Final paper
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IHP 501 Module One Project Preparation Rubric Activity: 1-2 Project Preparation: Introduction
Course: IHP-501-Q4511 Global Health and Diversity 23TW4
Name: Deanna Buchanan
Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement
Not Evident Criterion Score
Scenario 5 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Deanna: Thank you for taking the time to identify option #1 [Zambia], along with in-text citation [Nawa et al. 2020].
5 points
Exceeds
proficiency in
an
exceptionally
clear and
insightful
manner, using
industry-
specific
language
4.5 points
Provides the
rationale for
choosing the
scenario;
describes the
problem
related to the
chosen
scenario
3.5 points
Shows
progress
toward
proficiency,
but with errors
or omissions
0 points
Does not
attempt
criterion
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Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement
Not Evident Criterion Score
Population 13.5 / 15
Criterion Feedback
Deanna: Thank you for including the geographic, demographic & socioeconomic details for Zambia.
To strengthen this section is to
describe the target population of Zambia as referenced in the Nawa et al. (2020) article. Nawa et al. (2020) focused on all children aged below five years).
Prevalent
Health
Concerns
9 / 10
15 points
Exceeds
proficiency in
an
exceptionally
clear and
insightful
manner, using
industry-
specific
language
13.5 points
Investigates
and provides
scholarly
evidence to
describe target
population for
the chosen
scenario,
including the
chosen
country's
socioeconomic
and
demographic
profile
10.5 points
Shows
progress
toward
proficiency,
but with errors
or omissions
0 points
Does not
attempt
criterion
10 points
Exceeds
proficiency in
an
exceptionally
clear and
insightful
manner, using
industry-
specific
language
9 points
Discusses the
prevalent
health
concerns;
includes the
problem focus
area of the
scenario
7 points
Shows
progress
toward
proficiency,
but with errors
or omissions
0 points
Does not
attempt
criterion
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Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement
Not Evident Criterion Score
Criterion Feedback
Deanna: Thank you for discussing the prevalent health concerns including the problem of focus (malaria) of Zambia.
Error of omission related to missing in-text citation to support statements (last five statements in the paragraph).
Social
Determinant
s: Education
7 / 10
Criterion Feedback
Deanna: Thank you for describing the characteristics of education in Zambia.
However, error of omission related to missing in-text citation to support statements.
Social
Determinant
s: Healthcare
7 / 10
10 points
Exceeds
proficiency in
an
exceptionally
clear and
insightful
manner, using
industry-
specific
language
9 points
Identifies the
characteristics
of the
educational
system
including ease
of access and
quality of
education for
the population
in the chosen
country
7 points
Shows
progress
toward
proficiency,
but with errors
or omissions
0 points
Does not
attempt
criterion
10 points
Exceeds
proficiency in
an
exceptionally
clear and
insightful
manner, using
industry-
specific
language
9 points
Explains the
ease of access
and quality of
healthcare
reported in the
country
7 points
Shows
progress
toward
proficiency,
but with errors
or omissions
0 points
Does not
attempt
criterion
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Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement
Not Evident Criterion Score
Criterion Feedback
Deanna: Thank you for your brief explanation related to healthcare in Zambia.
To strengthen this section is to include:
Ease of access to healthcare More in-depth explanation related to quality of healthcare in Zambia.
Social
Determinant
s: Economic
Stability
9 / 10
Criterion Feedback
Deanna: Thank you for describing some factors related to the economic stability of Zambia.
To strengthen this section is to:
Economic ranking in the Sub-Saharan Africa region? Poverty rate? Economic decline?
10 points
Exceeds
proficiency in
an
exceptionally
clear and
insightful
manner, using
industry-
specific
language
9 points
Describes the
factors that
influence the
economic
stability or
instability of
the country
7 points
Shows
progress
toward
proficiency,
but with errors
or omissions
0 points
Does not
attempt
criterion
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Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement
Not Evident Criterion Score
Social
Determinant
s: Inequities
10 / 10
Criterion Feedback
Deanna: Thank you for interpreting the inequities reported among the population of Zambia, along with an in-text citation to support statements.
Articulation
of Response
9 / 10
Criterion Feedback
Deanna: Helpful tips to improve articulation of response include: Review paper prior to submitting for APA errors.
10 points
Exceeds
proficiency in
an
exceptionally
clear and
insightful
manner, using
industry-
specific
language
9 points
Interprets the
inequities
reported
among the
population in
the country
7 points
Shows
progress
toward
proficiency,
but with errors
or omissions
0 points
Does not
attempt
criterion
10 points
Exceeds
proficiency in
an
exceptionally
clear and
insightful
manner
9 points
Clearly
conveys
meaning with
correct
grammar,
sentence
structure, and
spelling,
demonstrating
an
understanding
of audience
and purpose
7 points
Shows
progress
toward
proficiency,
but with errors
in grammar,
sentence
structure, and
spelling,
negatively
impacting
readability
0 points
Submission has
critical errors
in grammar,
sentence
structure, and
spelling,
preventing
understanding
of ideas
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Total 88.5 / 100
Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement
Not Evident Criterion Score
Refer to the 1-2 project prep guidelines & rubric - make sure to completely answer each critical element & guidelines for submission. Keep in mind - responses/statements that are missing in-text citations are considered personal opinion are subjective and not scholarly.
Scholarly
Sources
10 / 10
APA Style 9 / 10
Criterion Feedback
Deanna: Minor APA errors noted. Please refer to the APA (2020) 7th edition manual to assist with reference format.
Use the SNHU Academic Support Center for writing assistance & support Use the APA Style website for assistance
10 points
Incorporates
more than
three
scholarly,
current (within
the last five
years) sources,
or use of
sources is
exceptionally
insightful
9 points
Incorporates
three scholarly,
current (within
the last five
years) sources
that support
claims
7 points
Incorporates
fewer than
three scholarly,
current (within
the last five
years) sources,
or not all
sources
support claims
0 points
Does not
incorporate
sources
10 points
Formats in-text
citations and
reference list
according to
APA style with
no errors
9 points
Formats in-
text citations
and reference
list according
to APA style
with fewer
than five
errors
7 points
Formats in-text
citations and
reference list
according to
APA style with
five or more
errors
0 points
Does not
format in-text
citations and
reference list
according to
APA style
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Overall Score
Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement Not Evident
