Order 153961: week 5 forum hist

Yonis, Thank you for your paper.

STRENGTH(S):

- Some good points on an important topic in American history.

- Your enthusiasm for the topic was readily evident.

AREA(S) TO IMPROVE:

- It was a little short.

- Work on improving your introduction and thesis statement. Here is a resource to consider: http://www.bowdoin.edu/writing-guides/thesis.htm

- Focus more on analysis of the topic vice describing it. Ask yourself a good research question and answer it. Here is a resource to consider on writing a good history paper: http://www.hamilton.edu/documents/Writing_Good_History_Paper%203rd%20ed.pdf

- Focus your topic on the assignment.

WEEK 5 PAPER FORUM: Answer the question below in the Written assignment #1 paper forum by the end of week 5.

- Although frontier history is generally treated as an Anglo-American story, in the Far West it is much more about ethnic diversity. Why?

Grade: Format/Submission: 9/10; Intro/Thesis: 15/20; Organization/Body: 20/25; Historical Analysis: 20/25; Writing/Grammar: 9/10; Citations/Bibliography: 9/10 Final Grade: 82

I look forward to your next paper. Carl