for prof avril

You did well but still need to work more on making this look like A HEALTH PLAN and take out a lot of the general information in your paper that is not about your health plan.

Here's what you need to work on and look out for:

You need an intro that introduces your HEALTH PLAN. This is a typical essay and research paper in APA format. You need a body section and a conclusion as well.

For sample papers & APA guidelines check our Online Student Services link at the top of our class page. Review instructions in the class announcements as well. This is VERY important for your grade.

Here are general reminders: 

ADD proof to all goals & strategies. 

Your paper should have ZERO generalizations. This paper should be ONLY about YOUR health plan. About you; no one else (ie not your family, friends, society, or Americans). If you have information that is not specifically about you and your health plan, remove it. It is not part of the assignment.

Proof for ALL your METHODS and GOALS:

Why are they a good, healthy idea? Are they safe? Do they work? Says who? What scientists support your goals and methods? 

ADD MEASUREMENTS. Your health plan is not a plan if I can't follow it. It should have measurements for every method and goal. Otherwise, how would I know how much or how long to exercise, for example? How much to eat? How many times a day, where and how are you going to work on a specific goal or strategy?

Delete all QUOTES if you included any. Write everything in your own words. You don't need quotes to explain: This is what I need to work on, this is how I'll do it, this is the proof to support my strategy in my health plan.

APA: You need correct in text citations & references. 

Let me know if you have questions & please review the CLASS ANNOUNCEMENTS in addition to the RUBRICS for instructions & reminders. 

Main Elements: Good overall but you need more planning about your health and less generalities.