10 pages essay for ATH 301 course

I am very concerned about this paper. Both in class and in my office when we met as a group, I emphasized the need for some kind of case study that you could unpack. We discussed different kinds of possibilities and my understanding was that you left my office with a clear understanding that an account of intercultural conflict needed 

1. some specific encounter

2. in some specific situation

3. in which people from two or more different cultural backgrounds enter into a conflict

4. and that conflict stems in part from their cultural differences

By the end of the meeting I thought you were going to focus on one or more incidents of discrimination or microaggressions you experienced or observed against Asian students at Miami, which could then be unpacked and analyzed using the tools and concepts taught in the class.

Instead you have given me is a report that attempts to address the entire problem of race discrimination against Asians in the US. While mostly clearly written and clearly structured, it has little or nothing to do with the concepts of culture, intercultural encounters, and the contexts of situation, that we have focused on all semester in this class.

As it currently exists, I cannot give this paper a passing grade.

The final draft is due Monday, Dec. 2. I strongly recommend that you completely revise the paper focusing on the comments above, and the discussion we had in my office, and utilizing the concepts and tools taught in this class.