CAPSTONE (This is a REWRITE) (Behavior and Perceptions to High HIV rate among African Americans) 7 PAGES

1. Dependent locations” is not readily clear what you mean—U.S. territories? Use that Google or email the writing center tutors/editors with quick questions

2. In the residencies the writing center lists several terms that should not be used and one is words that end in “ly” Change “additionally” to “In addition” Don’t use Also at the beginning of sentence, and minimize use of it in the middle of sententences. No contractions “can’t” to “cannot”

3. That same sentence has “that’s” refering to groups of AA women so the contraction is for singular noun

4. You have several instances where there is no space before a citation in parentheses, example “HIV/AIDS(“HIV” and African Americans, “2020 – Actually the ending parenthesis is missing and the period after 2020.

5. There are several sentences that are long separated by punctuation, commas and semi-colons, but they have “sentence construction” Please run your document through Grammarly.com making sure that “Track changes” are turned off

6. The title does not align with a qualitative design and the Purpose section

7. In the Background all the studies you are citing are older than 5 years, so you have not done the correct literature search. Make appointment with the Walden librarian. In addition, the instructions for the Background state to write what information about these studies will help you to develop your study. Arya and Paxton have nothing to do with your topic; the second one does but is from 2007. Quickstats seems to be an Internet set of facts and the CDC has them but not only are they from 2009, since it is not a peer-reviewed publication it is also not appropriate for the Background. If you were citing the original author of the theory then you would have to cite the original publication journal/book and an older year would be OK and we refer to these sources as “seminal”

8. Citations in-text and References. (Laurencin CT , et al., 2018). In APA 6 we had to cite all the authors if there were 5 or less so I think you need to cite more here but go by the APA 7 edition.

9. There is a website where you can get the APA 7 or any other style by inputting what they ask for which are all the parts of the journal articles. This way you will be sure that it is in the correct format for the References section.

10. https://ctmirror.org/2018/07/23/despite-progress-hiv-racial-divide-persists/  This is an advocacy link but comments on the Laurencin article and the real lives of African Americans with HIV. I want to make the point that just because only peer-reviewed journals are allowed for literature review, students need to read all they can about their population and the real lived problem and as background to understand what happened in the last 10-20 years that led to the magnitude of the problem now.

11. Finally, the last point for now, is that you repeat the same information in several sections. The information has a dedicated place in each section so this means that either you do not have enough material or the correct material to write about. Going over the Instructions and the Prospectus Checklist will help a lot. I suggest that you work on one section at a time.

 

This was supposed to be just a browse and file in the order received, but I realized that I could not provide the review on a document that does not have recent peer-reviewed publications, and the sections need to align across the document.

 

The Prospectus Checklist needs to be a twin with the Prospectus Capstone document so please return after you revise.