MANAGEMENT INTERVENTIONS

MANAGEMENT INTERVENTIONS FEEDBACK 09/22/2021

9/21/21

Walter:

Thank you for your submission.  You have a good start to completing this project! You have some revisions and additions to make in order to achieve mastery. 

Also, it is very difficult to read your project as syntax, word choice, and the flow of the project is hard to understand.  For example, you have chosen words such as "exhibition assessment" and "chiefs and representatives” when discussing managers and employees and this style of writing is throughout both of your documents.  Consider re-writing to use more common terms and those that avoid superfluous or generated word choices. 

Please review my feedback on the rubric dated 9/21/21.

Best,

Dr. Luvon Hudson

1) Describes methods for getting buy-in from managers and employees. NOT MASTERED!!!!!

9/21/21 - It is difficult to understand the information provided for this section. The word choice is not fluid and uses words such as chiefs, representatives, destinations, worker's exhibition. Were these words generated using a tool or crafted by you?

2) Creates performance evaluation criteria based on job duties. NOT MASTERED!!!!!

9/21/21 - Please review to make sure that all criteria has been marked appropriately and completely filled out in the performance evaluation tables.

3) Provides possible intervention strategies for various employee situations. NOT MASTERED!!!!!

9/21/21 - Once again, it is hard to decipher exactly what the intervention strategies for each are based on your word choice. Please re-write to provide clear and detailed intervention strategies for each of the employees including Allyson.

4) Clearly conveys meaning with correct grammar, sentence structure, and spelling; shows understanding of audience and purpose. NOT MASTERED!!!!!

9/21/21 - It is very difficult to read your project as syntax, word choice, and the flow of the project is hard to understand.  For example, you have chosen "exhibition assessment" and "chiefs and representatives” when discussing managers and employees and this style of writing is throughout both of your documents.  Consider re-writing to use more common terms and those that avoid superfluous or generated word choices. 

5) Lists sources where needed using citation methods with no major errors. NOT MASTERED!!!!!

9/21/21 - This area looks good so far but due to the additional sources needed this area will be reviewed in your resubmission.