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Shine Hong (2021 SP) 1

M2 Personal Response Worksheet

Student Name Shine Hong

 Before you begin, check your CORE course pack pp. 19-20 and think about how you want to respond to

your prompt.

 Also, before you write your thesis, check the thesis structure and examples in your CORE course pack p 21.

Outlining Stage Shine’s Feedback

(What to improve?)

Thesis Statement:

The irresponsibility of the city of Halifax described in the National Post,

“Africville residents carry on fight for compensation 47 years after black

community bulldozed in Nova Scotia”, reminds me of how short-sighted

the reconciliation of the city of Halifax with black Nova Scotians was.

This will be made clear through the following reasons: the destruction of

the Africville and the Halifax mayor’s apology.

- A: Key word [noun]

- B: Supporting details (Roadmap)

- C: Overall reaction

- Prompt with quotation marks

Background (One additional source)

1) Context (where/when): Halifax, Canada during the 1960’s

2) Who were mainly involved in the historical event(s) related to your

prompt: black Nova Scotians, Halifax mayor Peter Kelly, Flemming

Vemb (a plaintiff and former resident), The Supreme Court of Nova

Scotia

3) 3~4 Important Historical Facts:

 The residents of Africville were the descendents of former slaves

and slaves who had escaped to Canada (Canadian Heritage, 2010).

 Over the years they built a community close to the city of Halifax.

The city of Halifax made many choices that were negative towards

the community, and in the 1960’s they ordered the residents to leave

their homes and relocated them into Halifax. This was extremely

distressing to many of the residents and had a profound effect on

their lives (Canadian Heritage, 2010).

*** This is just an example, so you will need to have at least 3~4 important

historical facts in your worksheet.

- Relevant information to the prompt?

- Missing citation or quotation marks

or page numbers?

- Sufficient historical facts?

Shine Hong (2021 SP) 2

Body 1 (Assertion key words: the destruction of the Africville)

1) Evidence:

“The Supreme Court of Nova Scotia will hear arguments this week about

whether to certify a proposed class action lawsuit for dozens of former

residents of Africville, the black community in north-end Halifax that in

1969 was cleared of its residents and demolished to make room for

industrial development” (Brean, 2015, p. 1).

- Match the order of the roadmap in

the thesis?

- Suitable assertion key words?

- Evidence directly from the primary

source?

- Suitable evidence to support your

thesis?

- Proper citation?

Body 2 (Assertion key words: Halifax mayor’s apology)

1) Evidence:

“in 2010 then Halifax mayor Peter Kelly signed off on an almost $5-million

compensation deal…“We apologize for the heartache experienced at the

loss of the Seaview United Baptist Church, the spiritual heart of the

community, removed in the middle of the night. We acknowledge the

tremendous importance the church had, both for the congregation and the

community as a whole,” Kelly said. That deal involved no personal

compensation and no admission of liability by Halifax, however, and it led

to discord, with some plaintiffs saying the settlement was signed over their

objections.” (Brean, 2015, p. 2).

- Match the order of the roadmap in

the thesis?

- Suitable assertion key words?

- Evidence directly from the primary

source?

- Suitable evidence to support your

thesis?

- Proper citation?

References (Primary Source + ONE additional source in APA)

Brean, J. (2015, November 27). Africville residents carry on fight for

compensation 47 years after black community bulldozed in Nova

Scotia. National Post.

http://nationalpost.com/news/canada/africville-residents-carry-on-

fight-for-compensation

Canadian Heritage. (2010). Africville: The spirit lives on.

http://www.africville.ca/

- Primary source list?

- One additional source list?

- Correct APA?