Eng Comp 102 Essays

Frankenstein Evaluation Essay by Aakanksha Bhargava

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Titles of Papers

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Introduction: Hook

Articles: a/an/the

Syntax Error(s)

Edit for Precision

Author & work: introduce

Sp. Quotation Length

Dropped Quote

Thesis MissingCite all source material in-text

Quotations: Good choice! TSs for

evaluation papers

Citation Needed

Good analysisArticles: a/an/the

Prep. No ","

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Research: Use ThroughoutProgression of Thought

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4 Sentence Types

Eval Pt Needed

Quotations Add Credibility

Verb Conjugation ReviewSyntax Error(s)

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1% SIMILARITY INDEX

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Frankenstein Evaluation Essay ORIGINALITY REPORT

PRIMARY SOURCES

Submitted to Downingtown Area School Student Paper

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FINAL GRADE

1/1 Frankenstein Evaluation Essay GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

Hi Aakanksha: Your evaluation essay offers some interesting observations; however, the quality of writing often distracts the reader and obstructs clear understanding.

For more feedback about both strengths and weaknesses in your work, please review my in-text comments, keeping in mind that I marked only a few areas for demonstration.

All the best to you,

Maria S.

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Heading/Head Format: Needs Attn. | Format Please review the MLA guide and instructions to create proper paper headings and running heads.

Titles of Papers | Support The title should do 3 things: indicate the topic, indicate the purpose, and grab the reader's attn..

Comment 1

No need for this. The content should speak for itself.

Strikethrough.

Introduction: Hook | Support Grab the reader's attention with a "hook": a compelling and relevant quotation, statistic, fact, image, or statement. Check out this link: http://www.time4writing.com/learning-how-to-write/starting-with-a- hook/

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Articles: a/an/the | Grammar Articles can be tricky. Here is a helpful link: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/540/01/

Syntax Error(s) | Grammar The syntax of this sentence contains a couple of errors. You might try reading aloud while editing to help hear awkward wording.

Edit for Precision | Language Edit for precision of thought and diction. This wording is not accurately saying what you want it to. Try reading aloud or to someone else. Additional Comment

People didn't exist when the world was first created, so be specific with wording and meaning.

Author & work: introduce | Support

When writing about a literary work, always introduce the author and work fully in the introduction.

Sp. | Grammar Spelling error

Quotation Length | Research This quotation is much too long for a short assignment. Never allow a quotation to dominate a page, paragraph, or writing assignment. They are meant only to support our writing and thinking.

Dropped Quote | Format Use a signal phrase to open or close a quotation, thereby attributing the quote to the source and avoiding "dropped" quotes. Link: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/577/01/

Thesis Missing | Thesis The introduction does not offer an identifiable thesis statement, as instructed in the directions. Helpful link to thesis statements: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/545/01/

Cite all source material in-text | Research

Remember, cite with in-text citations ALL source material whether quoted, summarized, or paraphrased.

Quotations: Good choice! | Research Nice! You did well choosing quotations to add credibility and depth to your paper!

TSs for evaluation papers | Support

Topic sentences for evaluation body paragraphs need to reflect your evaluation point--your assessment of one of the critic's points.

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Citation Needed | Research Cite Source: Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html

Good analysis | Support

Good, thoughtful analysis here and throughout!

Articles: a/an/the | Grammar Articles can be tricky. Here is a helpful link: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/540/01/

Prep. | Grammar Incorrect preposition: Some words must be used together with certain prepositions in order to create the meaning you intend. For example, to yell "to" someone is different from yelling "at" someone. Some confusion results from words such as "compare," which usually takes the preposition "to" when it refers to describing the resemblances between things that are not similar, and takes the preposition "with" when it describes the resemblances between things that are similar. Additional Comment

vengeance against society

No "," | Punctuation Unnecessary comma: Commas have a wide variety of uses: setting off introductory phrases, separating items in lists, separating adjectives, enclosing appositives, and preceding coordinating conjunctions that are used to join two complete thoughts. However, commas should not be used alone to join two complete thoughts or to unnecessarily break apart long sentences. Careful comma usage is necessary to avoid confusing your readers.

Vary sentence starts | Language

Vary sentence beginnings and structures. Do you hear the choppy repetition here?

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Fragments | Punctuation This is a sentence fragment because there is no main clause; this one cannot stand on its own. Check out this link for a review: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/620/1/

Add transition | Organization Emphasize your ideas by adding a transition. Phrases like "actually" or "more importantly" help readers see the importance of certain points and help with the overall flow of the essay.

Para. Undeveloped | Support This paragraph could use more development. Compared to the others, it is rather skimpy. What

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concrete types of support could you use to strengthen it?

Paragraph Structure | Organization Paragraph structure in the body of a paper goes like this: topic sentence + concrete support + summary sentence. Here is a helpful link: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/606/01/

Research: Use Throughout | Research When called to use research, you want to integrate it throughout a paper. This paragraph does not document any source material. Explicit source use adds depth and credibility to ideas and statements. Check out this link: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/section/2/9/

Progression of Thought Needed | Organization Revise writing for global progression of thought, moving from one point to a new. Check out this link: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/section/1/2/

4 Sentence Types | Grammar This sentence could be stronger--more concise. Go ahead and review Complex and Compound- Complex sentence structure. Following the 4 basic sentence types will serve your writing well. Here is a link for more: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/573/02/

Eval Pt Needed | Support

Okay, but what about this are you evaluating? The topic sentence should reflect an evaluative point.

Quotations Add Credibility | Research An occasional quotation from an expert adds depth and credibility to a paper. Quoting also further demonstrates your skills in handling source material. Here is a helpful link for review: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/563/01/

Verb Conjugation Review | Grammar You will want to thoroughly review verb tenses and conjugation. Check out this link for some help: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/601/01/

Syntax Error(s) | Grammar The syntax of this sentence contains a couple of errors. You might try reading aloud while editing to help hear awkward wording.

Citations: Study the how-tos | Research

Make the time to review how and where to cite source material. Here is one link to consult and study: https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla_formatting_and_style_guide/mla_formatting_and_style_guide.html

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Check these entries against the MLA guide. Errors are exist and it needs to be precise.

RUBRIC: ENG102 MH V3 APPLICATION_DRAFT

THESIS

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SUPPORT

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Thesis & Focus: Thesis, central idea, audience, purpose, digressions

Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of audience and purpose. Readers cannot discern the essay’s central idea.

Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently addressed. Thesis fails to address the novel’s literary qualities or social issues. Reveals limited awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either lacking or inconsistently addressed.

Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or otherwise problematic. Thesis addresses the novel’s literary qualities and social issues, perhaps somewhat ineffectively. Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent. Central idea is perhaps too general and supported by irrelevant examples.

Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout most of the paper. Thesis addresses the novel’s literary qualities and social issues effectively. Awareness of audience is sufficient. Central idea is clear and maintained in most of the essay.

Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the entire paper. Thesis clearly addresses the novel’s literary qualities and social issues very effectively. Paper demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea/focus maintained throughout.

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Support & Development Thesis support, thesis development, assessment of novel’s literary qualities and social issues, use of examples, logic, and reason

No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or evidence. No topic development. Failure to assess the novel’s literary qualities and social issues. Topic development is flawed or non-existent.

Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. The novels’ literary qualities and social issues are not assessed effectively throughout most of the essay. Topic development may have been attempted, but does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear reasoning.

More support is needed. Some examples may be vague. The novel’s literary qualities and social issues are assessed, perhaps ineffectively. Some irrelevant support may be present, but most evidence supports thesis.

Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way. The novel’s literary qualities and social issues are assessed thoroughly and mostly effectively. Examples are sufficient. Thesis is supported and developed in most paragraphs.

Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement of evidence. The novel’s literary qualities and social issues are assessed thoroughly and very effectively. Examples are excellent. All assertions are supported and relate to thesis.

ORGANIZATION

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Coherence & Organization: Introduction, conclusion, body paragraphs, transitions, topic sentences

No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no transitions. Demonstrates little-to-no understanding of organization. Many sentences within paragraphs do not relate to each other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May contain no discernible topic sentences.

Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic. Few transitions. Perhaps numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic topic sentences. Demonstrates little understanding of organization.

Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one significant weakness is present: undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion, illogical paragraph order. Adequate transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some paragraphs may lack clear topic sentences. Demonstrates basic understanding of organization.

Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although improvements could be made. Most paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a clear plan of development. Transitions are clear throughout most of the paper. Demonstrates good understanding of organization.

Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion: Introduction establishes the essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and main ideas without merely copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and effective transitions are present throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent understanding of organization.

Inadequate

Language & Style: Word choice, repetition, redundancy, awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form (their/there, etc.), typos/misspellings, vocabulary

May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Fails to demonstrate competent language use; sentences and vocabulary are inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent.

May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Contains repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure and/or limited vocabulary.

May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence constructions and vocabulary may be limited or repetitive.

May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied sentence construction and vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor.

May contain 1 error in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain

GRAMMAR

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PUNCTUATION

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FORMAT

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1 error in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex sentence construction and vocabulary. Little- to-no unnecessary repetition.

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Grammar: Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors, verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun agreement

Contains more than 5 different grammar errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 4 – 5 different grammar errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different grammar errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 1 grammar error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.

Contains either no grammar errors, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.

Average

Punctuation & Capitalization: Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization errors, semicolon errors, colon errors

Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout.

Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.

Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.

Average

Format: heading, title, margins, spacing, length, underlined thesis, other assignment-specific required elements *Length for Application is 750 words minimum

Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing four or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.

Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing three elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.

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RESEARCH

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Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing two elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements (an essay that does not meet length minimum will score no higher than 3 in this category)

Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing one element (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length meets minimum requirements of 750 words.

Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of heading, title, margins, spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum requirements of 750 words.

Below Average

Source minimums, incorporation of sources (including use of signal phrases), use of research to argue topic, MLA in-text quote formatting, Works Cited list This paper requires at least three credible sources in addition to the novel.

Source minimum requirements are not met. Research is insufficient, irrelevant, or inadequate. Sources are not incorporated at all, or are done very poorly. Five or more errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. Works Cited page either omitted or formatted very poorly. It may be difficult or impossible to discern which sources are in the list.

Source requirements may not be met (Note: If source minimum is not met, the essay will score no higher than 2 in this category). Research is superficial and/or sources are incorporated poorly. No more than four different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, and some sources may be omitted from the list.

Source requirements are met. Research may be superficial, sources may be poorly incorporated. No more than three different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, but all sources are listed.

Source requirements are met. Fairly thorough research with mostly effective use of sources. No more than two different errors in documenting sources using MLA style. These identical two errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.

Source requirements are met. Thoroughly researches the topic, uses sources effectively. No more than one different error in documenting sources using MLA style. This identical error may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.