I need corrections made to a Rhetorical Ananlysis Essay.

Comment by Priscilla Bamba: Be more creative with the title; remember that I ask that you include no language that reveals the type of essay being written.

discusses facts about Attention-Deficit/Hyperactivity Disorder (ADHD) by focusing on different subtopics which include signs and symptoms, types, causes, diagnosis, and treatment among others. This site is easily accessible to the public as the information provided aims at improving knowledge and awareness about ADHD. The introductory paragraph introduces the reader to the main topic of focus by defining ADHD. ADHD is defined as a neurodevelopmental disorder which affects a person’s ability to pay attention and control impulsive behaviors. This condition is common during childhood and often lasts into adulthood. The introductory paragraph also includes a thesis statement which is in the last line of the paragraphs. The distinct claim of this website is that Children with ADHD may have trouble paying attention, controlling impulsive behaviors (may act without thinking about what the result will be), or be overly active (ADHD website). This claim is discussed in different subtopics of the website making it easier for the reader to understand more details about ADHD. Comment by Priscilla Bamba: The Centers for Disease Control and Prevention (CDC) ADHD Web pages Comment by Priscilla Bamba: Spell out proper nouns the first time mentioned with the acronym within parentheses afterward. Then use only the acronym thereafter. Comment by Priscilla Bamba: Remember that I ask that you spell Web site and Web pages as two words, capitalizing the W as a proper noun. Comment by Priscilla Bamba: Change this word to that Comment by Priscilla Bamba: that Comment by Priscilla Bamba: No unnecessary capitalization Comment by Priscilla Bamba: ? missing thesis statement, for example: The CDC’s ADHD Web pages do a good job with ethos, pathos, and logos.

Ethos has also been used when the author mentions something which will attract the attention or appeal of the audience. In this case, the ADHD website has used different approaches in order to encourage more acceptance from the audience. For example, the website uses several hyperlinks which can redirect the readers to a site where they can find more information about a given subject. These hyperlinks show that there is a connection between the information shared in the link and other credible sources. This influences the reader to believe that the information shared in this link is credible and is from a trusted source. For example, one of the ways to manage symptoms is eating a healthful diet. A hyperlink of “healthful diet” is used to take the reader to another site which explains and defines what a healthful diet is. Comment by Priscilla Bamba: Use transition at the beginning of each body paragraph: First,Next,Finally,A better topic sentence is needed here: First, the CDC’s ADHD Web pages do a good job with ethos.Each body paragraph requires at least seven to 10 sentences and at least one internal citation of support.

Pathos is used by the author to appeal to people’s emotion. In the website, pathos has been used when making an impassioned plea to the reader in different subtopics. In the managing symptoms, the author pleads that remaining healthy is very important for children with ADHD as this will make it easier for the child to deal with the ADHD symptoms. The use of pathos presents a comforting and concerned tone which impacts the readers’ reaction to the website (Bogliacino et al. 2015). Another area where pathos has been used is in the subtopic “Get Help.” This section attracts the audience attention by stressing on the importance of visiting a specialist in case one has a concern about ADHD. The website also shares contacts and other resources which can be used by the reader in order to find help in case of a need related to child development and ADHD. Comment by Priscilla Bamba: Fix this topic sentence, too.

Logos is the use of logic, reason, facts, and figures to persuade and gain the attention of the audience. This approach is used in most of the crucial information shared on the website. For example, there are three different types of ADHD depending on which types of symptoms are strongest. They are a predominantly inattentive presentation, predominantly hyperactive-impulsive presentation, and combined presentation. Facts have been used in different sections to clarify different positions regarding ADHD. According to the website, ADHD is not diagnosed using a single test, but it is rather a process with several steps (Sayal et al. 2018). Figures have also been used when stating data and information which can be measured. For example, about 2 million if more than 6 million children with ADHD were diagnosed as young children aged 2-5 years (ADHD website). Comment by Priscilla Bamba: Fix this topic sentence, too.

Logic and reason have been used to refute certain claims. For example, in discussing the causes of ADHD, the website conveys that research does not support that ADHD is caused by eating too much sugar or other factors such as parenting and poverty. By using ethos, pathos, and logos, the ADHD website has addressed various concerns held by people concerning ADHD condition. The website also provides comprehensive and in-depth descriptions which can be used to improve the audience understanding. These descriptions can also be used to further scientific research.

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