First full WAC Paper - FIRST DRAFT

Comments and Evaluation for N450: Leadership & Management Paper (WAC)

· You need to work on writing conventions: grammar, punctuation, & spelling

· Work on clarity – be sure your audience can completely understand and follow your writing

· Use precise and appropriate word choice

· Use a scholarly and professional tone

· Do not:

· use anthropomorphisms

· use contractions

· begin sentences with conjunctions

· Be sure each body paragraph has a clear main point, which directly supports the thesis statement

· You need to provide more source material.

· You rely too heavily on your source material. Source material is supposed to be used to better explain a complicated issue, point, etc., provide an example, or support your ideas, points, analysis, etc.

· 8-10 pages in length not including the title page and references page (you must meet the minimum requirement of 4 pages)

· Minimum of 4 scholarly sources: sources must be recent (within 5 years); older sources must be approved by instructor

· APA

· Your in-text parenthetical citations are not properly formatted

· You MUST use signal phrases before the start of paraphrased source material and a parenthetical citation at the end of it, to indicate where it begins and where it ends

· Your reference entries are not properly formatted

· Your “References” page is not properly formatted

· Write more concisely

· Introduction

· Provide a clear, strong, and accurate thesis statement (no lists)

· Provide enough information to prepare your audience to read your paper

· Introduce the overarching concept of the paper

· Do not discuss the scenario

· Nurse Leadership & BSN Education

· Explain more thoroughly what nursing leadership entails

· Provide more examples of ways in which nurses are leaders

· Explain more thoroughly the importance of effective leadership choices and actions in nursing

· Explain more thoroughly the benefits, for nurse leaders, of a BSN education

· Include both a non-clinical nursing course and a general education course in your discussion

· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for the benefits of being BSN prepared

· Description of Scenario

· Introduce the scenario

· Clearly connect the scenario to the overall purpose of the paper (without directly mentioning your paper)

· Describe the scenario more concisely

· Describe the scenario more thoroughly

· Describe the scenario more objectively

· Plan & Rationale

· More thoroughly describe what you plan to do and the intended resolution

· More thoroughly describe your rationale

· Explain your rationale for the leadership choices and plan of action. This needs to include some knowledge, concepts, and/or skills you learned in your chosen non-clinical nursing and general education courses.

· Include both a non-clinical nursing course and a general education course in your discussion

· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for your rationale

· More effectively defend your choice of leadership style(s)

· More thoroughly compare and contrast your chosen style to another possible style

· More thoroughly and effectively argue why your choice would be the most effective for the scenario and why

· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for your chosen style

· Implementation of Plan

· Describe more thoroughly how you would implement your plan

· Explain more thoroughly the specific steps you would take

· More clearly identify how the steps you are staking reflect your chosen leadership style(s)

· Describe more thoroughly the knowledge, concepts, and/or skills from your non-clinical nursing and general education courses you plan to use in the execution of your plan

· Explain more thoroughly why and how you will use the described knowledge, concepts, and/or skills from your non-clinical nursing and general education courses in the execution of your plan

· Include both a non-clinical nursing course and a general education course in your discussion

· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for how you will implement your plan

· Awareness & Use of Effective Leadership & Management Choices

· Explain more thoroughly the need for nurses to be aware of their leadership and management style choices

· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for the need for nurses to be aware of their leadership and management style choices

· Explain more thoroughly the need for nurses to employ the most effective leadership and management style choices for any given situation (this includes changing styles for different situations)

· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for the need for nurses to employ the most effective leadership and management style choices for any given situation

· Explain the need and benefit for the constant awareness and use of effective leadership and management styles and choices. Use scholarly source material for support.

· Conclusion

· Provide final commentary regarding the benefits of effective leadership and management choices

· Summarize the importance of nurses being aware of and making effective leadership and management choices

· Provide a synopsis of the importance of a BSN education for nurse leaders and the importance of effective leadership choices

Additional comments:

TOTAL GRADE:

CATEGORY	5	4	3	2	1
Sentence Fluency & Writing Conventions 5%	Demonstrates skillful sentence fluency (varies length, good flow rhythm, and varied structure) AND Exhibits reasonable control of grammatical conventions appropriate to the writing task: sentence formation; standard usage including agreement, tense, and case; and mechanics including use of capitalization, punctuation, and spelling.	Demonstrates reasonable sentence fluency AND Exhibits reasonable control of grammatical conventions appropriate to the writing task: sentence formation; standard usage including agreement, tense, and case; and mechanics including use of capitalization, punctuation, and spelling.	Demonstrates minimal sentence fluency AND/OR Exhibits minimal control of grammatical conventions appropriate to the writing task: sentence formation; standard usage including agreement, tense, and case; and mechanics including use of capitalization, punctuation, and spelling.	Sentence fluency is lacking AND Exhibits minimal control of grammatical conventions appropriate to the writing task: sentence formation; standard usage including agreement, tense, and case; and mechanics including use of capitalization, punctuation, and spelling.	Sentence fluency is so poor it hinders comprehension AND/OR Lacks control of grammatical conventions appropriate to the writing task: sentence formation; standard usage including agreement, tense, and case; and mechanics including use of capitalization, punctuation, and spelling.
Vocabulary 5%	Exhibits skillful use of vocabulary that is precise and purposeful.	Exhibits reasonable use of vocabulary that is precise and purposeful.	Exhibits minimal use of vocabulary that is precise and purposeful.	Lacks use of vocabulary that is precise and purposeful.	Use of vocabulary is so poor it hinders comprehension.
Organization 5%	Organizational structure establishes relationship between/among ideas/events.	Organizational structure establishes relationships between ideas/events, although minor lapses may be present.	Organizational structure establishes some relationship between/among some of the ideas/events. The structure is minimally complete.	Organizational structure does not establish connection between/among ideas/events. The overall structure is incomplete or confusing.	No organizational structure.
Focus 5%	Topic/subject is perfectly clear throughout the paper, and each body paragraph has a single, clear focus.	Topic/subject is generally clear throughout the paper, and each body paragraph has a focus.	Topic/subject may be vague throughout the paper, and some body paragraphs have a focus.	Topic/subject is unclear or confusing through parts of the paper, and few body paragraphs have a focus.	Topic/subject is unclear or confusing in the paper, and each body paragraph does not have a focus.
CATEGORY	5	4	3	2	1
Elaboration 10%	Elaboration consists of specific, developed details.	Elaboration consists of some specific details.	Elaboration consists of general and/or undeveloped details, which may be presented in a list-like fashion.	Elaboration is sparse; almost no details.	No elaboration or details.
Support 10%	Support information is related to and supportive of the topic/subject.	Support information has minor weaknesses in relatedness to and/or support of the topic/subject.	Support information has major weaknesses in relatedness to and/or support of the topic/subject.	An attempt has been made to add support information, but it was unrelated or confusing.	No attempt has been made to add support.
Specific Requirements 50%	All specific requirements of the assignment thoroughly and accurately completed at an exceptional level.	All specific requirements of the assignment thoroughly completed at an above average level.	All specific requirements of the assignment completed at a basic and minimal level.	Some of the specific requirements of the assignment completed.	Few to none of the specific requirements of the assignment completed.
Documentation & Format: APA 10% *Source material not documented is plagiarism and will result in zero points for the composition.	All sources documented and cited correctly with no errors in either the in-text citations or on the reference page, and APA format is correct with no errors.	All sources documented and cited with minimal and/or minor errors in the in-text citations and/or on the reference page, and/or APA format is correct with minor errors.	All sources documented and cited with some errors in the in-text citations and/or on the reference page, and/or APA format is correct with some errors.	All sources documented and cited with many and/or major errors in the in-text citations and/or on the reference page, and/or APA format is correct with many or major errors.	Little to no attempt to document or cite sources properly, and/or little to no attempt to use correct APA format.
TOTAL %