Revise paper sections to fix professors comments

Fabi Hayes - PSY 110.docx by Fabiola Hayes

Submission dat e : 22- Apr- 2018 05:02AM (UT C- 07 00) Submission ID: 951153800 File name : Fabi_Hayes_- _PSY_110.do cx Word count : 1858 Charact e r count : 9903

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GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

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Comment 1

Fabi,

T his is mo re o f a repo rt o n suicide than it is a research paper o n suicide. A research paper asks a specif ic questio n and then answers that questio n. Yo u ask o ne questio n, mentio n so me o ther aspects o f suicide, then write abo ut several aspects o f suicide. Yo u need to include a very specif ic research questio n, and be sure that everything in yo ur paper helps to answer that specif ic questio n.

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Comment 2

What, exactly , is yo ur research questio n? If it's o nly "what are the risk f acto rs f o r suicide," then that's all yo ur paper sho uld talk abo ut. It sho uldn't talk abo ut epidemio lo gy o r preventio n, because they're no t part o f yo ur questio n.

Are yo u also asking abo ut the epidemio lo gy? If so , what is yo ur specif ic questio n abo ut the epidemio lo gy o f suicide?

If yo u're also asking abo ut ho w to prevent suicide, that sho uld be included in yo ur research questio n.

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