Media Analysis - 500 words
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Media Analysis by Kelechi Onyekwere
Submission date: 07-Jul-2021 10:31PM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: 1616968636 File name: oodle_temp_turnitintool_1301193303.Media_Analysis_Onyekwere.docx (17.87K) Word count: 617 Character count: 3105
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Media Analysis ORIGINALITY REPORT
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theloraxfilm.wikia.com Internet Source
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1/1 Media Analysis GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
Hello, Kelechi! I enjoyed reading your media analysis essay. You have a great draft going here as you've included many specific details and examples throughout to examine how one part affects the whole media production.
I've made some rubric-specific notes throughout for your consideration. For example, you'll need to clarify your introduction to introduce the film right from the beginning.
Also, you should revise your thesis a bit as well as add content throughout. Make sure to use citations in MLA style as well.
I look forward to reading more of your work, Kelechi.
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Hello!
My name is J.V. I hope these comments will assist you as you continue to learn about the writing process. I look forward to reading your work!
*Revise Title* | Format
Here, instead of using the topic of the assignment or a shortened title, you could create a title which captures the reader's attention. Example:
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A narrative essay on a first road trip: Waterfalls and Concrete
A compare and contrast essay: Is One Mode of Technology Better?
A research/argumentative essay: Spyware: What Matters Most
A persuasive letter: Families Should Spend Time Together
What do you think?
Wordy | Language Wordy: If you use too many words to describe a relatively minor point, your paper may seem wordy. In order to be as concise as possible, trim your sentences down and use longer, more meaningful words. Try to use fewer two- and three-letter words, passive constructions, and weak verbs such as "seem" and "appear." Additional Comment
Instead, introduce the film or book you'll be discussing (the Lorax).
*Format citation to meet MLA style | Research
You should punctuate/format your citations correctly (here's a link to MLA In-Text Citations Basics).
Also, here's an example:
Paraphrase:
...and then the economy would flourish (Smith 45).
Direct quote:
"...and the economy would do well" (Smith 45).
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Or, you'll use part of the name of the article (1-3 words) if there is no author, like this:
("Global Warming" 562).
No page numbers:
("Global Warming").
Always place the period at the end of the parenthetical citation.
In addition, make sure to add the page number if your source is a downloadable file with page numbers (or a print source).
Comment 1 | Thesis
Be more specific here. Look at body paragraph two and three to see how you could clarify your thesis.
Review topic sentence | Organization Review your claim to be sure it specifically and completely addresses the task.
CTRL - C | Research This section of writing appears to be "CTRL - C," a reference to the keyboard shortcut for copy. “CTRL - C” plagiarism occurs when a significant portion of text is copied without any changes or alterations. Paraphrase by writing the statement in your own words and adding a citation.
Comment 2 no comment
*Format citation to meet MLA style | Research
You should punctuate/format your citations correctly (here's a link to MLA In-Text Citations Basics).
Also, here's an example:
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Paraphrase:
...and then the economy would flourish (Smith 45).
Direct quote:
"...and the economy would do well" (Smith 45).
Or, you'll use part of the name of the article (1-3 words) if there is no author, like this:
("Global Warming" 562).
No page numbers:
("Global Warming").
Always place the period at the end of the parenthetical citation.
In addition, make sure to add the page number if your source is a downloadable file with page numbers (or a print source).
*Develop ideas further | Support
Here, you could develop this idea much further. Think about this: How does this situation/event/evidence support my idea/claim? How can I use this idea to connect to my claim? How can I help readers see the connection between this event and my thesis?
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Include evidence | Research Specific evidence (such as examples, facts, or quotes from a source) is needed to support your ideas. Find and include evidence from the source(s) to support this idea. Additional Comment
Don't forget to use evidence to support your ideas.
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*Develop ideas further | Support
Here, you could develop this idea much further. Think about this: How does this situation/event/evidence support my idea/claim? How can I use this idea to connect to my claim? How can I help readers see the connection between this event and my thesis?
*Revise parenthetical citations in MLA | Research
You'll want to reformat your parenthetical citations to meet MLA style. Here is a helpful resource for revising your citations.
Connect to claim | Support This sentence is starting to relate to your position on the topic. Explain to your readers how this idea supports your claim.
Revise conclusion | Organization A conclusion works to bring your argument to a close, leaving your reader fully persuaded about your position on this scientific topic. Include a clear conclusion at the end of your writing in order to bring the claim, evidence, and reasoning that you have discussed to an effective conclusion.
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RUBRIC: ENG102V3 MEDIA ANALYSIS_DRAFT
THESIS
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SUPPORT
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Above Average
Thesis & Focus: Thesis, focus on single element of media, central idea, audience, purpose, digressions
Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of audience and purpose. Focus is unclear. Readers cannot discern the essay’s central idea.
Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently addressed. Focus might be unclear or muddled between more than one part of chosen media. Reveals limited awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either lacking or inconsistently addressed.
Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or otherwise problematic. Focus is clear but perhaps digresses some. Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent. Central idea is perhaps too general and supported by irrelevant examples.
Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout most of the paper. Focus is limited to ONE part of chosen media. Awareness of audience and purpose is sufficient. Central idea is clear and maintained in most of the essay.
Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the entire paper. Focus is limited to ONE part of chosen media. Paper demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea/focus maintained throughout.
Below Average
Support & Development Thesis support, thesis development, analysis of media, use of examples, logic, and reason
No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or evidence. Body of essay fails to analyze chosen media. Topic development is flawed or non-existent.
Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. Body of essay analyzes chosen media very ineffectively. Topic development may have been attempted, but does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear reasoning.
More support is needed. Some examples may be vague. Body of essay analyzes chosen media, perhaps ineffectively. Some irrelevant support may be present, but most evidence supports thesis.
Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way. Body of essay analyzes chosen media effectively. Examples are sufficient. Thesis is supported and developed in most paragraphs.
Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement of evidence. Body of essay analyzes chosen media very effectively. All assertions are supported and relate to thesis.
ORGANIZATION
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LANGUAGE
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Average
Coherence & Organization: Introduction, conclusion, body paragraphs, transitions, topic sentences
No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no transitions. Demonstrates little-to-no understanding of organization. Many sentences within paragraphs do not relate to each other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May contain no discernible topic sentences.
Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic. Few transitions. Perhaps numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic topic sentences. Demonstrates little understanding of organization.
Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one significant weakness is present: undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion, illogical paragraph order. Adequate transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some paragraphs may lack clear topic sentences. Demonstrates basic understanding of organization.
Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although improvements could be made. Most paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a clear plan of development. Transitions are clear throughout most of the paper. Demonstrates good understanding of organization.
Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion: Introduction establishes the essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and main ideas without merely copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and effective transitions are present throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent understanding of organization.
Superior
Language & Style: Word choice, repetition, redundancy, awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form (their/there, etc.), typos/misspellings, vocabulary
May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Fails to demonstrate competent language use; sentences and vocabulary are inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent.
May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Contains repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure and/or limited vocabulary.
May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence constructions and vocabulary may be limited or repetitive.
May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied sentence construction and vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor.
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GRAMMAR
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PUNCTUATION
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FORMAT
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May contain 1 error in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 1 error in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex sentence construction and vocabulary. Little-to-no unnecessary repetition.
Superior
Grammar: Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors, verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun agreement
Contains more than 5 different grammar errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 4 – 5 different grammar errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 2 – 3 different grammar errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 1 grammar error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.
Contains either no grammar errors, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.
Superior
Punctuation & Capitalization: Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization errors, semicolon errors, colon errors
Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.
Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.
Above Average
Format: heading, title, margins, spacing, length, underlined thesis, other assignment-specific required elements *Length for Media Analysis is 500 words minimum
Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing four or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.
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RESEARCH
INADEQUATE
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Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing three elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.
Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing two elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.
Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing one element (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length meets minimum requirements of 500 words.
Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of heading, title, margins, spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum requirements of 500 words.
Average
Source minimums, incorporation of sources (including use of signal phrases), use of research to argue topic, MLA in-text quote formatting, Works Cited list This paper requires at least two sources: chosen media + one other source.
Source minimum requirements are not met. Research is insufficient, irrelevant, or inadequate. Sources are not incorporated at all, or are done very poorly. Five or more errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. Works Cited page either omitted or formatted very poorly. It may be difficult or impossible to discern which sources are in the list.
Source requirements may not be met (Note: If source minimum is not met, the essay will score no higher than 2 in this category). Research is superficial and/or sources are incorporated poorly. No more than four different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, and some sources may be omitted from the list.
Source requirements are met. Research may be superficial, sources may be poorly incorporated. No more than three different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, but all sources are listed.
Source requirements are met. Fairly thorough research with mostly effective use of sources. No more than two different errors in documenting sources using MLA style. These identical two errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.
Source requirements are met. Thoroughly researches the topic, uses sources effectively. No more than one different error in documenting sources using MLA style. This identical error may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.
