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Introduction: Overview

15 points

Provides an overview of the work being analyzed

11.25 points

Provides an overview of the work being analyzed, but contains issues regarding clarity

0 points

Does not provide an overview of the work being analyzed

11.25 points

I think you have included an overview

of the essay here, but it looks like

almost two full pages of summary of

Tan's article. From here, work to shape

this material into a one-paragraph

summary for your introductory

paragraph. This will give readers an

overview of what her article was all

about and you can end that paragraph

with your claim about her article in the

form of a thesis statement. 

Introduction: Thesis

15 points

Composes a thesis that states the claim that will be proven throughout the essay

11.25 points

Composes a thesis, but contains issues related to clarity or relevancy

0 points

Does not compose a thesis

11.25 points

You seem to have a claim here, and I

would like to see this developed a bit

more to be sure it is clear and relevant

to the purpose of your analytical essay.

Hopefully you are getting some great

ideas for doing this in our Module 6

reading, but please let me know if you

still have questions about developing a

thesis and how I can help!

After you have a thesis, be sure to place

your thesis statement in its traditional

spot at the end of your introduction

paragraph to set up the rest of your

essay clearly.

Body: Intent

15 points

Writes multiple paragraphs that are focused, clearly state their intent, and build the thesis argument

11.25 points

Writes multiple paragraphs, but writing does not build the thesis argument

0 points

Does not write multiple paragraphs

11.25 points

You have written multiple paragraphs

to support your analysis, but I'm not

sure I'm seeing clearly how each of

these paragraphs are working to further

support or illustrate your claim about

the reading. From here, work on

stating the intent of each paragraph in

the form of a topic sentence. Make it

clear to readers how your intent and

key point is furthering your thesis

argument. Keeping that intent in mind,

make sure that each sentence in your

body paragraph is focused on that key

point, illustrating it, and furthering that

particular piece of your overall thesis.

Body: Body Paragraphs

20 points

Body paragraphs support claim by combining thoughts and ideas with evidence

15 points

Body paragraphs support claim, but do not combine thoughts and ideas with evidence

0 points

Does not support claim through body paragraphs

20 points

You are developing body paragraphs

that work nicely to support your claim!

I like the way you are establishing your

own thoughts and ideas and supporting

that with evidence from the text. Great

job!

Up next, work on pulling these pieces

together into body paragraphs.

Conclusion: Review

15 points

Reviews claim, and summarizes key supporting points of essay

11.25 points

Reviews claim, and summarizes key supporting points, but contains issues regarding alignment to the intent of the thesis

0 points

Does not review claim

11.25 points

You are off to a great start with this

conclusion. You've reiterated your

claim and summarized the key points

you used to support this claim. At this

point, I'm not sure that the point

you've reached at the end of your essay

fully aligns with what you set out to

"prove" about the reading in your

introduction. How might you rephrase

these ideas to help show that cohesive

unity across your essay?

Conclusion: Insights

15 points

Articulates insights about claim established through your analysis, and follows claim logically, referring to key points or quotes used to support claim

11.25 points

Articulates insights about claim established through your analysis, but does not follow claim logically, or refer to key points or quotes used to support claim

0 points

Does not articulate insights about claim

11.25 points

In addition to reviewing your claim and

supporting points, include a few

insights about your claim that you

discovered through your analysis. It

looks like maybe that is the direction

you are headed with your final few

sentences, but that hasn't been clearly

articulated or connected back to your

points yet. One great strategy to help

you come up with some ideas for this

part of your conclusion can be to ask

yourself "So What?" Consider why

someone should care about your point

or why it matters.

Articulation of Response

5 points

Submission has no major errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization

3.75 points

Submission has major errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization that negatively impact readability and articulation of main ideas

0 points

Submission has critical errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization that prevent understanding of ideas

0 points

In addition to using either MLA or

APA style to format your essay, be

sure to edit and proofread your writing.

This is a formal essay, so strive for

complete sentences, clear pronouns

(remember that Tan is a "she"), and

minimal mechanical errors. From there,

consider the organization of your

writing.