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IHP 501 Module Three Project Preparation Rubric Activity: 3-2 Project Preparation: Specific Health Challenge

Course: IHP-501-Q4511 Global Health and Diversity 23TW4

Name: Deanna Buchanan

Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement

Not Evident Criterion Score

Health

Challenge

Analysis:

Clinical

Presentation

13.5 / 15

Criterion Feedback

Deanna: Thank you for describing the etiology & symptoms of malaria, along with an in-text citation to support statements.

To strengthen this section is to include: in-text citations that are current, credible, & scholarly to support statements relevant to topic at the beginning of the paragraph and at the end of the paragraph (if relevant, same topic, & author).

15 points

Exceeds

proficiency in

exceptionally

clear and

insightful

manner, using

industry-

specific

language

13.5 points

Briefly

describes the

etiology and

symptomology

of the health

challenge and

describes the

disease

present along

with

symptoms

10.5 points

Shows

progress

toward

proficiency,

but with errors

or omissions

0 points

Does not

attempt

criterion

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Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement

Not Evident Criterion Score

Health

Challenge

Analysis:

Prevalence

15 / 15

Criterion Feedback

Deanna: Terrific job analyzing the prevalence, populations at risk, morbidity & mortality, & prevalent trends

related to malaria, along with an in-text citation to support statements.

Health

Challenge

Analysis:

Inequities

13.5 / 15

Criterion Feedback

Deanna: Great job addressing socioeconomic groups, gender, & other along with an in-text citation relevant to support statements.

15 points

Exceeds

proficiency in

exceptionally

clear and

insightful

manner, using

industry-

specific

language

13.5 points

Analyzes the

prevalence and

impact of the

health

challenge in

the location

and supplies

quantitative

evidence from

credible

sources to

illustrate

claims

10.5 points

Shows

progress

toward

proficiency,

but with errors

or omissions

0 points

Does not

attempt

criterion

15 points

Exceeds

proficiency in

exceptionally

clear and

insightful

manner, using

industry-

specific

language

13.5 points

Assesses the

unequal

impacts of the

different

groups.

Includes:

Socioeconomi

c groups,

race/ethnicity,

and gender

10.5 points

Shows

progress

toward

proficiency,

but with errors

or omissions

0 points

Does not

attempt

criterion

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Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement

Not Evident Criterion Score

To strengthen this section is to include an in-text citation to support the race/ethnicity statements section.

Other

Determinant

s of Health:

Environment

5.25 / 7.5

Criterion Feedback

Deanna: Thank you for identifying some environmental determinants of health related to malaria in Zambia.

To strengthen this section is to include

Per the assignment prompt, I would have liked to see your paragraph addressing (for example: clean water & sanitation, air pollution, contaminated food & water, shelter, food insecurity), that would help describe & define the environmental determinants of health in Zambia.

an in-text citation relevant to topic to support claims.

Other

Determinant

s of Health:

Biological

5.25 / 7.5

Criterion Feedback

7.5 points

Exceeds

proficiency in

exceptionally

clear and

insightful

manner, using

industry-

specific

language

6.75 points

Describes the

environmental

determinants

of health for

the scenario

5.25 points

Shows

progress

toward

proficiency,

but with errors

or omissions

0 points

Does not

attempt

criterion

7.5 points

Exceeds

proficiency in

exceptionally

clear and

insightful

manner, using

industry-

specific

language

6.75 points

Describes the

biological

determinants

of health for

the scenario

5.25 points

Shows

progress

toward

proficiency,

but with errors

or omissions

0 points

Does not

attempt

criterion

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Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement

Not Evident Criterion Score

Deanna: Thank you for identifying some biological determinants of health related to malaria in Zambia.

To strengthen this section is to include

Per the assignment prompt, I would have liked to see your paragraph addressing (for example: age, sex, HIV status, inherited conditions, family history) that would help describe & define the biological determinants of health in Zambia. an in-text citation relevant to topic to support claims.

Policy

Evaluation

15 / 15

Criterion Feedback

Deanna: Great job identifying the National Malaria Control Program in Zambia, along with a credible,

current, scholarly source to support claims.

15 points

Exceeds

proficiency in

exceptionally

clear and

insightful

manner, using

industry-

specific

language

13.5 points

Identifies any

current policies

that exist

related to the

health

challenge

10.5 points

Shows

progress

toward

proficiency,

but with errors

or omissions

0 points

Does not

attempt

criterion

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Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement

Not Evident Criterion Score

Articulation

of Response

9 / 10

Criterion Feedback

Deanna: Thank you for your continued hard work with the 3-2 project prep short paper assignment! My feedback for continued improvement with APA style includes:

Review paper prior to submitting for APA errors. Refer to the 2-1 activity guidelines & rubric - make sure to completely answer each critical element & guidelines for submission. Keep in mind - responses/statements that are missing in-text citations are subjective and not scholarly.

Scholarly

Sources

10 / 10

10 points

Exceeds

proficiency in

exceptionally

clear and

insightful

manner

9 points

Clearly

conveys

meaning with

correct

grammar,

sentence

structure, and

spelling,

demonstrating

understanding

of audience

and purpose

7 points

Shows

progress

toward

proficiency,

but with errors

in grammar,

sentence

structure, and

spelling,

negatively

impacting

readability

0 points

Submission has

critical errors

in grammar,

sentence

structure, and

spelling,

preventing

understanding

of ideas

10 points

Incorporates

more than

three

scholarly,

current (within

the last five

years) sources,

or use of

sources is

exceptionally

insightful

9 points

Incorporates

three scholarly,

current (within

the last five

years) sources

that support

claims

7 points

Incorporates

fewer than

three scholarly,

current (within

the last five

years) sources,

or not all

sources

support claims

0 points

Does not

incorporate

sources

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Total 91 / 100

Overall Score

Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement

Not Evident Criterion Score

Criterion Feedback

Deanna: Exceeded requirement!

APA Style 4.5 / 5

Criterion Feedback

Deanna: Terrific work with your reference citations. My feedback for continued improvement with APA style includes:

Remember to include:

The word “References” is bolded per APA (2020) DOI for each article

5 points

Formats in-text

citations and

reference list

according to

APA style with

no errors

4.5 points

Formats in-

text citations

and reference

list according

to APA style

with fewer

than five

errors

3.5 points

Formats in-text

citations and

reference list

according to

APA style with

five or more

errors

0 points

Does not

format in-text

citations and

reference list

according to

APA style

Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement Not Evident