Narrative Essay-600 words

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Lori Holland Instructor Marc Aramini English 1010 31th August, 2020

An episode of my passage from childhood to adolescence

When I was a child, I used to think that life was perfect. I used that everything was perfect and I

could get what I wanted easily without struggling and I did not have an idea that the world was

full of struggles and challenges. However, one day, it downed to me that everything was not

exactly what I had believed all along in my childhood. It downed to me that I had developed

some sense of adulthood and I was transforming from childhood to adolescence.

The day was normal like any other day in our childhood where I went out with my friends to

play without knowing that it would be the last day I would play such childish games. We played

hid and seek in the morning and in the afternoon; we decided to cause trouble in the

neighborhood, as it was our usual behavior. We decided to go to our favorite Indian neighbor

Komal, a single mother who loved to garden her flowers so much. While hiding in the bush, we

started throwing stones at her while she was busy gardening her flowers. Every time a stone

passed by or hit her, she would stand up and yell furiously towards the bush where we were

hiding. When she started moving towards the bush, we would yell out to each other and run.

In the process of running away, Komal shouted my name and demanded that I grow up and stop

behaving like a child. Although I ran away with my fellow playmates, these words hit me in my

central nerve and I thought about them for a while. Was I really a child or had I grown up to be

an adult stuck in a child’s body? I had to leave my playmates and went home to do some

Commented [MOU1]: Good start, but what does “used” mean here? I believed that everything was perfect and that I could get what I wanted easily without struggling. (That’s a good place to stop to avoid a run-on sentence.)

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important chores that my mother had left for me before she went to work early in the morning. I

had to think about what I had done that day, saw that actually it was all childish, and I started re-

evaluating my ways. My conscience started to speak to me that I was 13 years, which meant that

I had grown up and it was time to take responsibility of my actions.

Just when I thought I had started turning my life around, that night something happened that

propelled me towards adulthood at a speed that I had not expected. After dinner, as usual the

children went to bed while our parents were left to discuss adult stuff. That night I did not feel

sleepy because I was worried that I had turned out to be an adult so fast. While I was still

thinking about my childhood and the sweet memories, I heard to all. I heard my dad literary

crying like a little baby. He had been out of work for a year now and our mom was the one

keeping our family afloat but she seemed to strain each and every day.

“I can’t May, I can’t”, he said. “I just don’t feel like a father anymore”.

“Darling calm down”, mum replied. “everything is gonna work out”.

“even if you tell me to calm down, I feel useless”. He interjected

“What sort of father am I if I cannot provide for my family. What is my role even in this

household? When will my kids ever feel proud of having a father?”

By those questions, he started sobbing loudly and I could not stand to hear my dad crying. So I

woke up, woke up my little brother of 8 years and we started walking outside. It was a full moon

and thus we did not fear darkness more than we feared hearing our father crying. We met with

Komal, who seemingly understood my situation that I had transformed to an adolescent phase.

She took us in and we slept that night at her home. The person we had overlooked and

downgraded in most of our childhood was the one to console us and understand my

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transformation. It had downed to me that life is not always perfect, there are a lot of challenges

and that I had to brace myself to face these challenges while I grow up.

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Commented [MOU16]: There are a lot of challenges I had to brace myself to face growing up.