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You do not have a clear argument. Wanting to explain the affect of the Pentagon Papers is not an argument. Stating "that the release of the Pentagon Papers revealed the illegal involvement and overuse of power by the US Government lead to public distrust and anger" is an argument. You are repetitive about "McNamara ensuring..." but there is no description or explanation. 

You make general statements with no explanation or description. What were the activities and/or actions? Why was it secret? Why was there a whistle blower? What about Johnson? Did he not play a role in the Vietnam War? 

There are a lot of grammar, spelling, and tense shifts. I recommend you read your paper out loud, slowly, word for word and you will catch those grammar, tense and/or spelling errors. Also asking someone else to read it is helpful, such as the tutoring or writing centers with your home school or CCCOnline.

You failed to cite your sources correctly and completely in your preferred citation style - MLA, APA or Chicago. Review the Research Folder in the Syllabus Module. You only have 2 secondary sources, you are missing 2 primary and 1 scholarly/academic journal source.  If you have any questions or concerns regarding the feedback and grade, please let me know.

One thing that I saw you missed was the in-text citations. It may be too late, but the minimum requirement for sources was 5, and you only have two.