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Melody Bedichek Research Paper

by Melody Bedichek

Submission date: 04-Dec-2022 09:39PM (UTC-0500) Submission ID: 1971388926 File name: 102786_Melody_Bedichek_Melody_Bedichek_Research_Paper_5829820_436998917.docx (20.28K) Word count: 1562 Character count: 8748

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7% SIMILARITY INDEX

4% INTERNET SOURCES

1% PUBLICATIONS

6% STUDENT PAPERS

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Melody Bedichek Research Paper ORIGINALITY REPORT

PRIMARY SOURCES

Submitted to College of the Redwoods (District) Student Paper

Submitted to Fresno City College Student Paper

Submitted to Marquette University Student Paper

Submitted to Tulane University Student Paper

Submitted to Abilene Christian University Student Paper

www.coursehero.com Internet Source

Submitted to University of Western Sydney Student Paper

www.ipl.org Internet Source

Exclude quotes Off

Exclude bibliography Off

Exclude matches < 3 words

FINAL GRADE

61/100

Melody Bedichek Research Paper GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

It's clear that you have a solid idea as what you want to analyze and using the Marxist Literary Theory is very applicable; however, your thesis statement needed to be focused and that would have helped your paper to be more focused.

You used the same paragraph format and changed only the government "act" that you wanted to highlight. You repeated the same one or two phrases throughout the entire paper. This made the paper cumbersome, and your argument did not flow as well as it could have.

Additionally, your quotes did not help with proving your thesis. The sources could be more useful if you pulled out their authors' main points. Marxist Literary Theory should consider who has the power, who does not, and the result; what sets of beliefs drive the characters; how power is allocated differently; what power struggles are present.

10 additional points were deducted because you did not use your primary source - no direct quotes and it is not listed on your Works Cited page.

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Comment 1 | Thesis

Your thesis statement should be one sentence and more concise than what you gave here.

Comment 2 | Mechanics

Bergeron

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Comment 3 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 4 | Analysis

How does it benefit the powerful and wealthy when all citizens are required to wear "inhibitors" if they have an exceptional ability?

Comment 5 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 6 | Research

How does this help prove your thesis or help the point you are making in this paragraph?

Comment 7 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 8 | Mechanics

Overuse

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Comment 9 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 10 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 11 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 12 | Mechanics

This phrase is over-used throughout your paper.

Comment 13 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 14 | Research

This quote does not make sense and does not reinforce your point.

Comment 15 | Mechanics

Overuse

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Comment 16 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 17 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 18 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 19 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 20 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 21 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 22 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 23 | Mechanics

Overuse

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Comment 24 | Research

This quote does not make your point

Comment 25 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 26 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 27 | Mechanics

Literary Theory incorrectly used

Comment 28 | Mechanics

Overuse

Comment 29 | Mechanics

Do not use "In conclusion" in your summary

Comment 30 | MLA/Documents

Should be at the top of the next page

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Comment 31 | MLA/Documents

You're missing the primary source, "Harrison Bergeron."

Comment 32 | MLA/Documents

Missing links for websites and dates accessed

Comment 33 | MLA/Documents

Not in alphabetical order

RUBRIC: ENG 102 RESEARCH PAPER

THESIS (15%)

INSUFFICIENT (0)

BELOW STANDARDS (10)

APPROACHES STANDARDS (15)

MEETS STANDARDS (20)

ANALYSIS (20%)

INSUFFICIENT (0)

BELOW STANDARDS (10)

APPROACHES STANDARDS (15)

MEETS STANDARDS (20)

ORGANIZATION (10%)

INSUFFICIENT (0)

BELOW STANDARDS (10)

APPROACHES STANDARDS (15)

MEETS STANDARDS (20)

RESEARCH (20%)

14.25 / 20

15 / 20

Thesis is absent or inappropriate

Thesis is vague, simplistic, or unclear.

The writer provides a valid thesis that states the purpose or argument of the paper. Statement may lack some originality, depth, or clarity.

The writer provides a thoughtful, valid thesis that clearly states the purpose of the paper.

15 / 20

Analysis and Critical Thinking

The paper makes no real attempt at critical thinking or analysis. Largely consists of plot summary, or repeating what the research says without context.

Student does not always display effective critical thinking or analysis. Parts of the paper rely on summary, or simply reports what the research is saying on the subject.

Student generally demonstrates effective critical thinking and thoughtful analysis, with minor or infrequent lapses.

Student consistently demonstrates effective critical thinking and thoughtful analysis.

10 / 20

The essay does not employ a logical progression of ideas, but seems instead to be a "stream of consciousness" or an "information dump."

The essay is generally organized but sometimes contains digressions or a lack of focus, or ideas that don't clearly support the thesis.

The essay is generally well-organized, with minor exceptions.

The paper is organized in a clear, logical manner throughout.

10 / 20

Research and use of textual evidence

INSUFFICIENT (0)

BELOW STANDARDS (10)

APPROACHES STANDARDS (15)

MEETS STANDARDS (20)

MECHANICS (15%)

INSUFFICIENT (0)

BELOW STANDARDS (10)

APPROACHES STANDARDS (15)

MEETS STANDARDS (20)

MLA/DOCUMENTS (20%)

INSUFFICIENT (0)

BELOW STANDARDS (10)

APPROACHES STANDARDS (15)

MEETS STANDARDS (20)

The author does not consistently use research or textual evidence to support their points. Research is not scholarly, or absent.

The author's details are not specific enough to be particularly effective or convincing. Some required sources may not be scholarly, or are not clearly used in the paper.

The author uses specific details that prove the thesis of the paper. All sources are scholarly and present in the paper, though some may not be used effectively.

The author uses a sufficient amount of specific details from valid research and literary texts that effectively and convincingly prove the paper's thesis. All required research is scholarly and present in the paper.

20 / 20

Grammar/Mechanics

Many sentences are not clear; major and frequent grammar/mechanical errors present.

Some sentences are not clear and understandable; there are major or frequent errors present.

Most sentences are clear and understandable, but a few minor or infrequent errors are present.

All sentences are clear and understandable; the author employs vocabulary, grammar and mechanics that are nearly perfect.

15 / 20

MLA format/documentation is either nonexistent or consistently incorrect.

MLA format/documentation is inconsistent, incorrect, or absent at times.

MLA format/documentation is generally effective. A few minor errors are present.

MLA format/documentation is present and consistently effective throughout.