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This is a great start, however, I think the addition of statistical data from your resources could provide a better link to understanding the major influence contemporary technology has on the youth of today. 

 

Some grammatical issues throughout the paper.

 

The problem statement could use more citations and references for clarification. 

 

More information could be utilized to show the contemporary relevance.  “There is a sharp contrast between individual and collective memory”… this is an interesting statement,  a reference to this could provide more insight and better understanding.

 

This topic could actually be a contributing factor to my own research study of decision making in contemporary corrections.  Could it be that technology is a contributing factor in how people make life decisions?  Could technology be blamed in the diminished memory of youth thereby resulting in poor decisions?