Peer Review
Paper written by FEIHAI
General
· Is the draft between 4-5 pages?
The draft is about 4pages
· Is it double spaced, with the heading on the first page (top left)? Is the shortened title and page number in the header of each page? Note areas that need to be fixed.
Double spaced with and page number at the top of every page. The title is no shortened in the header at the top of left.
· Is the title informative, interesting, provocative and/or creative? Suggest two ways this can be improved.
The title is very interesting that it makes me want to read your paper, and the topic is about people’s attitude which is very familiar with our life. If I had to give suggestions, I would say that make evaluation longer so it can be easier for readers to understand which research was useful and how useful they were.
Introduction
· Does it clearly present the narrowed topic or area of inquiry?
Yes, it does present the narrowed topic how people’s behavior have changed as technology develops which is narrowed attitude and trust of consumers for online shopping.
· Is this topic narrowed sufficiently that it can be discussed completely in a paper of 10 – 15 pages? Suggest two ways this can be improved.
I would say this topic is huge so it will be definitely enough to write on paper. I would suggest that there should be more explanation for how online work maybe a little more. Also, I would suggest that once you explained about consumers are having more access to internet, you might want to explain how it gives a impact of online purchase behaviors.
· Is the topic’s significance to its audience included? Suggest two ways this can be improved.
The significance was mentioned in the introduction but I can’t really see how you will speak out from the introduction so I would suggest that maybe explaining more for helping reader to understand the importance of the trust and attitude while consumers shop online. For another suggestion, I would say that if there is more explanation briefly for welfare in terms of price, trust, quality, choice, efficiency, and transparency like how these will affect to consumer’s behaviors.
· Is there an overview statement regarding the state of current knowledge and what needs further study? Suggest two ways this can be improved.
No, it can be improved 1)by explaining how online purchase affect behaviors. 2) by mentioning implications between the past and the present how they have changed.
· Is there a thesis statement that provides the author’s evaluation of the state of current knowledge of the topic and of what needs further study? Does it anticipate the specific research question that should be contemplated at the end of the Lit Review? Suggest two ways this can be improved.
Yes, there is a thesis statement but it’s not related to narrowed topic it can be improved by making a connection with narrowed topic. For another suggestion, be mentioned what study needs further.
Summary
· How is the summary section organized? There should be a clear, cohesive organization with each paragraph or section focusing on one aspect of the research ( including, but not limited to, the issues or aspects studied, the accepted interpretations or theories, the disputed claims, and any unanswered questions.
Some of sentences at the beginning in the summary could have been in the introduction. All the summary was vague. I couldn’t see how consumer’s get affected by online purchase.
· Is this organization appropriate for this paper? Suggest an alternate, very specific pattern of organization.
No, Organize different points in different paragraphs but somewhat there are well organization. Be clear what your point is and you are trying to say.
Discussion & Evaluation
· Does the discussion and evaluation section follow the same organizational pattern that the summary section follows? If not, why does it deviate from that pattern – and would it work better if done differently? Suggest two ways this can be improved.
Since the summary section of paragraphs were not connected to have clear your point, it didn’t make sense between summary and discussion section so I would suggest that point should be clear and make a connection between paragraphs.
· Is each area of discussion interpreted and evaluated comprehensively? Is the analysis thorough, with complete explanation?
No, there was not analysis, it seemed it’s still summary part.
· Are questions for further study brought forth in this section? Suggest two ways this can be improved.
No, questions for further study is not in discussion and evaluation section. I would suggest to restate your question that it’s from introduction. For another suggestion, be clear your point and how you want to mention for further study.
· Are any new article introduced in this section that aren’t in the summary section? Is there any use of the first person in this section?
No, I can’t see the difference between summary and this section so I think what further study the author want should be more clear.
Conclusion
· Does the conclusion synthesize the knowledge confirmed through the discussion and evaluation section while identifying areas for further research?
Since further research wasn’t clear it didn’t synthesize but somewhat the knowledge was confirmed through from summary section.
· Is it clear, after reading the Lit Review, what is known about this topic?
Yes, there are a lot known about the topic. However, since the point was not clear as it needed to be, it was not much are known about the sources.
· Is it clear, after reading the Lit Review, what is NOT known about this topic?
No, not clear. There was no further question.
· Is there a clear connection between any new areas of inquiry and the summary of existing knowledge? This is an area often overlooked – if it’s NOT present, be sure to note that. Suggest two ways this can be improved.
No, it seemed this section is still summary and mentioned same thing from summary section. Be clear the point and for further study, what you want to focus on this topic.
· Is there a clearly identified narrow research question? Is it discussed? Is it sufficient to drive the research for a 10-15 page paper?
No, it was not clearly identified narrow research question. No. I would say it could make 10 page on paper with the research.
· Does the research question attempt to advance already-existing knowledge, or does it rehash research that already exists?
No.
· Is the research question a yes/no, good/bad, for/against, pro/con, either/or, right/wrong, or
Not included.
Sources
· Are there at least five sources?
Yes, there are five sources.
· Is each source from an academic journal or an EDITED, SCHOLARLY BOOK chapter? Check the specific citation for books to ensure it is an edited, scholarly work.
Most of them were cited properly but I couldn’t find one of your citation.
· Are at least two sources from 2011-present?
There are two sources from 2011.
· Are the sources diverse? Explain why or why not?
Yes, these sources are diverse, because they hit a critical component basically his point how attitude and trust affect to consumer’s behaviors.
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