DISCUSSION 2

Running head: PERSONAL ESSAY 1

Going Back to School

Melissa Maclean

ENG 121 English Composition 1

Jeremy Pilarski

December 10, 2017

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1. PERSONAL

The title here should reflect

the one above your name.

[Jeremy Pilarski]

PERSONAL ESSAY 2

Going Back to School

The modern world has several adults who are pursuing education for various reasons that

include getting a sense of accomplishment, job security, and for career advancement. Also, the

contemporary workplace has also become very competitive and one acquiring a degree is one of

the ways that one can stay ahead of the thousands of qualified individuals competing for jobs. I

decided to go back to school for self-fulfillment, to advance my career and have a better pay, due

to the availability of online classes, act as a role model to my children and set their education

standards and getting a degree would help to get a better job and well-paying job and rise to

management levels.

Since my childhood, I have had a dream of achieving the highest possible level of

education, as I am a person who loves learning. However, some circumstances in my life delayed

my goal, but I have never lost hope. I have always taken advantage of opportunities to learn at

home, at work or at school and hope that one day, I would enroll in university to gain more

knowledge in my career. I feel that increasing education is essential for both career advancement

and for living a good life. I decided to go back to school to fulfill this dream. The day I will

graduate, I will mark it as a point of self-fulfillment in reaching a desired level of education.

I have noted that in the modern world, several graduates are joining the workforce,

making the working environment more competitive than before. Due to the increase in many

people graduating, the employees are now seeking to employ people with university degrees and

encouraging their employees to go back to school and advance their education. These two

reasons explain the increase in the number of people who are working and learning

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1. one acquiring a degree is

one of the ways that one

can stay ahead of the

thousands of qualified

individuals competing for

Try reading your essay out

loud. This technique can help

you to eliminate awkward

phrasing, repetition, and other

errors. For additional

assistance, use the

Grammarly tool. See this

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u/grammarly [Jeremy

Pilarski]

2. jobs.

Try to reword this sentence.

and a person acquiring a

degree has an advantage

over the competition.

[Jeremy Pilarski]

3. person who loves

Good for you! [Jeremy

Pilarski]

4. Due

Use because instead of due

to. Because cuts down on the

wordiness. [Jeremy Pilarski]

PERSONAL ESSAY 3

simultaneously. I decided to go back to school so that I improve my credentials and be able to

compete with the other fresh graduates. The competitive world requires continuous upgrading of

skills and getting a university degree was one of the ways I would upgrade my skills. I have seen

many people lose their jobs, which created the fear of losing my job and failing to secure

another. I felt that going back to school was a better way of dealing with the fear. In light of this,

I decided to go back to school to improve my chances of getting a better paying job, advance my

career and rise to managerial levels. I have realized that most of the well-paying jobs and

managerial ask for university degrees and in believe that obtaining one would increase my

chances of landing one of such prime jobs.

I have gained experience in my career, but due to the competitive state, the experience

would not provide any job security. I decided to go back to school as a way of keeping my job

and avoid early retirement that may arise as many companies start laying off workers due to the

hard-economic times. I went back to school because I felt that even if I lost my job at my current

workplace, have a degree and experience would help me secure a position at another place and

avoid early retirement.

I decided to back to school because it is now easy to undertake a degree course using

online classes while working. This approach to attaining a degree is flexible, it does not require

my physical presence at the university, and I can comfortably study and do all the assignments

after work and during weekends from home.

Lastly, like many parents, I decided to go back to school to set an example and act as a

role model to my children and siblings. I have of the perspective that since I had the opportunity

to go back to school, it would be easy for me to encourage my children to advance their

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1. The competitive world

requires continuous

upgrading of skills and

getting a university degree

was one of the ways I

would upgrade

Try to make this more

descriptive. What are you

planning to do with your

education? [Jeremy Pilarski]

2. another.

What is your job, exactly?

Tell the reader. [Jeremy

Pilarski]

3. I decided to back to

school because

Vary your word choice to

avoid redundant words and

phrases. [Jeremy Pilarski]

4. role model to my children

and

Good for you! [Jeremy

Pilarski]

PERSONAL ESSAY 4

education in future after achieving the same education level. Going back to school will be an

excellent way to prove to them the importance of education and motivate them to follow my

educational path.

The benefits getting a degree will have in my life are increasing the potential to earn a

higher salary which will improve my standards of living and that of my family, offer job security

and increase my potential to advance to managerial positions, strengthen my job satisfaction, and

protects me from the risk of early retirement. However, I am aware that these benefits will not

occur automatically, and I will need to continue improving my skills and acquire more

knowledge. After completing my degree, I will also advance to achieve masters and doctorate

degrees.

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1. getting a degree will have

in my life are increasing the

potential to earn a

higher salary which will

improve my standards of

living and that of my family,

offer job security and

increase my potential to

advance to managerial

positions, strengthen my

job satisfaction, and

protects me from the risk of

early retirement.

I think this is all good, but this

rather vague. [Jeremy

Pilarski]

2. doctorate

In what? [Jeremy Pilarski]

3. knowledge.

Such as? What type of

knowledge? [Jeremy

Pilarski]