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English Composition II

February 20, 2021

Research Question: What is the impact of technology and use of electronics devices on today society ?

Working Thesis: The use of technology and electronic device has grown exponentially and has impacted negatively the society in a way where most people have become dependent to their smart phones or electronics devices and this is becoming a serious concern on today society.

Detailed Outline

I. Working Thesis in Introduction: The use of technology and electronic device has grown exponentially and has impacted negatively the society in a way where most people have become dependent to their smart devices or electronics devices and this is becoming a serious concern on today society.

A. Brief description and definition in the abstract of the positive impact of technology on society

B. Describe positive impact

· Education: made learning more interactive and collaborative, this helps people better engage with the material that they are learning and have trouble with.

· Communication: Technology brought many new methods of electronic communication

· Healthcare: technological improvements in health care have given a chance to doctors to treat their patients in an environment that is virtual through the use of mediums such as video conferencing

· Legal: allows the judges to still listen to the cases of hard core criminals who cannot be allowed to get into the court rooms due to security reasons.

· Global impact: with the corona virus pandemic, most employee are working remotely, introducing on-line learning for most student due to the pandemic. Source: Exploring The Invisible Impact of technology, The New York Time

· Television and multimedia services

C. Global impact: with the corona virus pandemic, most employee are working remotely, introducing on-line learning for most student due to the pandemic.

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II. Introduce concerns

A. Education: technology can be a factor of distraction in schoolwork

B. Communication: Mobile technology can decrease communication and relations between people. There’s less personal time, where you find that you don’t have enough time for yourself because you’re always in contact with someone.

C. Psychological and physical: depression, anxiety, reduced of physical activity, sleep problem.

Source 1:: Medical News today, page 15

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D. Privacy: loss of privacy online: anyone can find you anywhere, at any time of the day

III. Counterargument

A. Despite the fact that we cannot really ignore that there are a number of ways in which technology negatively impacts our society, for the better part it has greatly helped to make out lives better

B. Functioning of society after implementation of technology.

Source1: Lin, C. A., & Atkin, D. J. (2002). Communication technology and society: Audience adoption and uses. Creskill, N.J: Hampton Press.

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IV. Conclusion

A. The scope of influence created by technology is immense and has changed the way people interact and think

B. While technology has many positive effects, there are some possible risks.

C. Mention critical questions regarding technology and social development.

C. Reflection Questions

1. Learning to conduct research is important because it is a skill you will use both in academia and in your professional life. It improves critical thinking and empowers you to find information for yourself. Consider the process of researching as a whole. What was the most challenging aspect of the process for you? (2-3 sentences)

The most challenging aspect for me was to come up with an idea. Finding the right subject was very difficult. I had to look to a topic where I would talk about my opinion, what other people think and also think about different angles.

2. The working thesis statement is a proposed answer to your research question. It should clearly identify a debatable topic and take a position on one side of that topic. Analyze the effectiveness of your working thesis statement. (3-4 sentences)

In my working statement, I described how the technology has negatively impact the society and I used as example the fact that most people have become dependent to their mobile devices which is a huge problem on today society.

3. A detailed outline is an effective tool for laying out the progression of an argument. It allows you to consider the arrangement and organization of your ideas, as well as choose places to incorporate outside source materials. Review your detailed outline and summarize the argument you've presented. (3-4 sentences)

In the outline, I focused on talking about technology in general, what society has gained from the evolution. Details explanation of advantages of technology in society by listing different categories and find a link with our global situation with the corona virus pandemic. I also listed the negative impact of technology in society by introducing some concerns and others.

4. You will use the same topic on three of the remaining Touchstones in this course. What kind of feedback would be helpful for you? What are specific questions you might have as you go deeper into the research process? (2-3 sentences)

I would like to know how detail was my outline and If I need to expand my research to gather more information in order to cover this topic.. If I missed something, please guide me in the right direction.

Touchstone 1.2 Rubric and Feedback
Rubric Category	Feedback	Score (acceptable, needs improvement etc.)
Research Question	Constructs a precise and focused research question relative to a current and debatable topic.	9/10
Working Thesis	Includes a working thesis that takes a well-articulated, clear, specific position on one side of an issue.	8/10
Detailed Outline	Outline is well-developed and labeled with sufficient notes, such that the reader can get a sense of how the essay will build its argument; all necessary elements of the outline are present.	12/15
Style	Demonstrates effective word choices, primarily avoids redundancy and imprecise language, and uses a variety of sentence structures.	3/5
Conventions	There are occasional minor errors in grammar, punctuation, spelling, capitalization, and formatting.	4/5
Reflection	Primarily demonstrates thoughtful reflection, but some responses are lacking in detail or insight; primarily follows response length guidelines.	4/5
Overall Score and Feedback: 40 /50 Thanks again for your submission. The outline you provided has most of the components of an academic outline but needs additional information to guide the reader towards understanding what will be the focus of your discussion in each of the segments. In writing an academic essay, a minimum of two sources are required to make informed argumentative discussion on an issue. You did that in some of the segments but two sources are required for all the segments. Also remember to write the complete source information for each of the sources that will be used. Best wishes.

�This is a good research question.

�Very good positionstatement/thesis.

�Two sources are required for each segment.

�Complete source information is required.