The purpose for writing is clearly seen in the piece. If the genre calls for a thesis statement, research question, or other explicit statement of purpose, it is included in the appropriate place.
Developing 1 (0.50%) - 20 (10.00%)
The purpose for writing is not clearly stated, but it is somewhat discernible. If the genre calls for a thesis statement, research question, or other explicit statement of purpose, it is missing or difficult to identify.
Not Present 0 (0.00%) - 0 (0.00%)
The purpose for writing is entirely unclear.
Feedback: clearly stated
Content: 45
Levels of Achievement:
Advanced 46 (23.00%) - 50 (25.00%)
Ideas, reasoning, and use of sources all contribute to a strong product that fulfills the purpose for writing.
Proficient 42 (21.00%) - 45 (22.50%)
Ideas, reasoning, and use of sources all contribute to an adequate product that mostly fulfills the purpose for writing.
Developing 1 (0.50%) - 41 (20.50%)
Ideas, reasoning, and use of sources may be lacking, but the content at least partly fulfills the purpose for writing.
Not Present 0 (0.00%) - 0 (0.00%)
The content is insufficient, illogical, and/or poorly supported, and it does not fulfill the purpose for writing.
Feedback:
Impressive research! The only additional thing I would suggest doing is to define key terms.
Organization: 22
Levels of Achievement:
Advanced 37 (18.50%) - 40 (20.00%)
Information is organized in a way that is logical and readable and that conforms to the expectations of the genre. The project is 8–11 pages.
Proficient 34 (17.00%) - 36 (18.00%)
Information is organized in a way that is, overall, logical and readable and that mostly conforms to the expectations of the genre. The project is 8–11 pages or very close to that range.
Developing 1 (0.50%) - 33 (16.50%)
The organization of the piece may be confusing or somewhat illogical, but it can be discerned. It shows an inadequate attempt to conform to the expectations of the genre. The piece may be more than a page outside the required range.
Not Present 0 (0.00%) - 0 (0.00%)
The piece has no discernible organizational scheme, OR it is significantly under 8 or over 11 pages.
Feedback:
I'm deducting some points here because your paper is several pages over the limit. Part of the assignment was to present your research concisely enough to fit into a relatively small page range. In a paper like this, based only on secondary sources, you probably don't need to describe your methodology in detail. Also, I noticed some repetition. Creating an outline might help you avoid saying the same thing in more than one place.
Style and mechanics: 18
Levels of Achievement:
Advanced 28 (14.00%) - 30 (15.00%)
The writing is professional in tone and style, with few to no errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling. “Professional” is defined according to the field and the context (e.g., it may be appropriate for a pastor to use an informal tone in a sermon).
Proficient 25 (12.50%) - 27 (13.50%)
The writing is mostly professional in tone and style, with some errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling.
Developing 1 (0.50%) - 24 (12.00%)
The writing is somewhat unprofessional in tone and style, with frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling.
Not Present 0 (0.00%) - 0 (0.00%)
The tone and style are entirely unprofessional, OR errors are frequent and significant enough to seriously impede readability.
Feedback:
See my notes on grammar. Also, the writing style of your paper was sometimes difficult for me to decipher. Sometimes you used an unusual word where you could have used a simpler word, and I wondered if it was because you were trying not to plagiarize your sources. Of course, this is an admirable goal, but if avoiding the words your source used is going to make your prose awkward, it might be better to quote.
Documentation: 25
Levels of Achievement:
Advanced 28 (14.00%) - 30 (15.00%)
At least 8 sources are used and cited correctly (in-text and at the end) in the documentation style most commonly used in the field.
Proficient 25 (12.50%) - 27 (13.50%)
Five to seven sources are used, and some errors in citation may be present.
Developing 1 (0.50%) - 24 (12.00%)
Fewer than five sources are used, and errors in citation may be frequent.
Not Present 0 (0.00%) - 0 (0.00%)
No sources are cited in-text and/or at the end.
Feedback:
Again, you have an impressive list of sources! Your APA documentation is all correct except that you need to italicize journal titles (not article titles) and volume numbers.
Formatting: 20
Levels of Achievement:
Advanced 23 (11.50%) - 25 (12.50%)
The document is formatted according to the conventions of the chosen genre. This category may include spacing, font, headings, the absence or presence of special sections such as a title page or table of contents, etc.
Proficient 21 (10.50%) - 22 (11.00%)
The document is mostly formatted according to the conventions of the chosen genre.
Developing 1 (0.50%) - 20 (10.00%)
A recognizable attempt is made to conform to the formatting conventions of the chosen genre.
Not Present 0 (0.00%) - 0 (0.00%)
The document formatting is entirely inappropriate to the genre.
Feedback:
See my note about the running head.
Raw Total: 155.00 (of 200)
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