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7.5 Q2 Select a piece of writing from a Web site, book, newspaper, or magazine. Imagine that you are editing it half its original length. Share the article and your revised copy with your classmates.

Original text

Sugarcane farming is an essential activity in the whole world because of the major product it provides, that is, sugar. Sugar, which is got from processing sugarcane plants, is planted by mainly farmers who deliver it to the processing factory after maturity. However, there are factors that influence sugarcane farming in Kenya, and in particular Mumias district in Kakamega County. Most of the sugarcane farmers in the western part of Kenya are pulling out of sugarcane farming due to various reasons and this study aimed to find out what the reasons are and how best to reduce the number of farmers who withdraw from this activity. In order to reduce the number of farmers who withdraw from sugarcane farming in the area, factors like input costs, availability of incentives, food security and time of payment of farmers, were of a major concern. They were able to assist the researcher to get a clear picture of what the sugarcane farmers go through and come up with necessary suggestions to curb the situation. The target population in this study was 11,895 people. 11,885 sugarcane farmers and 10 Agricultural extension officers (AEOs) in Mumias district, who had prior experience about sugarcane farming constituted the target population. For this particular population, the researcher used questionnaires to get information from them.

Link: http://erepository.uonbi.ac.ke/handle/11295/56345

Edited work

Sugarcane farming is an essential activity in the whole world because of the major product, which is sugar. Sugar, which is got from processing sugarcane plants, is planted by main farmers who deliver it to the processing factory after maturity. However, some factors influence sugarcane farming in Kenya, and particularly Mumias district in Kakamega County. Most of the sugarcane farmers in the western part of Kenya are pulling out of sugarcane farming for various reasons. This study aimed to determine the causes and how best to reduce the number of farmers who withdraw from this activity. To reduce the number of farmers who withdraw from sugarcane farming in the area, factors like input costs, availability of incentives, food security and time of payment of farmers were of major concern. They were able to assist the researcher in getting a clear picture of what the sugarcane farmers go through and come up with necessary suggestions to curb the situation. The target population in this study was 11,895 people. Eleven thousand eight hundred eighty-five sugarcane farmers and 10 Agricultural extension officers (AEOs) in Mumias district, who had prior experience with sugarcane farming, constituted the target population. For this particular population, the researcher used questionnaires to get information from them.

7.5 Q3 What responsibility do you have to point out the need for correction in a document when the author or team leader outranks you at work?

Weather the author outranks me at the workplace does not matter it is my responsibility to identify the mistakes and correct the document to ensure that it meet the required conditions before its published.

Does it make a difference if you anticipate they will take the feedback negatively?

Even with the prediction that they will take the feedback negatively does not make a difference because the main aim of pinpointing the mistake is to improve the quality of the document and not the reaction from the authors.

How do you reconcile these concerns with your responsibility to the organization?

The best way of reconciling is by discussing the pinpointed mistakes and explain the importance of making changes. Through the explanation the importance of correcting errors to the organization has to be explained well. Additionally, it is important to explain that the performed work is not based on individual feeling but the responsibility given by the organization.

Reference

Factors influencing withdrawal of farmers from sugarcane farming; A case of Mumias district, Kakamega County, Kenya. (n.d.). UoN Digital Repository Home. https://erepository.uonbi.ac.ke/handle/11295/56345