English Essay

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Introductory paragraph and thesis statement:

The main function of a drug court is to prevent and discourage use, selling of, or distributing illegal drugs by offenders. By utilizing drugs courts in ways such as deterrent, prevention, and treatment to curb nonviolent offenders can be a crucial step in rehabilitation for the majority. “Drug courts were designed to put treatment and rehabilitation ahead of punishment” (Emigh,2018). By putting treatment and rehabilitation ahead of prison or jailtime, many offenders are set on a path to recovery that reduces recidivism. Most states have set up these specific courts to deal with nonviolent offenders.” The Carroll County Drug Treatment Court operates in the Circuit Court for Carroll County and has been specifically designed and staffed to supervise non-violent, drug dependent defendants who have been referred to a comprehensive and judicially monitored program” (Drug Treatment Court, n.d.).With education, funding, and overcoming challenges drug court programs can save lives and reduce incarceration involving nonviolent drug offenses. Drug courts that are ran effectively, can curb drug use and distribution with insight and prevention.

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Purpose and Audience

The purpose is to express the importance of maintaining and funding these programs to ensure that they are ran as effectively as possible. My audience would be court officials and law enforcement and how they can be trained and kept current on issues that may occur, while reducing recidivism.

Thesis, Topic Sentences, and Evidence

Thesis needs some revision and topic sentences need to explain each paragraph in better detail. References need more detailed information to explain given information in a clear concise manner.

Organization

This introductory paragraph leads into the body paragraphs but could use better reference citation and explanation of factual information. Better explain lead ins to body paragraphs explaining details and references explaining details to those receiving the information.

Paragraph Development

Each paragraph should have a leading statement setting up information leading into next body paragraph.

Checking Coherence and Clarity

Coherence and clarity in body paragraphs require paragraph development. Ensure that body paragraphs are in line with opening paragraph.