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Reviewed Paper: ntp1323763 - Thu Oct 21 4:26:45 EDT 2021

Paper Title: Global warming- Cause and effect first draft

No. of Pages: 2

Paper Style: MLA Paper Type: Other (please describe in your p

Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? Yes

Feedback Areas: Focus/Thesis Statement, Sentence Structure

Paper Goals: Its a cause and effect first draft paper. Our professor wants us to get a feed back

from the essay.

Review Summary:

Hello, Chukwuemeka, and welcome to NetTutor! My name is Janolyn, and I am happy to review your cause and effect paper.

Strengths:

You have explained the different causes and effects of global warming in detail. The body paragraphs have been organized

cohesively and each of the ideas has been supported with an ample amount of research. Great job!

Suggestions:

Make sure to develop a thesis statement at the end of the introduction that clearly states the causes of global warming that

you have focused on. You want to provide the readers with an idea of what they should expect from the paper. The thesis

should clearly state the supporting points that you have discussed in the paper: industrialization, deforestation, and the

greenhouse effect.

Also, make sure to provide examples (wherever applicable) to support your views. For example, try to provide some

examples of the animals and plants that have now become extinct due to global warming. Also, what are the ways in which

greenhouse farming affects our environment?

I have marked the first instances of grammar and sentence issues in the paper. Those comments will help you locate and fix

other similar errors. You can also submit a second draft of the paper, but be sure to mark it as a second draft. Thanks for

using NetTutor! Please visit us again, and tell your friends!

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Reviewed Paper: ntp1323763 - Thu Oct 21 4:26:45 EDT 2021

Your last name and

the page number

should be written in

the upper right corner

of each page.

Good introduction. You have provided

pertinent background information on

global warming.

Underdeveloped thesis statement:

What are the causes of global warming

that you will discuss in your paper?

Make sure to develop a thesis

statement at the end of the introduction

that clearly states the supporting

points.

Make sure to mention the

supporting points in the thesis

statement.

MLA-style in-text citations require you

to mention the last name of the author

and the page number (if any).

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Reviewed Paper: ntp1323763 - Thu Oct 21 4:26:45 EDT 2021

Missing semi-comma before

introductory phrase: In a sentence

with two independent clauses that are

joined by “thus,” you need a

semi-colon before it, not a comma.

Try to provide statistics or numerical

research to show the huge difference

in temperatures.

Incorrect preposition: You want to

make sure to use the appropriate

preposition.

Consider explaining how forests

prevent global warming.

Spelling error.

Word choice error. I think you meant "greenhouse farming"

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Reviewed Paper: ntp1323763 - Thu Oct 21 4:26:45 EDT 2021

Awkward/confusing sentence

structure.

Consider providing some

examples of the animals and

plants that have now become

extinct due to global warming.

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Reviewed Paper: ntp1323763 - Thu Oct 21 4:26:45 EDT 2021

Make sure to mention the page numbers in the respective in-text citations.

Also, make sure to follow MLA-style formatting to develop the citations.

Please refer to this link for more information:

https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla_formatting_and_style_guide/mla_formatting_and_style_guide.html

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