Ess.ay 3 with Outline

Review 1: For the positives, your essay is incredibly well-written with interesting interpretations and good structure. There are little grammatical errors or sentence fragments, too. And the writing serves to be both full of information and easy to follow. As for the negatives, you should italicize every mention of the title. There are also a few editing mistakes like labels and misplaced sentences as well. But most importantly, there is little evidence from your sources that allow the argument to be taken seriously. Just a few quotes can go a long way. While immigration plays into a major aspect of the stories in the book, not every story is about immigrant experiences. Belonging manifests in ways like with Shoba and Shukmar, and their lack of belonging in their community. Same for Bibi, where she want to belong to a community of her own and not in another country.

Review 2: Author chooses an interesting angle to addresss the prompt. Although, the theme is not directly from the list. It is still a fair point for the essay. The author presents a general understanding of the materials. The selectioon of the extra source is fairly suitable for the essay. The examples from the book are accurate. However, it will be much better, if the author could use more direct quotes to support the main idea. I understand that this is a rought draft, but the overall structure of the essay is loose. Author can try to tighten the structure by combining different paragraphs. The author repesents some solid understanding in the conclusion. Therefore, after certain editing, the final draft will be better.

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