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Professor Lilley

EXPOSITORY WRITING KS

October 05, 2020

Free will is a state of freedom which was spearheaded by Zuckerberg. He believed that every person had a whole sense of individuality and liberty to speak their mind in any way they liked and wished for especially in the social media platforms to kill and satisfy their sense of freedom and their democracy constitutional right to be enjoyed in a more intellectual; and freeway. Mark Zuckerberg who the main proponent for this was proposed for the sake of the citizens to “...think of themselves and form their own opinions” Comment by Dawn Lilley: No, it is not. Zuckerberg did not spearhead free will. Comment by Dawn Lilley: This is a complete misreading of Foer. You and I should talk about the arguments of these essays.

Instrumental power is the power that is used when a person or people are above others in authority and hence uses the power to press others, one that cannot be implemented and put in practice or play in the real world independently and democratically, this kind of power challenges the so-called freewill being discussed in the given articles in a big way. This power in many ways only helped us feel better but didn’t make us practice the freewill we yearned for so badly, in the case of Zuckerberg creating Facebook which was a good moved and it moved faster than he thought was intended to help us share our deepest secrets even though we didn’t want them to be exposed. It helped ferry people to a place where they could be powerful, telling people about their lives and yet not being free indeed, Foer Franklin says that” We have a microscope that only allows us examine social behavior at a very fine level that we have never seen before…” . On the other hand, Tolentino brings this same discussion differently, he explains it using the anatomy of a woman. Tolentino uses this article saying that the instrumental power that she seeks in only abstract and it’s not an ultimate definition to free will, she describes the woman as a weak being which is with no authority and hence mostly becomes a victim of instrumental power, this fact makes most women feminists that they can do things by themselves and they tend to be more selfish in perusing their dreams and ambitions for the simple fact that they are the most affected by instrumental power and since they are not in the same positions. The facts that she spends so many resources and time on her looks is disturbing and shows the amount of satisfaction which in itself is a sign of the absence of free will which the presence of instrumental power. Tolentino’s arguments are however idealistic and not real, the situation that she puts the woman in the whole of the first chapter in is unrealistic and the woman is portrayed in an extremely undermining manner that in the real world that situation does not exist to that extent. Comment by Dawn Lilley: Proper citation every time, please. Comment by Dawn Lilley: I can’t tell whether this is supposed to be your introduction or a body paragraph. If it’s an introduction, it lacks a thesis. If it’s a body paragraph, it is summary.

The author fears the power of change and in this Case change in physical appearance, she thinks that how she looks is what makes her powerful and strong, and the idealistic woman spends a lot of time and optimizes everything just to watch how she presents herself mostly physically. She feared the power of change, she describes how actively she was involved in athletics and gymnastics and how she was even not interested in studies than this, she could skip a meal or two just to keep herself fit, this happened until she got diagnosed with active tuberculosis and then her long black hair started to shade and she had to move to the countryside where life was even harder and she says in p. 70 “... I realized how I had taken my functional body for granted” .this natural power was so hard to challenge due to the simple fact that it is so natural. The protagonist in the book even wishes that she could even go to another world where the body ambitions that she so badly worked for in her whole life before becoming sick could perfectly work in with no struggle. She throughout the text does her best to be perfect on her looks she even joins something that she called yoga sessions called “Peace Corps”. The struggles that she went through trying to subvert the power were immensely great and many but yet she didn’t conquer the power because it was natural and automatic. The protagonist changed from a healthy energetic and gymnastic lady to a desperate lady seeking peace from the countryside and some unknown programs like yoga, modern ballet orthopedic exercise and even sex. The power of change is inevitable and it is independent and not affected by strengths or even adopted practices or routines that seem like challenge them, the power of change controls itself and it may change positively or negatively as it wishes, it can be affected by the person mentality, the mentality to change oneself, the force applied to oneself to work like a machine just to get results, desired ones only, the aggressiveness to “speak” in a language that is only understood by you one which challenges you to be better and work harder and more aggressively to pursue the change and subvert it to what you wish for it to be what you want and desire. This process is achievable as discussed by the author but it is a mental and psychological process and aggressiveness that can only be achieved by a few individuals who have made up their minds to do so, otherwise the fear of change that the author so much fears cannot be subverted or challenged and it is proven. Comment by Dawn Lilley: What are you arguing in this paragraph? Comment by Dawn Lilley: You are doing a lot of summarizing and you aren’t engaging closely and specifically with quotations throughout. It is only through close engagement with various quotations that you can build your own argument. See below.

This is a complex human composition that is usually brought about by different makeups of towns and even cities with identifiable tenets of cultural and technological development. Surveillance capitalism foretells an error that portrays the human’s resource as an individual resource by itself (raw material). It foretells boundaries that play pay in new places like market participants, priests and only known to the machines.

The author takes us through this civilization that he foretells in a prophetic and dreamlike way. He says that “… I wake up early, the daylight begins before I open my eyes, my mind is in motion and sentences have been streamlined through my dreams…” this future that the author is trying to foretell and is doing this through imaginations he accepts that he can only achieve this if he does it by himself and lives the civilization he also states that the gap that is between the civilization that he is trying to explain and relive is the freedom of will. The author states that as human beings we inherently do limit our freedom no matter how much freedom is presented to us we only do and accept what our inner persons accept us to take in and do. They are tenets to this civilization that the book tries to foretell. The principle of making promises and keeping them is an important note in this aspect. The book tries to explain a civilization that bases its decisions and power on honesty and openness, a civilization that is true to itself and one another that is those ruling and those being ruled over. This aspect brings about free will which counters attack human doubts and kills the original reaction to an action. This civilization that is being foretold has been complicated over the years since it’s hard to define honesty or free will since these words are ambiguous and are have no standard definition (zuboff, 2019). This civilization that is based on free will is only targeting in bringing up individuals in a society who are morally and virtually upright a society where honesty and freedom are firm, this is however based on the ability to make and keep promises. The civilization of this kind is not hard to achieve since it is inherently building and processed in us, this values that the foretold society needs to have is already in us but sadly is coming to extinction since we are living in a crocked society where all of this is not practiced and not treasured. Honesty is discussed in this case where several discussions and research were done in the past trying to explain the trustworthy of people with their information in the social media the research showed that people don’t and are not comfortable with their information being exposed and they also are not comfortable with being honest with other people which goes against the spirit and the whole goal, of the surveillance capitalism which intends to monitor and oversee all the things done by individuals in a given society Comment by Dawn Lilley: See next page.