IDS 400 ( week 7)
malshaghathirah
finalprojectfeedback.pdf
IDS 400 Project Rubric (SA) Activity: 7‐1 Project: Project Submission
Course: IDS‐400‐X5852 Diversity 23EW5
Name: Mohammed Alshaghathirah
Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement Not Evident Criterion Score
Reliable Evidence
from Varied
Sources
5 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Excellent work successfully identifying and integrating reliable evidence from varied and scholarly sources throughout your
paper to support the analysis of your topic.
5 points
Exceeds
proficiency in an
exceptionally clear,
insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Integrates reliable
evidence from
varied sources
throughout the
paper to support
analysis, including
at least two
resources from
course materials
and two resources
from the library
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas for
improvement may
include drawing
from a more
diverse pool of
perspectives, using
more varied
sources to support
the analysis,
integrating
evidence and
sources throughout
the paper to
support the
analysis, or using at
least two resources
from course
materials and two
resources from the
library
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Topic Description:
Description of the
Topic
4.25 / 5
Criterion Feedback
You have provided insight into your topic with effective details and contextual information.
There remain some elements from the draft that needed to be addressed (i.e., you say "Muslim teenagers" but your approved
thesis and also the majority of your paper focus on adults in their 20s‐30s).
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Introduces the
topic with effective
description and
context
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas for
improvement may
include a more
thorough
description of the
topic, greater
support about its
connection to
diversity or
significance to
society, or
additional
contextual
information about
the topic
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Topic Description:
Description of the
Population
4.25 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Good work identifying a population related to the topic and providing insight into their demographics, experiences, and
challenges. You have done so with minor errors to APA 7 Bias‐Free Language.
Providing clarification on your population would have strengthened this section.
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Describes a
population
significant to the
topic, including
demographics,
cultural practices,
social identity, and
key challenges
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas for
improvement may
include a more
thorough
description or
greater support
regarding the
population’s
demographics,
cultural practices,
social identity,
and/or key
challenges
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Topic Description:
Lives and
Experiences of
the Population
4.25 / 5
Criterion Feedback
You have provided insight into the experiences of your population and have supported it with reliable and scholarly resources.
Providing clarification on your population would have strengthened this section.
Topic Description:
General
Education Lens
4.25 / 5
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Articulates how
the topic has
shaped the lives
and experiences of
the chosen
population
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas for
improvement may
include connecting
the topic to the
population or
providing greater
support for how
the topic has
impacted the
population
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Explains choice of
general education
interdisciplinary
lens for analyzing
the topic
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas for
improvement may
include connecting
one of the four
general education
lenses to the topic
or providing a more
convincing or
thorough
explanation of why
the lens was
chosen
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Criterion Feedback
Great work identifying one of the general education interdisciplinary lenses for exploring your topic.
I was unsure why you included additional insight into other lenses. This was not necessary in the assignment.
Topic Description:
Thesis Statement
4.25 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Good work crafting a narrow and effective thesis statement. To reach exemplary, you would have implemented the required
changes.
I also noted that you changed the thesis from "The examination of the diversity of Muslims in the United States since the
9/11 attack,
with a focus on the Arab American Muslim young adult male population between 20‐30 years and their unique cultural
situation through the interdisciplinary lens of the social sciences." to something else, which would have needed approval
weeks ago rather than changed during the final.
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Constructs a thesis
statement that
combines topic,
population, cultural
situation, and
choice of general
education
interdisciplinary
lens
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas for
improvement may
include a clearer or
more concise thesis
statement that
integrates topic,
population, cultural
situation, and
choice of general
education lens
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Critical Analysis:
Constructive
Collaboration
2.75 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Unfortunately, this section was not updated from 3‐2. Therefore, the score remains the same. To reach proficiency, you
needed to address the feedback provided to you in your draft. The feedback was not integrated so the score remains the
same.
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Discusses
constructive
collaboration with
the population to
encourage their
engagement with
the topic
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas
for improvement
may include
providing a more
thorough
description of how
to engage the
population in
dialogue about the
topic, or providing
theoretical support
of the proposed
engagement
strategies
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Critical Analysis:
Positive Element
0 / 5
Criterion Feedback
You have not attempted the criteria.
Critical Analysis:
Element That
Could Benefit
From Change
5 / 5
Criterion Feedback
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Describes at least
one positive
element within the
topic that supports
transformation
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas for
improvement may
include providing
more thorough
support of the
positive nature of
the chosen element
or of how it
supports
transformation
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
5 points
Exceeds
proficiency in an
exceptionally clear,
insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Describes at least
one specific
element within the
topic that could
benefit from
change
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas for
improvement may
include providing
more thorough
support of why the
chosen element
could benefit from
change or how this
change may impact
engagement of the
topic
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement Not Evident Criterion Score
Excellent work identifying an area for change in your topic and including citations to support your reasoning.
Critical Analysis:
Potential
Obstacle
2.75 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Unfortunately, this section was not updated from 4‐2. Therefore, the score remains the same.
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Explains how at
least one potential
obstacle could
interfere with the
population’s
engagement with
the topic
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas
for improvement
may include
connecting the
topic to a potential
obstacle or
providing more
thorough support
for how it could
interfere with the
population’s
engagement with
the topic
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Critical Analysis:
Factors That
Impact the Topic
2.75 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Unfortunately, this section was not updated from 4‐2. Therefore, the score remains the same.
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Assesses at least
two significant
factors that could
impact the topic,
such as biases,
beliefs,
assumptions,
and/or values
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas
for improvement
may include
identifying two
specific factors
that could impact
the topic, or
providing more
thorough support
for choice of
factors
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Critical Analysis:
Societal
Conversations
2.75 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Unfortunately, this section was not updated from 4‐2. Therefore, the score remains the same.
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Describes a
possible outcome
of the proposed
engagement that
might influence the
societal
conversations that
add to critical
awareness of
diversity
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas
for improvement
may include
connecting the
critical analysis to
changes in societal
conversations
about diversity or
providing more
thorough support
for the explanation
of how it adds to
critical awareness
of diversity
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Reflection:
Personal
Experience
2.75 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Unfortunately, this section was not updated from 5‐2. Therefore, the score remains the same.
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Describes how
critically analyzing
the topic has
positively informed
personal
experience
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas
for improvement
may include
additional details
or a more specific
description of how
critically analyzing
the topic in
diversity positively
informed personal
experience
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Reflection: Bias 2.75 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Unfortunately, this section was not updated from 5‐2. Therefore, the score remains the same.
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Describes how
examining bias has
altered perception
of the world
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas
for improvement
may include
describing one’s
own bias, clearly
connecting bias
and personal
perceptions, or
providing more
thorough support
for how examining
bias has altered
personal
perceptions
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Reflection: Role
of Diversity in
Society
2.75 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Unfortunately, this section was not updated from 5‐2. Therefore, the score remains the same.
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Describes how the
course has helped
in understanding
the role of diversity
in society
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas
for improvement
may include
additional details
or a more specific
description about
how the course has
helped in
understanding the
role of diversity in
society
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Reflection:
Influence on Field
of Study or
Profession
2.75 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Unfortunately, this section was not updated from 5‐2. Therefore, the score remains the same.
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Explains how
critically analyzing
diversity can
positively influence
field of study or
profession
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas
for improvement
may include
connecting the
critical analysis of
diversity to a
personal, academic,
or professional
experience, or
providing more
thorough support
for this connection
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Reflection:
Different General
Education Lens
5 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Excellent work articulating how this course has helped you understand diversity's role in society.
5 points
Exceeds
proficiency in an
exceptionally clear,
insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Explains at least
one way the
analysis might have
been different if
another general
education lens was
used to analyze the
topic
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas for
improvement may
include use of an
alternative general
education lens, a
clearer explanation
of how the analysis
might have been
different if one of
the other general
education lenses
had been used to
analyze the topic,
or more support for
the explanation
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
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Reflection:
Interactions with
People
2.75 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Unfortunately, this section was not updated from 5‐2. Therefore, the score remains the same.
Articulation of
Response
4.25 / 5
Criterion Feedback
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Explains how
critically analyzing
diversity adds value
to interactions with
people in a variety
of contexts
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors or
omissions; areas
for improvement
may include
connecting the
value of critical
analysis to
interactions with
people in a variety
of contexts or
providing a more
thorough
explanation of that
value
0 points
Does not attempt
criterion
5 points
Exceeds proficiency
in an exceptionally
clear, insightful,
sophisticated, or
creative manner
4.25 points
Clearly conveys
meaning with
correct grammar,
sentence structure,
and spelling,
demonstrating an
understanding of
audience and
purpose
2.75 points
Shows progress
toward proficiency,
but with errors in
grammar, sentence
structure, and
spelling, negatively
affecting readability
0 points
Submission has
critical errors in
grammar, sentence
structure, and
spelling, preventing
understanding of
ideas
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Total 70.25 / 100
Overall Score
Criteria Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement Not Evident Criterion Score
There are no major spelling or grammar errors. Ideas are communicated effectively. Great work formatting the paper in APA
style.
Citations and
Attributions
5 / 5
Criterion Feedback
Excellent work including citations in APA style.
5 points
Uses citations for
ideas requiring
attribution, with
few or no minor
errors
4.25 points
Uses citations for
ideas requiring
attribution, with
consistent minor
errors
2.75 points
Uses citations for
ideas requiring
attribution, with
major errors
0 points
Does not use
citations for ideas
requiring
attribution
Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement Not Evident
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