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Reader’s Name: ____________________________ Writer’s Name: _______________________________

Peer Editing: Compare and Contrast Essay

1. First, read the writer's introduction all the way through then respond to the following:

a. Highlight the attention getter. Does the first sentence "hook" the reader into the paper? Explain.

b. Number the preview of points. Does the introduction correctly state that the paper will discuss “types of

work”, “forms of rebellion”, and “types of abuse/punishment”? Explain.

c. Underline the thesis. Does the thesis confuse you, or do you know EXACTLY what the paper is about?

Explain.

2. Next, read the writer's body paragraphs all the way through then respond to the following:

a. Underline the topic sentence for each paragraph. Do any of the topic sentences confuse you, or do you

know EXACTLY what that paragraph is about? Does that topic sentence directly relate to the thesis

statement? Explain?

Topic Sentence #1: ____________________________________________________________________

Topic Sentence #2: ____________________________________________________________________

Topic Sentence #3: ____________________________________________________________________

Topic Sentence #4: ____________________________________________________________________

Topic Sentence #5: ____________________________________________________________________

Topic Sentence #6: ____________________________________________________________________

b. Make check marks next to the writer's supporting evidence in each paragraph. Does each piece of support

evidence relate to the topic sentence in that paragraph? Explain. If it does not, put an “X” next to that

sentence rather than a check.

c. Does the writer use transition words and phrases to contrast the subjects and to provide a smooth flow

from one paragraph to another? If not, show where the writer needs more of these by writing

“TRANSITION” in all capital letters.

Reader’s Name: ____________________________ Writer’s Name: _______________________________

3. Read the writer's conclusion all the way through then respond to the following:

a. Underline the restated thesis statement. Does the conclusion restate the thesis in a DIFFERENT way than

it was stated in the introduction? Explain.

4. Re-read the writer’s entire paper ALOUD as it is written. Read it all the way through very slowly as you

look and listen for errors in grammar and mechanics.

Grammar/Mechanic Question Y N

1. Does each sentence start with a capital letter? (Circle all letters that are not capitalized.)

2. Does each sentence end with a period, or appropriate punctuation? (Insert a period whenever

necessary)

3. Are there sentence fragments? Does it sound choppy and incomplete when you read it aloud?

(Label sentence fragments in the margin.)

4. Are there run-on sentences? Do you not have time to take a breath when you read it aloud?

(Label run-on sentences in the margin.)

5. Are there any spelling errors? Correct the spelling to the best of your ability by writing the

correct form above the incorrect form.

6. Is each paragraph indented?

7. Are there 8 complete paragraphs?

Final Comments:

1. Readers Name: Professor Dabel
2. Writers Name: Abdullah Al Bahrani
3. Topic Sentence 1: Types of work male laves did
4. Topic Sentence 2: Need to write a topic sentence about women's types of work
5. Topic Sentence 3: Need to rewrite topic sentence about male forms of rebellion
6. Topic Sentence 4: I don't see a paragraph on women's forms of rebellion (see Deborah Gray White)
7. Topic Sentence 5: The rebellion paragraph on men needs a better topic sentence
8. Topic Sentence 6: I'm a bit confused because there are two paragraphs on male rebellion. Where are women?
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25. Textfield: This is off to a good start, but needs some work. First of all, please make sure you have eight paragraphs total. Watch the "How to Write a College Paper" video and pay particular attention to the part about alternating paragraphs. Second, please remove all of the references to texts in the essay and just use footnotes. Third, please rewrite the introduction and conclusion to follow the Instant Introduction and Instant Conclusion in Don't Panic (start on page 37). Fourth, overall your evidence looks good but Deborah Gray White has a ton of information about ways that women rebelled. Check her index for these terms "infanticide," "poisoning," "arson" for starters.