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Introduction to organizational communication

Introduction

The benefits of communication cannot be underestimated either in the workplace or also in school. Communication plays a significant part in our success in the two environments. Communication helps in improving a person's productivity in the workplace. An excellent communicator is always willing to ask about the best way they can perform their role better, and their performance is enhanced. Even at school, a communicator will not shy away from asking the teacher or a classmate something they need further clarification on, thereby improving their class performance.

On the other hand, the lack of it does the contrary — lack of communication results in failure both at work and in school. Our upbringing and the environment are responsible for influencing our interaction and communication with others. People that are raised in families where communication is essential are likely to find it easy to talk to others, but those where family communication with others is minimal, even at school or work, they will be closed off. The environment might also influence out communication because we learn from what we see others doing. The ICEdge survey has adequately assessed my communication style. Because I was raised in a close-knit family where we shared a close relationship and because where I grew up, time was of value, it did not surprise me to score 5.6 in relationship and 1.3 in time management on the ICEdge assessment.

Relationship style

I achieved the highest score in the relationship style of communication. The score in the communication characteristic of network reliance was 6.2, which is an indication that I am highly reliant on personal network connections. The reason for my high score is because I exhibited the behavior that I am more comfortable engaging in business dealings with people that I am in a social relationship with and those that I share a long term relationship with. To some extent, having such behavior has its advantages, but there are also some disadvantages. Through being reliant on personal connections, I can achieve trust, security, and I can eliminate risks and uncertainty that comes from dealing with strangers. However, by failing to engage with those that I do not know, I could be missing out on excellent opportunities. If I were a person who does not wholly rely on networks, then I would leverage the business opportunities that are presented by people I do not know. I would learn about using contracts in securing business relationships with strangers and also learn that doing background checks can be an effective strategy when networking with a stranger.

The other characteristic that was assessed was a relational adjustment, where I managed a score of 6.0. The score showed that I am good at adjusting what and how I say things according to the other person's status, feelings or my social image. Among the behaviors I exhibited that influenced the high score was because I scored very highly on having the ability to adjust for feelings and status. However, I scored significantly lower on the ability to adjust communication for my image. On the behaviors that I achieved a high score, they reflected that I am considerate of other people's feelings, which makes me appear as a sensitive and moderate communicator. Also, these attributes come in handy when I am interacting with my superiors because they have to be accorded a high level of respect.

On the other hand, not being able to adjust to my image is a weakness because I am reasonably able to save my face in some situations. If I was not a person that is sensitive to other people's feeling and status, then I would not show any form of sensitivity even when delivering a negative message to an individual. Also, if I was not able to adjust in some situations to save face, then I would not shy away from speaking my mind even if it meant losing face doing it.

The last relationship trait is openness. My score was 4.5, which was the lowest among all the three relationship characteristics accessed. The score indicated that I am a somewhat open person. My perception of privacy is that it depends on the relationship you share with the other person and the feelings of the other person. On openness, my behavior that had the most significant contribution to the score is my keen ability to convey facts sensitively. I showed that I am a sensitive communicator when communicating facts especially those that might cause hurt to the recipient or stir up tension at work. The behavior makes it easy for me to relate with people in the workplace and also in school that appreciate discretion, but on the other hand, it is difficult to socialize with factual communicators. The behavior that was responsible for the low score is my inability to communicate cautiously. Part of being open is being considerate of other people's feelings. Therefore, being someone who does not have a problem initiating a conversation with even strangers’ shows I am incapable of communicating cautiously. This behavior helps me to easily socialize with other people, but it can sometimes make me appear intrusive. If I were to become more of a factual talker, then I would more likely not show sensitivity when delivering even hurtful information. In I start communicating cautiously, I will show more respect for other people's space.

Time management

Of the four styles of communication accessed, time management emerges the most poorly scored of all. The first characteristic tested was the time structure that informs of how good I am at organizing work simultaneously. The assessment offered a low score of 1.7 as a show that I tend to organize work linearly, meaning that I do one task after another which leads to more time being taken to complete all tasks. The upside to this trait is that others would understand my style of doing things, but its downside is I find it challenging to work with multitaskers. If I were to become someone that the handles work simultaneously, it would even contribute to making me a more open communicator.

The second time management behavior evaluated is scheduling. The score was even weaker than the first one at 1.2. The assessment showed that I am not a flexible person when it comes to scheduling and deadlines. Instead, I prefer to strictly adhere to the set time and I am not flexible with deadlines. As mentioned, one of the behaviors that contributed to the low score is the lack of flexibility to deadlines. I prefer to use my daily calendar and ensure to fulfill all the engagements that I have planned out within their set time. The benefit of this behavior is that I can prioritize important things. However, it is a habit that creates a lot of frustrations and feelings of being stressed and overwhelmed. The other behavior is poor flexibility to deadlines, a habit that helps me to fit well in environments requiring being efficient, responsible and showing organization. The downside to it is that when I am relating to people that are flexible to deadlines, I become frustrated. If I were to change these two habits and become flexible to deadlines and scheduling, I would be more open to discussing different deadlines, setting reasonable schedules with others, and I will avoid the frustrations of inflexibility.

Lastly, the time management behavior of sharing time emerged the most poorly performed of all with a score of 1.0. It shows that I consider interruptions when working to be disruptive. This is influenced by my behaviors of being inflexible in scheduling. I do not like engaging in small talk while I could be using the time to engage in something more constructive. The advantage of this is I usually fit well in the work environment where time is a valuable resource, but the problem is that it becomes difficult relating to those that hold a fluid perspective on time. If I practice being less strict with my time, it will allow me to relate with others better because I will have a better understanding of different perspectives towards time.

Conclusion

My scores in the relationship and time management styles of communicating are not at all surprising. They reflect exactly how I was raised and the cultural values I picked from the community I grew up in. Our family relationship was the most important thing when growing up, which influenced me to learn relating to only those that I have a close relationship with. In the society where I was raised, time was viewed as an essential resource. It is the reason that these traits have reflected in the assessment. I have learned that there are areas I need to make improvements to improve how I communicate with other people. Such as learning to become comfortable interacting with people I do not know. The entire exercise has also taught me that other people's view on certain things such as time might be different because we are raised differently

References

Li, J. (2019). Your Communication Style Overview. ICEdge.

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