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ENG-105 Peer Review Worksheet: Commentary
Part of your responsibility as a student in this course is to provide quality feedback to your peers that will help them to improve their writing skills. This worksheet will assist you in providing that feedback. To highlight the text and type over the information in the boxes on this worksheet, double-click on the first word.
Name of the draft’s author:
Reviewer
After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3-5 sentences) of the paper that includes your assessment of how well the essay meets the assignment requirements as specified in the syllabus and the rubric.
I believe that you did very well on this assignment regaurding the requirements. After reading this essay one time i have gathered this essay is about the effect of Adhd on children at school. this essay talks about the difficulties that kids go throw during their years in school.
After a second, closer reading of the draft, answer each of the following questions. Positive answers will give you specific elements of the draft to praise; negative answers will indicate areas in need of improvement and revision. Please be sure to indicate at least three positive aspects of the draft and at least three areas for improvement in reply to the questions at the bottom of this worksheet.
Commentary Content and Ideas
· How effectively does the thesis statement identify the main points that the writer would like to make in this commentary?
Your thesis statement has effectivley indentified the main topic of this essay.
· How descriptive is the writer’s choice of a label to name the issue in question?
The name you have labeled was very discriptive and good job on that.
· How effectively does the writer frame an issue at the beginning of the essay?
The writer has gone into detail about this and draws the reader in more by doing this.
· How effective is the writer’s analysis of the issue in terms of causes and consequences?
The effectiveness of the writers analisis of the issue was good and very understanding for the reader.
· How persuasively is evidence used to support assertions and enrich the essay?
I was persuaded the entire essay so i would say very persuasive.
How effectively does the essay’s content support the thesis by using strategies appropriate for commentaries, as outlined in chapter 10 of Writing with Purpose?
the writer obviously used what we learned in chapter ten to write their thesis statement.
Organization
· How effectively does the introduction engage the reader while providing an overview of the paper?
The intro is very good in my opinion i was engaged from the moment i started reading.
· Please identify the writer’s thesis and quote it in the box below.
The ADHD symptoms like incapacity to concentrate, trouble remaining still, and trouble managing impulses may make it complex for kids having the sickness to perform well in school.
· How effectively do the paragraphs develop the topic sentence and advance the essay’s ideas?
This essay had a great flow to it.
· How effectively does the conclusion provide a strong, satisfying ending, not a mere summary of the essay?
the conclusion of this essay was very strong and was not a summary.
Format
· How closely does the paper follow APA formatting style? Is it double-spaced in 12 pt. Times New Roman font? Does it have 1" margins? Does it use headers (page numbers using appropriate header function)? Does it have a proper heading (with student’s name, date, course, and instructor’s name)?
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· Are all information, quotations, and borrowed ideas cited in parenthetical APA format?
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
· Are all sources listed on the references page in APA format?
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
· Is the required minimum number of sources listed?
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
Language Use and Style
· Are the voice and tone of the essay effective in characterizing ideas and creating the appropriate mood? If “No,” please provide examples of ineffective or inappropriate voice and tone.
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
· How effectively does the paper incorporate a variety of sentence structures that strengthen the ideas, create vitality, and avoid choppiness in the writing?
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· How would you assess the writer’s diction (i.e., word choice)? Does the writer use active verbs, concrete nouns, and precise words?
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Grammar and Mechanics
· Does the writer use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling? If “No,” please provide examples of errors in need of correction.
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
· Is the writing clear and comprehensible throughout the draft? If “No,” please provide examples in need of improvement.
|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here
Three things that I liked about your draft are:
1. i liked you introduction to this essay.
2. i liked your thesis statment
3. i liked your conclusion
Three things that could be improved are:
1. improvement, the title
2. make sure all your words are spelled correctly
3. make sure grammer checks out in your essay.
