Revise and annotate

Peer 1:

The author did a great job on explaining how drug and alcohol abuse can affect us and our communities. Topic sentences strongly support the body paragraphs as well. Something that can be changed is the author providing more of his information/personal thoughts because I feel like the sources are what make up most of his writing project. Although it's great to use our sources, it's important that our essays aren't just based on these sources. Maybe talking about how you relate to the major impacts that these substances have on communities is true because you may have potentially seen it happening in the city you live in, etc. Talk about the effects drug abuse has had in Fresno, how it impacted your school, etc.

Peer 2:

This essay was done well, although I believe you could have explained the HIV/AIDS issue more and talked more on the preventative program’s costs. This was a strong essay however and I take inspiration on your format!