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Isha Patel

Professor Armes

ENGL 1320

20 February, 2020

Black Immigrants and Racial Discrimination

There are several cases that pop up each year regarding racial discrimination against the black

immigrants in the United States. There are cases that go unnoticed because most of the people

choose not to speak about it. In other cases, the society also would not accept that such activities

take place thus making it a challenge for them to keep up. There are numerous immigrants

getting into the United States voluntarily including Europeans and other whites but the racial

slurs are only directed towards the blacks migrating into the country. There are numerous

concerns in the country that raise the attention towards racial discrimination especially from the

people visiting the country. The discrimination ranges from when they are seeking to access the

public services in the country, from the justice department especially the police department.

Most of the immigrants move to the United States at a shot for a better life, education, medical

opportunities, job opportunities and escape from war among other vices in their parent countries.

However, the people are embraced to get into the country they still fail to live a happy and

comfortable life because the society does not entirely embrace them. Racism in the United States

does not necessarily focus on the Black immigrants but against the entire races that make it a

challenge for any individual with a different skin color in the country and this limits their access

to resources. This thesis is a bit confusing. Earlier in the introduction you say that “slurs are only

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directed towards the blacks migrating into this country,” but then in your thesis, you say “Racism

in the United States does not necessarily focus on the Black immigrants”. This first paragraph is

also a bit confusing since you mention only “Black immigrants.” Are you suggesting African-

American citizens do not experience the same racism as Black immigrants? I think you’ll want to

clarify the introduction and thesis.

The law enforcement across the country are mostly accused as being the most racist in

the country and them being with weapons impacts the immigrants and creates a negative picture

on the community. The police are the security front of the community thus it is important that

they make sure that they keep up with the demand of the country (Foner, 64). The law

enforcement officers in the country mainly judge and discriminate from racial discrimination but

not a specific group (Hmmm, you might want to research this a bit. I’m pretty sure the

Department of Justice has done studies on racial profiling and racial bias toward African-

Americans, at least in Ferguson, Missouri and in New York with the Stop-and-Frisk policy. But

there should also be a lot of other information dealing with this claim. It is evident that the police

do not have a specific time or information on people to approach them but the color of their skin

made the difference. The specificity of racism makes the difference because there is no specific

measure that shows the police selectively choose the black immigrants (See above comment).

There is no specific information that the police selectively choose a specific immigrant and opt

to treat them different instead they discriminate the entire race. There is little difference between

the original black American inhabitants and the immigrants entering the United States in the

current era. The world is not making progress on the social front that is not appropriate because

we are all human and this limits the interactions and relationships that we are creating as people.

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The law enforcement being the forefront and the leaders of the community and are

allowed to carry weapons makes them a very important in impacting security and confidence in

the people. The confidence that the officers instill in the community makes it easier to increase

the connection between the people and the races. The other native races (Whom specifically?)

depend on the interactions and the image the officers portray that then will help influence their

attitude towards the other immigrants because they are in the authoritative position (Bell,

Marquardt & Berry, 298). For instance, if the officers would treat the immigrants the same way

that they treat the whites then there would be no need for the community to fear them and treat

them differently. However, because the officers will approach the blacks with a negative

premonition even on the speed checks on the roads and demand them to evacuate their vehicles

while they do not do the same with the whites then they paint the blacks as dangerous or a threat

thus they have to fear them (This statement contradicts what was said in the preceding paragraph

– the one on which I commented). In the other incidences where the African Americans would

walk with hoodies in the society and police officers tackle them and even place them in their

vehicles and they do not do the same for the whites students in hoods (Word choice. Avoid slang

in academic papers). The security that the law enforcement officers provide in the community

makes a difference and impacts the perception of the people and because they have poor

relationships then it also makes it a challenge for the people to keep up.

The society is not opening up towards the African Americans including the immigrants

which are a problem that is emanating from the political climate and the leadership in the

country. The people are on the fore front of the country and it’s their place to make sure that the

society is living in peace and unity. It is evident that President Trump is against immigrants and

this pushes the community to stand against the immigrants because the leader instills the concept

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that the immigrants are entering the country to steal their opportunities and resources. True. It

would be helpful to illustrate this by bringing in a quote from Trump which shows this. Most of

the supporters in the country that stood up with the president and some of his agendas was to

make sure that the Americans reclaim their country. The message comes out wrong in the eyes of

some of the ethnic white communities because and thus builds up racism and differentiation in

the society. It is unethical for a leader to have such attitudes and behavior especially in a country

where all the people are immigrants. The Trump supporters especially the White Supremacists

started the belief that they cannot live with the same immigrants in the country and this is after

such campaigns and words started emanating in the open.

People have differences and feel different from the others but most of them learn to live

with it but when it gets public then it becomes a problem because some people will start hurting

others. The cases that involve the attacks on the black immigrants in the country are horrific and

bad and can trigger some xenophobic attacks and this will not be appropriate especially because

the country has numerous immigrants from across the world (Saleem, et al. 1339). Still a bit

confused. The paper’s title and thesis want to focus on “Black immigrants,” but the discussion is

much broader, including all immigrants and African-American citizens. You’ll want to adjust

your title and thesis. The United States is successful and wealthy to the current day especially

because it relies on the immigrants that visited the country back in the day as refugees. The move

made it easier for them to gain some of the giant companies (Such as?) including the current

president Trump whose roots date back to Europe. The concept makes the difference because

there is no discrimination against such people but they choose when to be discriminatory. The

concept is unethical and impractical which is not appropriate for the community because people

have to interact and depend on each other thus failure of creating and building such relationships

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changes the entire structure of the society. The black immigrants are in the country not to create

social indifferences but to try and find opportunities to improve their lives that is something that

the United States can offer.

The Americans moved from all over the world and dismissed the Native Americans from

their lands which were not appropriate and thus they have the audacity to dispel other people

from the same lands. The history of the country makes it important for them to appreciate

immigrants and because it is also important for them to access the reason that brought the people

into the country including the human rights. The United Nations through charity organization

recommends that a country should take in a certain capacity of immigrants into the country. The

Black immigrants get into the country for better opportunities and they do not interfere with the

social status in the country (Foner, 67). For instance, the blacks that died in New York, West

Indian are innocent victims of misdirected hatred. The people were no threat to the society and

this makes it a challenge because it meant that they were not a problem and instead they were a

form of opportunity in the country. It is unethical for the society to live in such animalistic habits

that hinder the people to show their humane side and instead keeps bringing the bad out of the

people.

The society is larger than an individual thus it is important to make sure that a single

person or the feelings of the few do not tarnish the reputation of the entire community. The

racists are few in the community and do not speak up for the feelings of the larger society which

is not appropriate. Most of the Americans relate well with the immigrants which is good but then

it is limited to a specific society because it should change the way that the society relates with

them thus making it easier for them (Krieger, 1706). For instance, the few people in the United

States selective states make it a challenge for the black immigrants in the new country because it

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is not appropriate for a selective group to make decisions regarding the others. The country has

numerous people from across the world that makes it important to make sure that they work

together and come up with proper concepts for their community. The interaction within the

society is not on the basis of the racial differences but the community in the general that then

changes the way that people look at each other. The relationship in the society should be open

and interactive that makes it easier for them to interact and come together which will help reduce

the rates of discrimination in the society.

The United States has immigrants from across the world including the Asians, Arabs

among others that makes it a country of opportunities. The fact that black immigrants are most

victims in the country makes the difference because they are a target which is not appropriate

especially because they have to keep up with the community. The differences indicate that the

darkest skin color in the community make the difference and thus the most target that then makes

it bad. Most of the students (Why students?) in the country that are native whites make the most

population and thus cannot stand the black immigrants in the countries (Earlier you said, “Most

Americans relate well with the immigrants …”). The society is filled with the negativity against

the immigrants into the country starting with the American political and government hierarchy

that then makes it a challenge for the insignificant to maneuver through the hatred and

judgmental society (Park, 83). The concept makes the difference in the community because

people already have negative perceptions that do not include the black immigrants taking away

their opportunities. The black immigrants are a threat in the country according to the natives of

the country and thus the bad blood also builds among the youths that then see the others as a

threat. The students stay in hatred and negativity with the bad knowledge that the job

opportunities will belong to the immigrant’s students in their class that then makes it a challenge.

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Conclusion

The assimilation and immigrants in the country appear as a threat in the country because

they appear to take the peoples jobs since they always have the status of education and

employment. The people in the United States take the immigration as potential thereat which is

not appropriate and misdirected because the people are innocent. The government in place and

some of the leaders has a major contribution towards the racial discrimination in the country

because they encourage the people to feel like the outsiders in the country are a threat. The

government through the various leaders should discourage their citizens from remaining racial

discriminative and since they already welcomed them into their country it is not necessary to

subject people into further trials. We are all humans and despite having a black, white or brown

skin complexion we are all people and at the top of the animal kingdom and thus it is important

to make sure that we bring out the best out of each other instead of behaving like the same

animals that do not have the people skills which is unethical.

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Works Cited

Bell, Myrtle P., Dennis Marquardt, and Daphne P. Berry. ""Diversity," Immigration, and the

New American Multi-Racial Hierarchy." Journal of Managerial Psychology, vol. 29, no.

3, 2014, pp. 285-303. 

Krieger, Nancy, PhD., et al. "Racial Discrimination, Psychological Distress, and Self-Rated

Health among US-Born and Foreign-Born Black Americans." American Journal of 

Public Health, vol. 101, no. 9, 2011, pp. 1704-13.

Nancy Foner. “Black Immigrants and the Realities of Racism: Comments and

Questions.” Journal of American Ethnic History, vol. 36, no. 1, 2016, pp. 63–70.

Park, Young. The Dark Side: Immigrants, Racism, and the American Way. Bloomington, Ind:

iUniverse Com, 2012. Print.

Saleem, Farzana T., et al. "The Impact of African American Parents' Racial Discrimination

Experiences and Perceived Neighborhood Cohesion on their Racial Socialization

Practices." Journal of Youth and Adolescence, vol. 45, no. 7, 2016, pp. 1338-1349. 

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Hi Isha,

For revision:

1. Address comments throughout the paper.

2. This paper needs a clear focus. As it stands, it tries to tackle law enforcement and

discrimination, immigration and xenophobia, hate crimes, Native American displacement, and

job competition. The two paragraphs on law enforcement seem to contradict each other. This part

of the paper ultimately feels like it’s undermining the paper’s premise on discrimination. There

are several contradictions throughout which would benefit from more analysis and clarification.

For revision, I would choose one topic related to discrimination and explore that. You could, for

example, write an entire paper on law enforcement and discrimination, or immigration and

xenophobia, but, in a paper of this length, it is not really possible to address all of these topics.

3. Clarify which information is from your sources. The citations seem as if they have been

randomly dropped into places. I cannot really tell what each source is actually adding to the

discussion. The easiest way to fix this is to include a quotation from each source. Take a look at

the handout on Canvas which deals with citing sources.

Thanks.

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