Eng Comp 102 Essays

Interview Summary by Aakanksha Bhargava

Submission date: 11-Oct-2019 09:50PM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: 1191180926 File name: moodle_temp_turnitintool_2069699932.Paper4-Interviewsummary.docx (18.95K) Word count: 396 Character count: 1931

Heading/Head Format: Nice!

Titles of Papers

1 Intro. Hooks

Subheadings: don't need

Capitalization

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Articles: a/an/the

Intro Context: Good/Needs concision

4 Sentence Types

Thesis Missing

Syntax Error(s)

Global Organization

Para. Undeveloped

Transitions

Quotations Add Credibility3Citations: Study the how-tos

Paragraph Structure

4Shift in Voice

Conclusion Missing

WC Page Format Incorrect

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FINAL GRADE

1/1 Interview Summary GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

Hi Aakanksha: Your paper reflects an engaging interview with this environmental expert.

Several important writing elements do need more of your attention. For more feedback about both strengths and weaknesses in your work, please review my in-text comments, keeping in mind that I marked only a few areas for demonstration.

All the best to you,

Maria S.

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Heading/Head Format: Nice! | Format Nice job with the MLA-style heading and running head!

Titles of Papers | Support The title should do 3 things: indicate the topic, indicate the purpose, and grab the reader's attn..

Comment 1 | Organization

Integrate quotations as support within your paper.

Intro. Hooks | Support Strive to grab your readers' attention with a "hook," such as a quotation, rhetorical question, surprising statistic or fact, image, or compelling statement. Link for review: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/engagement/2/2/58/

Subheadings: don't need | Format

In short papers, you do not need subheadings.

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Capitalization | Grammar Always consult a handbook or other resource for seeing when to capitalize or not, such as a title, name, or an article. Here is a helpful link: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/592/1/

Comment 2 | Grammar

This word should be plural.

Articles: a/an/the | Grammar Articles can be tricky. Here is a helpful link: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/540/01/

Intro Context: Good/Needs concision | Organization

You offer some solid contextual info here for an engaging intro--good! It could be a bit shorter, so revise for conciseness. Ave some of the details for elsewhere in the body.

4 Sentence Types | Grammar This sentence could be stronger--more concise. Go ahead and review Complex and Compound- Complex sentence structure. Following the 4 basic sentence types will serve your writing well. Here is a link for more: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/573/02/

Thesis Missing | Thesis The introduction does not offer an identifiable thesis statement, as instructed in the directions. Helpful link to thesis statements: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/545/01/

Syntax Error(s) | Language The syntax of this sentence contains a couple of errors. You might try reading aloud while editing to help hear awkward wording.

Global Organization | Organization

Revise your draft for global organization: move the reader forward logically and smoothly from one main idea to the next, one per para.

Para. Undeveloped | Support This paragraph could use more development. Compared to the others, it is rather skimpy. What concrete types of support could you use to strengthen it?

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Transitions | Organization Transitional sentences work well to shift to move the reader forward smoothly and logically. Sometimes you can also use transitional expressions to alert the reader. See this link: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/574/01/

Quotations Add Credibility | Support

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An occasional quotation from an expert adds depth and credibility to a paper. Quoting also further demonstrates your skills in handling source material. Here is a helpful link for review: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/563/01/

Comment 3 | Punctuation

Check correct ending punctuation.

Citations: Study the how-tos | Format

Make the time to review how and where to cite source material. Here is one link to consult and study: https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla_formatting_and_style_guide/mla_formatting_and_style_guide.html

Additional Comment

Also, you should be citing the person you interviewed, not another source.

Paragraph Structure | Organization Paragraph structure in the body of a paper goes like this: topic sentence + concrete support + summary sentence. Here is a helpful link: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/606/01/

Comment 4 | Language

His what? Proofread carefully.

Shift in Voice | Language Don't suddenly shift voice. You've been writing in third person throughout, so this is disorienting, as well as unneeded. Stay in third.

Conclusion Missing | Support The conclusion is missing. A conclusion should restate the thesis, recap the main points, and leave the reader with something to think about. Review link: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/724/04/

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WC Page Format Incorrect | Format WC Page: This page is not in MLA style. Always consult the style guide for precise style and format. Here is a link to help you: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/12/ Additional Comment

Also, you need the citation for the interview.

RUBRIC: ENG 102 MH V 3 INTERVIEW_DRAFT

THESIS

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SUPPORT

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ORGANIZATION

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Thesis & Focus Thesis, central idea, audience, purpose, focus

Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of audience and purpose. Readers cannot discern the interview’s central idea.

Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently addressed. Reveals limited awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either lacking or inconsistently addressed.

Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or otherwise problematic. Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent. Central idea is perhaps too general.

Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout most of the interview. Awareness of audience is sufficient. Central idea is clear and maintained in most of the interview.

Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the entire interview. Interview demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea/focus maintained throughout.

Inadequate

Support & Development Thesis support and topic development

Little-to-no thesis support or topic development.

Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. Topic development may have been attempted, but does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear reasoning.

More support is needed. Some examples may be vague. More development needed for supporting reasons or evidence. Some irrelevant support may be present, but most evidence supports thesis.

Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way. Examples are sufficient. Thesis is supported and developed in most paragraphs.

Interview completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement of evidence. All assertions are supported and relate to thesis.

Inadequate

Coherence & Organization: Introduction, conclusion, body paragraphs, transitions, topic sentences

No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no transitions. Demonstrates little-to-no understanding of organization. Many sentences within paragraphs do not relate to each other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May contain no discernible topic sentences.

Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic. Few transitions. Perhaps

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LANGUAGE

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GRAMMAR

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numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic topic sentences. Demonstrates little understanding of organization.

Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one significant weakness is present: undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion, illogical paragraph order. Adequate transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some paragraphs may lack clear topic sentences. Demonstrates basic understanding of organization.

Clear introduction, body, and conclusion: Introduction provides background information, body summarizes interview, and conclusion synthesizes interview very effectively. Good transitions. Good organizational style.

Clear, effective introduction, body, and conclusion: Introduction provides background, body summarizes interview, and conclusion synthesizes interview very effectively. Clear and effective transitions are present throughout the interview. Excellent organizational style.

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Language & Style: Word choice, repetition, redundancy, awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form (their/there, etc.), typos/misspellings, vocabulary

May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Fails to demonstrate competent language use; sentences and vocabulary are inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent.

May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Contains repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure and/or limited vocabulary.

May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence constructions and vocabulary may be limited or repetitive.

May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied sentence construction and vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor.

May contain 1 error in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 1 error in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex sentence construction and vocabulary. Little- to-no unnecessary repetition.

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Grammar: Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors, verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun agreement

Contains more than 5 different grammar errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.

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PUNCTUATION

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FORMAT

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Contains 4 – 5 different grammar errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different grammar errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 1 grammar error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.

Contains either no grammar errors, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.

Above Average

Punctuation & Capitalization: Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization errors, semicolon errors, colon errors

Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.

Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.

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Format: heading, title, margins, spacing, length, underlined thesis, other assignment-specific required elements. Length minimum of 350 words.

Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing four or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.

Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing three elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.

Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing two elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements (an essay that does not meet length minimum will score no higher than 3 in this category)

Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing one element (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length meets minimum requirements of 350 words.

Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of heading, title, margins, spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum requirements of 350 words.