Final Exam

The following letter suffers from a number of weaknesses. List at least 5, and then rewrite and revise the letter for clarity, tone, style, conciseness, correct grammar and mechanics.

Current Date

Ms. Jeanne Griffin

Wilkes Data Service Center

P.O. Box 443

Wilkesboro, NC 28697

Dear Ms. Griffith,

We appreciate your interest om employe leasing through Enterprise Staffing Services.

Our programs and our service has proived to be powerful management tools for business

Owners, like you.

Our 20 year history,Ms. Griffen provide local service and national strength necessary to

Offer the best employee leasing programs available. Due to the fact that we have many years of experience the undersigned as well as our entire staff is certain that we can assemble together a

Plan that will save you time and money as well as protect you from employee hassles and employer liability.

When you commence a program with us, your employees’ will receive health care benefits, retirement plan choices and a national credit union. As a small business owner we are certain that we can also eliminate personel administration for you. Which involces at this point in time a lot of paperwork.

Whether you have 10 or 1,000 employees and offer no benefits to full –benefits package Enterprise Staffing Services can make an analaysis of your needs and get you back to basics of running your business and improvement in profits. I will call you to arrange a time to meet, and talk about your

Specific needs,

Cordially,