Two peer respond
1. Comment on the areas your classmate requested help with. Be specific and make suggestions or recommendations that he or she can use. (instead of “make the second paragraph longer,” suggest “try adding an example or two to the second paragraph to better support your topic sentence. When I read that parargraph, I thought of xxxx. Have you considered including something about xxxx?)
2. Review the evaluation criteria on the assignment sheet. Identify at least one criteria your classmate should consider when revising. Be specific as you explain why you chose that criterion.
3. Identify one criterion your classmate did well. Be specific as you explain.
Remember, you are not an editor. You are a reader trying to understand the writer's ideas.
Additional Structured Response to a Classmate (Due Sunday):
Repeat the structured response above for one other classmate.
Nicole White
En 104-8A
English Composition 1
Ms McGee
My Community
St. John the Baptist Parish was established in 1807 as one of the original 19 parishes of the Territory of New Orleans, which became the state of Louisiana. St. John the Baptist is a part of the New Orleans Metairie, La. Metropolitan Statistical area. St. John the Baptist Parish is a parish located in the U.S. state of Louisiana. As of the 2010 censsus the population was 45,924. The parish seat is Edgard, an unincorporated area, and the largest city is Laplace which is also unincorporated. The parish includes three nationally significant example of 19th century plantation, architecture; Evergreen Plantation, Whitney Plantation Historic District, and San Francisco Plantation House. Present-day St. John the Baptist Parish includes the third permanent settlement in what is now the state of Louisiana, after Natchitoches (1714 and New Orleans (1718).
I want to motivate our youth and bring the community together by making them aware of the situations in St. John Parish. I believe all the violence happens because no one is coming together to better the kids. I would like to awaken the community and show them it takes a village. Programs that won’t just help them get on welfare but will get their education. An huge part of the youth in the community parent are in jail or either on drugs. I want to help kids form broking homes heal.
Claire Haggarty
Cannabis, is it a menace to society or a useful tool with various positive applications? Cannabis, or marijuana, has numerous practical uses and applications, especially in the medical field. The legalization of marijuana could have a positive impact on not only the medical field but also the economy and the overall health of people who are already using it illegally.
Background Information
Marijuana, or cannabis, originates from the hemp plant which can be found just about anywhere in the world. It was originally used for its textile applications such as rope or cloth. Areas in central Asia were the first to discover its medicinal drug qualities and put them into practice which later spread to the rest of the continents. In most historical practices, cannabis was used for religious purposes or for celebrations in order to both relax users and increase the appetite of participants. Later it was applied to traditional Indian medicine very similar to the way it is applied to specific therapies now in the United States.
Positive Applications in Medicine
The use of medical marijuana has become increasingly common. Cannabis has been used to help treat and alleviate the symptoms of various diseases and disorders over the years. Multiple studies have shown that cannabis-based medicine can aid patients suffering from cancer, multiple sclerosis (MS), eating disorders, post-traumatic stress disorder (PTSD), human immunodeficiency virus (HIV), and many more. I have known many people who have suffered from eating and anxiety disorders like anorexia who have used marijuana to either calm them down or to increase their appetite when they are at malnourished. There was a five week trial done with a group of 66 MS patients which came to the conclusion that with the aid of cannabis, sleep disturbance, tremors, and pain were either greatly reduced or better tolerated by those who used it opposed to the control group. Similar studies have been done with patients with HIV and those undergoing chemotherapy with very similar results. When given to patients with PTSD, studies have shown that cannabis helps patients cope and manage their condition. Studies also show that by helping PTSD sufferers sleep, patients showed more improvement.
Reducing Risk
Legalization will also allow for regulation of the substance and will reduce the risk of harmful substances being put into it and harming the users. Often times drugs that are sold by dealers can be cut or laced with countless harmful substances, such as rat poison, heroin, cocaine, PCP or acid in order to both make it more addictive and to also stretch their supply to make more money. There have been countless deaths and injuries related to “fake weed” or lacing such as a recent case in Illinois that resulted in the deaths of two people and fifty-four others left with severe bleeding. Regulation of the substance will greatly reduce this as well as the fact that if the substance is made available to the public, drug dealers will not be able to profit from it thus keeping people out of risky situations in order to obtain it. It should also be noted that states that have legalized marijuana have lower use rates than states that do not.
Helping the Economy
The legalization of marijuana also allows for the substance to be taxed, just like cigarettes, and will therefore help the economy as well. “an estimate of the price elasticity of demand for cannabis of -0.418, which suggests that legalizing and tazing recreational cannabis use would be lucrative for government treasuries” (Halcoussis). As seen in states such as Colorado, Maine, Nevada and California, the taxing of legalized marijuana have seen an increase of revenue.
Opposing Arguments
In opposition to all of this, many believe that the legalization of marijuana would be detrimental to our nation. Many believe that marijuana is a “gateway” drug and that long-term use can lead to addiction. Psychosis and pulmonary disorders have also been linked to long-term use of this substance.
In Conclusion
In conclusion, the legalization of cannabiswould allow for countless positive medical applications to be put into use nationwide, it would reduce health and safety risks to those who currently obtain it illegally, and would have a positive impact on the economy due to taxation and regulation. Overall, the positives of legalization vastly outweigh the negatives.
References
Adverse Health Effects of Marijuana Use | NEJM. (n.d.). Retrieved August 8, 2018, from https://www.nejm.org/doi/full/10.1056/nejmra1402309
Halcoussis, D., Lowenberg, A. D., & Roof, Z. (2017). Estimating the price elasticity of demand for cannabis: A geographical and crowdsourced approach. Revista De Métodos Cuantitativos Para La Economía y La Empresa, 23, 119-136. Retrieved from https://prx-herzing.lirn.net/login?url=https://search-proquest-com.prx-herzing.lirn.net/docview/1938560053?accountid=167104
Howard, J., & Baldacci, M. (2018, April 02). Fake weed leaves two dead, 54 with severe bleeding. Retrieved August 8, 2018, from https://www.cnn.com/2018/04/02/health/fake-weed-illinois-death-bn/index.html
H. (n.d.). Medicinal Use of Cannabis: History and Current Status. Retrieved August 8, 2018, from https://www.hindawi.com/journals/prm/2001/469629/cta/
Rog, D. J., Nurmikko, T. J., Friede, T., & Young, C. A. (2005, September 27). Randomized, controlled trial of cannabis-based medicine in central pain in multiple sclerosis. Retrieved August 8, 2018, from http://n.neurology.org/content/65/6/812.short
Wilkinson, S. T., Yarnell, S., Radhakrishnan, R., Ball, S. A., & D'Souza, D. C. (2016, January). Marijuana Legalization: Impact on Physicians and Public Health. Retrieved August 8, 2018, from https://www.annualreviews.org/doi/abs/10.1146/annurev-med-050214-013454
1.
Comment
on
the
areas
your
classmate
requested
help
with.
Be
specific
and
make
suggestions
or
recommendations
that
he
or
she
can
use.
(instead
of
“make
the
second
paragraph
longer,”
suggest
“try
adding
an
example
or
two
to
the
second
paragraph
to
better
s
upport
your
topic
sentence.
When
I
read
that
parargraph,
I
thought
of
xxxx.
Have
you
considered
including
something
about
xxxx?)
2.
Review
the
evaluation
criteria
on
the
assignment
sheet.
Identify
at
least
one
criteria
your
classmate
should
consider
when
revising.
Be
specific
as
you
explain
why
you
chose
that
criterion.
3.
Identify
one
criterion
your
classmate
did
well.
Be
specific
as
you
explain.
Remember,
you
are
not
an
editor.
You
are
a
reader
trying
to
understand
the
writer's
ideas.
Additional
Structured
Response
to
a
Classmate
(Due
Sunday):
Repeat
the
structured
response
above
for
one
other
classmate.
Nicole White
En 104
-
8A
English Composition 1
Ms McGee
My Community
St. John the Baptist Parish was established in 1807 as one of
the original 19 parishes of the
Territory of New Orleans,
which became the state of Louisiana. St. John the Baptist is a part
of
the New Orleans Metairie, La. Metropolitan Statistical area.
St. John the Baptist Parish is a
parish located in the U.S. state of Louisiana. As of the 2010 cens
sus the population was 4
5,924.
The parish seat is Edgard, an
unincorporated area, and the largest city is Laplace which is also
unincorporated. The parish includes three nationally significant example of 19
th
century
plantation,
architecture; Evergreen Plantation, Whitney Plantat
ion Historic District, and San
Francisco Plantation House. Present
-
day St. John the Baptist Parish includes the third