1. Read your peer’s essay from beginning to end just to let its ideas wash over you. What are your initial thoughts? Did your peer satisfy the requirements of assignment? Please explain in detail.
I think the peer’s essay does not cover what the question requires it to. In this essay the peer does not satisfy the requirements of the assignment as the writer ends up describing the different sources of renewable energy and even the statistics on how they are used instead of describing why people should use renewable sources of energy.
2. Review the essay’s title as well as its introduction and conclusion. Think about the relationships among these three components. Do they match or do they disagree? Make note of strengths or weaknesses in these crucial areas. Please explain in detail.
The introduction is well set but has a weakness as it goes out of topic when the peer begins to give details about the non-renewable sources which were not part of the assignment’s requirement. Apart from that, there is a clear relationship between the title, introduction and conclusion as they all base on the reasons why renewable energy sources are preferable.
3. Find the essay’s thesis. Is it clear? Is it well positioned? Paraphrase (put in your own words) the thesis of the essay to check your understanding. Review the assignment guidelines to ensure that your peer’s thesis is on target. Make note of strengths or weaknesses in this area. Please explain in detail.
The essay’s thesis is clear and well positioned at the end of the introduction. My thesis would be ‘my goal in this paper is to explain why people should prefer using renewable energy as their main source of energy’
According to the assignment details; the peer was supposed to give reasons as to why people should prefer using renewable energy sources which is covered in the thesis though not directly.
The peer’s thesis is giving us the clear position that the peer was supposed to support throughout the essay.
4. Focus on the individual paragraphs of the essay. Does each paragraph have a topic sentence that previews the ideas of the paragraph? Observe the essay’s development of paragraphs. Does each paragraph have a single main idea that relates to the thesis? Are there any paragraphs that seem disconnected or out of place?
Although some of the paragraphs have the topic sentence, most of the paragraphs do not have the main idea. This is because the peer ended up describing the renewable sources of energy, how they work and statistics of how they are used instead of elaborating on the reasons why renewable energy should be preferable.
5. Consider the essay’s use of the English language. Are sentence structures, grammar, spelling, punctuation and mechanics employed effectively, or do errors distract the reader from understanding and enjoying the writer’s analysis? Make note of strengths and weaknesses in this area. Please explain in detail.
Apart from just few grammar mistakes, the writer’s sentence structures are good, the spelling is also efficient, punctuations and mechanics are also employed effectively.
The few errors made do not affect the enjoyment and understanding of the writers analysis as the points are well structured.
Remember: When in doubt about how to do the peer review, be honest, helpful, and constructive. Saying “Great job! Don’t change a word!” never helped anyone to be a better writer.
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