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Personal Experience Outline Template

Name:_______Qian Chen__________

Instructions:

Fill in the blanks with your information and sentences. You should delete anything in parentheses in the text of the speech because those are just directions to you and REMOVE the parentheses . Those are just there so that you know what to write in place of them. Replace them with your words, in complete sentences. The only thing that should remain is the format: I. A., B., C., 1., 2., etc. and the indentations. Fill in the line for the Transition statement. It does not need to have a letter or number in front of it. You can have more main points than shown here, you can also have more or less supporting details or sub-supporting details than shown here.

Fill in this Information for the instructor:

*Object/Artifact:

*General Purpose: To Inform

*Specific Purpose: By the end of my speech, my audience will….

*Do NOT say this information ^ out loud. Start your speech at your Attention getter.

(Type the Title of Your Speech Here)

Introduction

The artifact I want to speak this time is a birthday gift I made for my good friend last year. In a developed world like this, time is becoming more and more precious. Because of busy work or hard studies, many people will go to the mall to buy ready-made gifts or buy them according to the preferences of their friends when choosing gifts. So, I think it is very important for me to take the time to make a commemorative gift. This good friend of mine has known me for eight years. Every time he celebrates his birthday, he will worry about birthday gifts because he does not know what to give. My friend likes bags very much, so I watched the tutorial and purchased the corresponding materials and made a bag by hand for her as a birthday gift.

Body

I have a best friend I have known for eight years since high school. Her birthday is within a few days of mine. As we have known each other for a long time, sending birthday presents again and again has become increasingly difficult to know what to give. Last year, there was a time when hand-made bags were popular in China. There are also a lot of tutorials on the web, and many people have completed a package of their own through tutorials. At this time, I also went to buy various colors of cloth and materials. For the first few days, I have been practicing how to make a nice bag in the right way. Because the strength is not the same when knitting, the tightness of the bag is not the same. I do not have much experience and I find it difficult. I kept practicing during the summer vacation, and finally I chose a suitable tutorial and made a bag that I like. My best friend often mentioned in our chat that she wanted a hand-made bag. This is also one of the reasons why I choose handmade bags.

Conclusion

Moreover, I think it is very meaningful to spend my time on one thing. The person receiving the gift can feel it. That is the most important thing about giving a birthday present. It became a personal experience for me because I was doing this for the first time. I think a lot of times we need to do it with sincerity. The current society is too fast paced, so we need to do something to fill the rhythm.