 pandemic and to abide by social distancing restrictions, the Commandant of the Marine Corps canceled the physical fitness test and suspended the circumference measurements as part of the body composition program.

3. The congressional representative from Maryland, Jamie Raskin sent a letter to the Marine Corps Commandant asking him to ease grooming standards so that Marines are not unnecessarily exposed to the COVID-19 virus while getting haircuts. Comment by Christopher: ½ good. I see a Background, but see very little articulation/no Problem identified out front. Per PE 2-02-2, State the problem the student identified. The problem lays the foundation to explain the impact and recommendation. Include background information if needed to clarify the main topic.

Transition sentence from MP1 to MP2: Understanding the background of military standards and the negative impact that can arise from both departing and upholding those standards on service members can have a negative impact on their careers, particularly if they commit a misdemeanor. Comment by Christopher: No good. Problem, not Background. “Understanding the problem of not departing from standards, leads to a discussion of the cause and effect. .

B. Main point 2: Impact Discussion, not Impact . Comment by Christopher: No good. Per PE 2-02-2, the cause-and-effect of the problem. You do this in the outline but mentioning it so that you do not become enamored in Impact. This is where you discuss.

1. Perceived pressure to maintain standards can cause an otherwise law-abiding service member to break a state governor’s executive order.

2. Although given the authority by the Commandant of the Marine Corps to temporarily deviate from grooming standards, most commanders chose to continue enforcing the already most strict grooming standards in the U.S. Armed Forces.

3. Local, state, and federal law differ but when adding individual service published orders, this can lead to the negative impact of disobeying a state executive order. Comment by Christopher: Missing MP3, Recommendation altogether. Please review PE 2-02-2. This is not the Ethics essay where you point out failure, describe impact and give your thoughts. This is an essay when you need to give a Recommendation to fix the Problem, (MP3).

III. Conclusion

A. Summary: This essay discussed the background of military standards and the negative impact that can arise from service members obeying those standards but inadvertently disobeying local laws. Comment by Christopher: Problem, not Background. Comment by Christopher: No good. “Discussed the cause and effect and provided a recommendation for a solution”…Tailored to your Problem, you should craft this summary based on your topic.

B. Remotivation: Service members must comply with military standards, regulations, and local city and state laws in order to be successful leaders and set the example of professional excellence in order to earn promotion. Comment by Christopher: See my feedback in you Motivation. The Remotivation is the same as the Motivation; one sentence. You can be creative and write a new one, but It must include the Who, What, and Why. Or you can copy and paste it from the intro with no modification, AS LONG AS its right.

C. Closing: During an emergency, would it be wise for Commanders to consider a temporary deviation from appearance standards in order to preserve the well-being of their subordinates? Good!