Practice Peer Review Session

 PART ONE:

compose a message to the author of the sample paper, providing helpful advice for revising this draft. You do not have to respond to every element covered by the workshop questions, but the more helpful feedback you can provide, the better! What do you think this author needs to know? 

( the essay is in the PDf file)

PART TWO:

After reading several of your classmates' reviews, choose two to respond to.

As a reply to each thread, give feedback on the feedback:

· Compare your feedback to your peer's

· Comment on the feedback. What did your peer do well? What did you like about not just the advice that was presented, but the way it was presented?

Review’s one

Ima Goodwriter did good by giving an example of a real life situation the beginning. I feel like that showed prove of understanding the essay and being able to understand what the Beck's article was about. I do believe paragraph 1 should have had more details it's too short and doesn't explain too much. The thesis statement may should have been included with another sentence or so. Did really good explaining Beck's points of views and the way everything was in detailed.

My respond :

Review’s Two

The attention grabber for this essay was incredible. I enjoyed the comparison to the boyfriend's conservatism was more so a marker of how he is rather than it actually being an opinion. What I did not enjoy were the examples; some were okay but they felt very lackluster in some areas. It made a good claim and the essay had good points comparing ideas to Julie beck's but to me it seemed rushed towards the end. Good draft but needs improvement.