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ESSAY REVISION #1 GENERATION Y Engl. 301B Pastrana Summer 2019

TOPIC: In an article written by Larry Gordon and Louis Sahagun in the Los Angeles Times on 2/27/07 titled “Gen Y’s ego trip takes a bad turn,” the authors report that a study by Jean Twenge, a SDSU associate professor, found “self-esteem programs that many elementary schools adopted 20 years ago. . . [as well as] permissive parenting, increased materialism and fascination with celebrities and reality TV shows,” have caused many college students to have an inflated sense of self. Twenge says she is “concerned we are heading to a society where people are going to treat each other badly, either on the street or in relationships” (online).

Assignment By utilizing your timed writing, the LAT article, class discussion, your own experience and observations write a focused and well-developed essay in which you:

• First, explain what Twenge is concerned about and why she is concerned. • Then, discuss to what extent you agree with Twenge’s views.

Criteria for Evaluation • A well-constructed thesis that is clear and purposeful • Coherent topic sentences in each paragraph that clearly support the thesis • Focused and organized essay structure (thesis, topic sentences, etc.) • Unified and well-developed paragraphs throughout • Specific and detailed support and evidence for your arguments • Relevant support for your arguments from the reading (MLA style format):

Use at least two quotes or paraphrases from the article listed above • Thorough and logical analysis of your ideas • Coherence within paragraphs and between paragraphs • Sentence variety and appropriate diction (NO contractions) • Clear sentences edited for grammar and sentence structure problems

Paper Format All take-home essays must be formatted according to MLA style (guidelines and models can be found online). Always provide 1” margins at the top, bottom and sides, and use a 12-point font such as Arial or Times New Roman. Don’t forget to add page numbers and your last name.

Due Date and Specifications The rough draft of Essay #1 is due Mon., 6/10. The required length for the rough draft is three pages minimum. Please bring TWO copies to class on 6/10. You will do peer evaluations then. The final draft is due Mon., 6/17. The required length for the revision is a minimum of five pages, not including the Works Cited page. Please submit your rough and final drafts to me (hard copies), as well as the Peer Evaluation sheet, on 6/17. Submit an electronic copy of your rough draft to the Dropbox on Beachboard by class time on 6/10 and of your final draft by class time on 6/17.