PowerPoint presentation - history

I certainly get a sense of the research from your presentation. Here are some thoughts on your draft. 

1. Introduce the topic more specifically in your first slide, the information in slide 4 should be emphasized in the first slide. 

2. Avoid overly broad statements like "During ancient times..." When, specifically? The tomb must have a date. 

3. There are tombs in Egypt that are more than a 1000 years old (Slide 3), we've considered a lot of them over the quarter. Nefertary is not necessarily the most popular tomb in Egypt, why say that?

4. When citing specific information from the paper, provide a citation (Havicht et al. 2016:page number). Be clear about which reference you are using to support which statement, right now, I can't tell where the information you are presenting comes from. 

5. Connect the information you present to the broader issues. For example, on Slide 11 you state "The curved paintings on the wall..." Why is this detail important?

6. Please proofread

7. Provide a map of the tomb so the reader can understand what you are discussing (slide 14). Provide more detail about the condition of the tomb.  

8. Slide 16, perhaps find a clearer image and connect it to the text in the slide. As it is now, I can't tell what that image is illustrating. 

9. Go through and get rid of repetitive information. 

Generally, include more detail, and fewer overly broad statements.