Crafting a Revision Plan

WRIT6088 U05A1 - DRAFTING YOUR TEXT LEARNER:

INSTRUCTIONS

Use the following scoring guide, along with the project information, for evaluating each learner's work.

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OVERALL COMMENTS

Hi,

Please note that the absence of in-text citations will result in a low score on the revision of this paper. Remember, any time you quote, summarize or paraphrase source material, citations must appear both within the text of the essay as well as on the references page.

Important note to ALL students as your revise your draft in the coming weeks: Remember, the main focus of your text (essay) for this course should be to focus in on and explore a topic within your field of study that can be supported by the literature. The essay should be supported by ample research which is always cited appropriately, both within the text of the essay and on the references page. Your position on this topic should be clear in the thesis statement as well as in the overall essay itself. Always be sure to read and follow all specific directions carefully for each unit.

For this assignment, you were to write a 5-8 page draft of your paper. This draft needed to include context, a thesis, support from your research sources, and a clear argument. That said, it was graded as a draft and not a final, polished text. Thus, a high grade on this draft will not necessarily translate to a high grade on the final submission.

I enjoyed reading this, and I look forward to seeing it continue to develop further in the coming weeks!

See the scoring guide for specific notes on how this draft was graded.

Best, Nicole

RUBRICS

CRITERIA 1

Introduce thesis within context for appropriate audience.(25%)COMPETENCY

Develop academic content that demonstrates critical thinking.

NON_PERFORMANCEDoes not introduce thesis within context for appropriate audience.BASICIntroduces thesis, but the context is not clearly connected to the appropriate audience.PROFICIENTIntroduces thesis within context for appropriate audience.DISTINGUISHEDIntroduces thesis within context for appropriate audience, providing a clear connection to the topic, purpose, and aspects.

COMMENTS:

You did a nice job of introducing your thesis here, and this was done within the context of writing for an appropriately targeted audience. A clear connection to topic, purpose, and aspects of your argument was evident throughout.

CRITERIA 2

Incorporate evidence with coherent placement that supports structure of arguments.(25%)COMPETENCY

Convey concepts and perspectives through organized, logical structure.

NON_PERFORMANCEDoes not incorporate evidence with coherent placement that supports structure of arguments.BASICIncorporates evidence in only a basic fashion, lacking evidence-based reasoning.PROFICIENTIncorporates evidence with coherent placement that supports structure of arguments.DISTINGUISHEDIncorporates evidence with coherent placement that supports the structure of arguments, using clear and direct reasoning.

COMMENTS:

Unfortunately, it's not possible to know where evidence is presented and from which source(s) without in-text citations.

CRITERIA 3

Present a clear and complete argument.(25%)COMPETENCY

Develop academic content that demonstrates critical thinking.

NON_PERFORMANCEDoes not present a clear and complete argument.BASICPresents only a basic argument.PROFICIENTPresents a clear and complete argument.DISTINGUISHEDPresents a well-developed, clear and complete argument.

COMMENTS:

You do a nice job presenting a draft argument here, but some paragraphs are extremely short. During the revision process, I suggest reading the paper aloud and taking any feedback received into account to ensure that each paragraph fully supports your thesis and overall topic.

CRITERIA 4

Utilize proper mechanics including spelling, grammar, and APA formatting(25%)COMPETENCY

Apply correct grammar, usage, and mechanics appropriate to audience and discipline.

NON_PERFORMANCEDoes not utilize proper mechanics including spelling, grammar, and APA formatting.BASICUtilizes most, but not all, proper mechanics including spelling, grammar, and APA formatting.PROFICIENTUtilizes proper mechanics including spelling, grammar, and APA formatting.DISTINGUISHEDUtilize proper mechanics including spelling, grammar, and APA formatting in a comprehensive and informed fashion.

COMMENTS:

Keep working on APA formatting using the excellent resources available to you here at Capella. See the documents I've posted in Updates & Handouts for a start with this.

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